Roni is a simple stallion, living a peaceful life in the Everfree Forest, not far from Ponyville. He lives in a decent house, alone, and loves pasta. He owns a humble restaurant in Ponyville, where they serve — you guessed it — pasta.
Roni is attacked. Fear pumps through his body, causing him to weaken at a crucial moment, and break down emotionally.

This was done for the Cliffhanger Contest in The Writing Lab group on FIMFiction. It was done hurriedly, but nevertheless, I would like some critique, if that's okay.

Any and all critique or general feedback is greatly appreciated! Thank you for your time!