Attempt at start

by Tarpop2

Rating: teen
Tags: Random, Derpy Hooves, Slice of Life, Alternate Universe, Original Character, Trixie, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic
Length: 3023

A story in which a pony soon discovers that Ponyville isn't what it seems to be.

This is a normal average story about a pony who appears normal at first but then appears not quite like everyone thought. He meets cool ponies and always know how to cheer a mare or colt up. The random genre is because the plot isn't as forward as it seems as it will deal with some timeline bending rules later on in the story.

Published 2013-08-23 19:30:03 UTC
Last updated 2013-08-27 04:02:30 UTC

First day out

--Day 1--

So, I travelled to Ponyville because I used to live in Baltimare, but of course that town sucked. Everyone there kept on worrying that there was going to be danger, albeit there was none. So I packed my bags and headed on the train out of there and into the town mentioned before.

When I got off the train I saw a certain Mare standing next to me. She had a blonde mane and her body was all grey. When I looked at her flank, I notice she had bubbles for a cutie mark. Somehow it was endearing yet I couldn't be distracted by the need of love. "What's your name?" the mare asked me.

"Uh... I don't have one right now. You can just call me Jack," I explained.

"That's pretty awesome. My name is Derpy Hooves," she disclosed. "My cutie mark represents my... personality."

Her face started to lower, indicating a sign of embarrassment. I simply smiled because I thought it looked cute, and asked if she could come with me. Her face brightened up with delight as I held her hand and we walked to the town hall so I could get some form of identification. I made sure my backpack was on me and headed there.

When I got there, I noticed the Mayor Mare was there, and I know it's her because I was asked to come to her when I got to this town. She looked rather friendly so I decided to show her my ID to be converted into Ponyville ID. She looked at the ID and took it and gave it to some people.

"So, when will it be back?" I asked.

"In 5 minutes, because all we need to do is renew the expiration date and change the town," she answered.

Derpy looked at me and blushed. "Hey... can I ask you something?"

I looked at her straight in the eye and smiled. "Yes?"

"Well," she stuttered. "I've been wanting to go the Grand Galloping Gala for a while now, and I was wondering if I could go with you?"

My stomach felt like butterflies. No mare has ever asked me to go to the gala with them, and I just met this pony a couple of minutes ago. I decided to speak up and agree to her answer. She squeed and we talked for a bit. By the time we were done talking, Mayor Mare came back with my new identification card. "Now you can be accepted as a true city of Ponyville."

I thanked the mayor and headed on my way. Derpy wanted me to follow her, so I did. I looked to the building she stopped at and it said "Sugarcube Corner". It sounded strange at first, but so does everything in my life. When we walked in, we saw a bouncing pony making something for the customers I guessed.

"Oh wow Derpy, who's this great guy!?" she said while sounding ecstatic.

"This is Jack; Jack, this is Pinkie Pie."

I looked at this Pink Pony, known as Pinkie Pie. She looked pretty hyper but I could feel there was a depressing backstory to any good Mare. She laughed happily at me and then grabbed my hoof. "Hey, did you know the Gala is in 4 days?"

"Well, no, but," I looked at Derpy while I said this. "Some other pegasus asked me to it."

Pinkie expressed disappointment at me and asked me if I wanted some food. I declined the request and headed on my way with Miss. Hooves. Somehow I felt a little bad about rejecting Pinkie but I have a feeling that she is going to have friends with her to support her.

I started to walk slower because I noticed the expression on Derpy's face, and it didn't look pretty. I asked her what the problem was, and she simply answered that, her job delivering mail hasn't come off to a good start, and she might get fired soon. We then noticed it was about to rain, so we headed inside her house.

Her house was awesome compared to mine. I only lived in an apartment and she lived in a 2 story house with a basement. She smiled and showed me her room, which had so much things in it, like every issue of the Ponyville Express and letters of recommendation.

"My room could... use a bit more work. I just don't know what went wrong with the wallpaper. I ordered Pink and got blue," she expressed in disappointment.

"Have you tried writing a letter back to them?" I asked. "That worked for me."

"I tried," Derpy replied. "But they said since I already put it on I couldn't get a refund."

I heard at knocking at the door. I quickly ran to it to save Derpy the trouble of opening the door herself. I pushed the door and saw a blue mare. She was wearing some outfit that made her look like a wizard, but I quickly ignored that. "What do you want?" I asked.

"The GREAT and POWERFUL Trixie wants to know if Derpy is home."

"Yeah, I'll escort you to her."

I walked over to Derpy's room with Trixie, and noticed she was standing so close to the window looking a little blue. Trixie decided to trot a little closer to Derpy. She patted Derpy on the back, while also trying to cheer her up. "Trixie detects sadness, but she doesn't think you should have it."

"I...I just don't know what went wrong," she sniffled loudly.

I moved closer to Derpy and also tried to cheer her up. "Don't worry, I'll help you to make sure you keep your job."

Derpy smiled and squeed. She let me and Trixie stay in the guest bedroom for now, because tomorrow we were going to help Derpy make sure she becomes the best mail-pony ever!

Author's Note

My first attempt at something at something like this, though the title has a darker reality behind it. By the way, the drawing will obviously be in first person so that means my OC won't show. I'm not too well at drawing so if you like to give a crack at drawing Jack then go right ahead. Oh, and the pictures will probably only be once per chapter. Also, there's now a visual novel I made based off of this chapter, skipping the Mayor's office because there's no puppet of the mayor.

Part 1 at least: https://www.dropbox.com/s/uuc76qqq6i19zkp/Attempt%20at%20Start-1.0-all.zip (It ends after the clouds.)

Teaching a mare some new tricks.

--Day 2--

"Rise and shine sleepyheads!" a familiar voice screeched. I groggled for a bit and then woke Trixie up, since she seemed like a heavy sleeper. When she woke up she complained a lot. "The GREAT and POWERFUL Trixie needs her beauty sleep."

"Well, the great and powerful Trixie needs to get adjusted to new sleep patterns," Derpy teased. Trixie got on her magic outfit and decided to agree to help Derpy. I asked Derpy was she had a problem with. She said she could help Derpy with her mailing techniques, because they were a little sub par. We went outside and Derpy got her mailbag on and went out the front door. We followed her out and seen how she put mail in.

As she started to put the mail in the mailbox Trixie grew worrisome. I seen her run to Derpy and ask her what she was doing. To me it looked like she was doing a pretty good job but I guess beggers can't be choosers.

"Trixie, don't be so skeptical; this is how I always handle the mail," Derpy expressed with delight.

"Yes but..." Trixie explained. "Trixie thinks you should actually open up the mailbox. Also, where did you get that fifth leg?"

Derpy looked confused. "Fifth leg, but this is my front hoof."

I blinked again and saw Derpy had the usual four legs. I heard about this god named Discord and I thought, maybe he's up to this? I thought nothing on it and then saw Derpy open the mailbox, which made Derpy happy. Unfortunately, there was still tons of other people to deliver mail to, so she went to those mailboxes and handed them the mail they deserve for once. Trixie smiled and so did I.

Derpy came back to us after she did her work and hugged us. "Thank you, without you guys I could never experience my dream, and you saved my job."

I smiled then looked up to the sky. Suddenly, it flashed white two times but no one noticed. I brushed it off as thunder and looked back to the rest. I looked nervous at them and they looked confused at me like I just lost my marbles, which of course I didn't.

"What's wrong Jack?" Derpy asked.

"So that's your name, eh?" Trixie smirked. "Anyways, Trixie demands you tell her your problem."

"Well," I begun slowly. "It's starting to rain, so we should get back inside," I finished. They agreed and we headed back to Derpy's house. When we got back outside I noticed there wasn't even a cloud in the sky. I asked Derpy if she could introduce us to anymore people. She told us there was the one nature pony who has a real nice personality.

"Just follow me, and I'll lead you to her," Derpy disclosed excitedly.

We walked with her. I noticed we were very close to the everfree forest, when I noticed a cottage. There was a lot of birdhouses around here and the sounds of animals were inside. I knocked on the door, and heard a very shy-sounding voice on the other.

"W-Who is it?" the voice asked.

"It's a friend of a friend? Could I come in?" I asked gently.

"Well... I guess so," and she opened the door for me. Derpy and Trixie also followed in. The yellow mare poured some tea in a cup and passed me some. I thanked her and then she went to go see Derpy and Trixie.

"Who... is this colt?" she asked.

"Jack; I swear he's good, at least, what I know of him..." Derpy expressed.

"Yes... what's your name?" Trixie asked the shy pony.

"F-fluttershy..." she whispered very quietly.

"Sorry, Trixie didn't catch that."

"Fluttershy," she said a little bit louder.

"Ok, so as I was sayin— WHO IS KNOCKING AT THE DOOR WHEN TRIXIE IS TRYING TO SPEAK!" Trixie exclaimed.

Derpy opened the door and seen a blue pony with a rainbow mane. "Hey Fluttershy, I came to see what you were up to, but I can see that your busy."

She began to leave but then Fluttershy stopped her. "Wait! I want to introduce you to these people. This is Jack; this is Trixie and this is Derpy."

"*Sigh* I know these people, except Jack," Miss. Ecstatic exclaimed. I asked for her name. "You mean you seriously don't know me? I'm Rainbow Dash, the coolest pony you'll ever meet."

I sighed and attempted a smile. I then noticed that Derpy and Trixie were getting sort of bored so I decided to go back to Derpy's place. They followed me to there. When I got there I sat on the couch and Derpy was in front of me. I asked them if they knew anything I didn't.

Trixie took off her magic outfit and wondered what I mean't.

"I mean... okay example, did you see some flashes in the the air," I discussed.

They went silent, awkward silent.

"Well?"

"Um..." Derpy began speaking. "I actually seen those flashes. They flashed twice, right?"

"That's correct."

"Well, that usually means something in this world has been altered. Now, I have no idea what went wrong, but I can tell you that it's not good."

I yawned and started to become tired. The Gala was in two more days and Derpy seemed to of get a confidence boost from meeting me, so it's really okay. I went to sleep with Trixie again. It's platonic obviously, and thought about what the next day would bring.

Author's Note

The image for this is kind of good, except I need a better background. Maybe I'll snatch some from double rainboom... I don't know. Also, Derpy has 5 legs, which is a one-time thing I swear other things will be better. Also, the excuse for the same background is that it's a different location, because it has a mailbox now.

The third day

--Day 3--

Somehow, even though Trixie was a heavy sleeper, still woke up before me. I know this because she woke me up instead of Derpy Hooves and grinned evilly. I asked her why I even sleep with her anyway, because I know I should be sleeping with my love Derpy instead of this mare.

"Because Jack, if Trixie didn't sleep with you, then you could be doing something wrong with Derpy!" Trixie explained.

"That's true, but why would I? She's too innocent," I disclosed.

Trixied grumbled and then Derpy came into the room. She brought something chocolate muffins with her and I asked if I could have one. She laughed and then explained why she made them in the first place, so Trixie and I each took one and decided it was one of the best muffins around.

"So, what do you guys want to do today?" Derpy asked.

"Well," I announced. "I heard about this DJ in town who could give an awesome show?"

"Trixie thinks you mean DJ-PON3," Trixie guessed correctly.

"Correct," I replied.

"Uh... you guys know the Gala is tomorrow," Derpy muttered. "Her sound equipment is being brought in tomorrow, and not today."

I grew sad, but then smiled again once I heard what Derpy said. "Hey, where's your cutie mark?"

"Don't have one," I answered. "Because; if I get a mark on my flank, it means I'll have to live up to that, so I try to balance everything equally."

Derpy was confused, but then she smiled. "I know what we can do, we can go to my friend Twilight!"

I nodded and she lead us to the house. It was a giant tree, which mean't she was probably one of those green freaks. I decided to ignore that. Trixie knocked on the door and then I heard hoofsteps. When the door opened I saw a purple pony (along with a white pony with a purple mane and a orange pony) come to the door. The purple mare looked at me puzzled and asked why I was here.

"The GREAT Trixie wants to meet you, Miss. Twilight," Trixie declared.

"How'd you know my name, anyways, what about Derpy?" Twilight asked.

Derpy ran off to the Ponies. "Hi Applejack, Rarity," she said to the orange pony and the white pony.

"Derpy, I thought you were going here tomorrow to meet up for the Gala?" Rarity asked.

Derpy blushed. "I kinda wanted to introduce you to my date."

I peeked inside and saw Derpy hanging with that Applejack and Rarity and thought it was pretty cool how she knew so many ponies in Ponyville.

Applejack pointed over to me. "Is this your date Derpy?"

"Yes, isn't he cute!" Miss. Hooves exclaimed.

I came into the house and asked Derpy how'll will get to the Gala. She told me she wanted me to go with this group called the mane 6, which are these three people plus Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. I went over to Trixie and asked if she was coming to the Gala, but she said, and I quote: "The GREAT and POWERFUL Trixie needs to practice her magic." Man, excuses like that are awful.

Anyways, I heard Twilight close her door because we left it open all this time, and then her expression grew from happy to serious. "Jack, do you know what anachronic means?"

"Yes," I stated.

"Then this will be easy to explain," Twilight stated. "You see, the god Discord has brought trickery on this world once more, and with it the timeline has events taking place that haven't taken place yet."

"And how do you know it's events that haven't happened yet?" Trixie asked.

"Well, we don't actually, except for the fact that Discord is unfrozen is stone."

"Yeah..." I muttered. "We'll get back to you if we see anything... strange."

Twilight smiled, but then I saw a glimpse of fear in her eyes. Derpy and Trixie both started getting bored but I was actually ecstatic about it all. I believed Twilight on her theory that discord made things appear in the wrong order. I actually know a fortune teller in Baitimare, who I visited one day. She seemed to be telling me my fortune but then halfway she trailed off and said it was closer then expected. I didn't know what the future would hold actually so many dark things to it...

"Can we please go Jack?" Derpy asked me. I succumbed to her desires and the three of us headed back to her place. We said goodbye to the one-half of the mane 6 and we got home in 5 minutes. Derpy asked me if something was bugging me. I told her nothing was and she asked if I could sleep with her.

I slept with her and awaited the Gala. I can't wait, because I never went to such an event. There was only one time I was even close to such an event, but it was alone.

Derpy was a nice mare, but I'm sure there was something she wasn't telling me, because innocent girls usually have a dark backstory to them. Now I should be going to sleep instead of writing this story, but there's still something on my mind that I just can't solve, like a lot of ponies.

Author's Note

Yeah... I was going to update these daily, but my schedule has been a bit busy. Also, I wish there was a tutorial on how to use these puppets, because it only seems like each image is getting better in quality.