Author's Note

So, I feel like I need to say this, the launch of this fiction has not been so great. I am willing to admit that there are some story elements that could use some tweaking but I don't know what's wrong with it in general.

I've been told very little about its problems besides the fact that the description is bad, which I've now remideed, all I want to do now is figure out any other bad story elements and move/change them.

Please just tell me what's wrong and I promise I'll try to fix it. If there's nothing I can do, I'll probably just pull the fic down and leave it. I really want to be a good writer, but I'm not being told what's wrong with what I'm doing.

Please tell me what's wrong with it.

~Zyks

Chapter 2: A Visit From Royalty

As Twilight trotted down the streets of Ponyville, she couldn’t help but feel an overwhelming sense of dread build up in her stomach. She didn’t know what to expect. If there was anything to expect. Maybe it died already, maybe it’s fine, or maybe it broke out of Ponyville general and is running amuck! There was too many possibilities and not enough answers, it was seriously overwhelming Twilight.

Twilight’s worry soon came to a halt as she felt a familiar hoof on her shoulder. Celestia’s radiant gaze set Twilights mood at ease and they continued their way to the hospital.

Once inside, Celestia walked all the way towards the receptionist who seemed to have gone right back into their crossword puzzle. Celestia simply approached the small desk and waited.
The receptionist from before slowly looked up to see Celestia herself standing before her.

“P-P-P-PRincess Celestia!” The mare cried out, in total awe at the being before her. Celestia simply smiled at the poor receptionist and brought her head closet down to the pony.

“Hello there my little pony, I understand that there’s been a recent addition to this hospital?” Celestia asked, her voice a flutter of words on the receptionist’s ears.

“I- uhhhh… Yes! There was, he’s currently undergoing surgery right now! Might be a while before you can see him!” She said, her words crawling all over each other.

“I understand, would it be alright if I waited here? I wouldn’t wish to distract the doctors,” Celestia said.

“Of- Of course! Go ahead! And if you need anything, please let me know!”

“I’ll be sure to keep that in mind,” Celestia said before turning around and finding a seat to sit upon. Once seated, she levitated one of the nearest magazines and began flipping through its pages. Despite the fact that Celestia was calmed and collected, Twilight was still a whirl of emotions. She was currently walking back and forth in the lobby, unable to keep her hooves still.

“Twilight, I would suggest grabbing a seat, I can’t imagine how much longer this surgery must be,” Celestia said, not taking her eyes off of her book.

“But… But there must be something we can do!”

“There is, and it turns out to be your favorite pass time. Reading,” Celestia said, giggling to herself.

“This isn’t the time to read! We have to do something! Can’t you use your magic to heal him?!” Twilight cried out. Celestia let out a small sigh and put down the magazine she was currently reading.

“Twilight, I raise and lower the sun, I have great power but I’m not a healer. I wouldn’t even know where to begin with the injuries you described. It’s best to just let the doctors do what they do best and wait,” Celestia said, picking up the magazine back up to her muzzle.

“But-”

“There is no but’s Twilight. There is and there is not. You and I are not able to help and would only get in the way if we tried to, so we shall not intervene,” Celestia said, putting the magazine fully down and taking a harsher tone with her student.

“I...I understand… I just wish I could do something…” Twilight said, looking down at the ground. Celestia’s slightly hardened face softened and she opened her left wing up.

“Come here Twilight,” Celestia said, gesturing to her opened wing. Twilight slowly trotted over to Celestia’s open wing and felt said wing embrace her. Twilight’s nerves were coming to ease and she couldn’t help but lean into the winged hug.

“Twilight, you did everything you could, and I’m so proud of you for bringing this… creature to the hospital. I’m quite certain if it wasn’t for you, he’d be… well… dead,” Celestia said, speaking softly and calmly to her student.

“I… I know but I still…. Hear its screams,” Twilight said, tears again welling up in her eyes as her mind started to slither its way back to the event not 30 minutes ago.

“I understand Twilight, it is a horrific thing to see. No pony, or animal, or being should have to suffer that kind of torment… If you don’t mind me asking though, you said it was brought here by a portal?” Celestia said, trying to steer the conversation away from the male.

“I… Yes, it was like hearing a lighting bolt… Or a book being ripped in half… It’s hard to describe.”

“What can you tell me about it? Do you think it was magical in nature?”

“... Well… Yes. I could feel the power coming off of it.”

“Did you recognize the power?”

“No… not even a little, it felt… full of hate and anger… You don’t think Sombra-”

“Sombra’s magic is powerful, but I don’t think he could create a portal such as that. Even then, his focus would be on the Crystal Empire, not here in Ponyville.”

“... Then I don’t know what could have caused this…” Twilight said, her head sagging downwards.

“We will figure this out one step at a time, okay? Right now, our best chance to find out what happened is to interview this creature and ask him ourselves when he fully recovers,” Celestia said, bringing her neck down to nuzzle Twilight. After a few seconds, Twilight started to nuzzle back.

The two remained that way for a while, Celestia's wing draped over Twilight’s shoulder as the two began to read the magazine’s around them. Twilight reading them so fast that she decided to read them again just for the hell of it. But the entire time during their wait, Celestia herself could only think about what she will discover. What possibilities this creature holds and what could have caused it to land here. What evil magic must have ripped a portal that large in the fabric of reality.

She didn’t need to ponder too much on this topic though, as twenty minutes later another nurse pony walked around a corner. She was covered in scrubs still but seemed to be done with whatever operation they performed in the back. Their eyes glanced over towards Celestia and they seemed to do a double take as they almost fell over.

Celestia, seeing this, removed her wing from Twilight and trotted forward towards the pony. The pony in scrubs stared at Celestia in total awe.

“Hello there my little pony!” Celestia said with a smile.

“H-Hi…” The pony in scrubs said.

“How is our guest?”

“He-he uhh.. He’s stable. We just moved him to a room… Had to get two beds together since he’s so tall…”

“Would it be alright if I went to see him?” Celestia asked.

“I… Yes of course! It’s just that…” She looked over her shoulder, her face turning into a grimace as she starts to remember what she’s seen.

“I understand what he may look like but I’d still rather see him for myself,” Celestia said.

“Yes, my princess. If you would follow me,” The scrubbed pony then started walking down the hall, presumably towards where the creature was. Twilight got up from her seat and followed swiftly with guards right behind her.

“I… I’ll just warn you that his injuries are rather… sever…” The nurse said.

“How bad is it?” Twilight asked from behind.

“I… I can’t really say… the doctor would know more,” the scrubbed pony said just in time as they approached a door. Behind it they could hear ponies running around and talking behind the door.

“Are you sure you want to see him?” The nurse pony said, genuine concern in her eyes.

“I understand,” Celestia said and ever so slowly walked forward and into the room. There were ponies running around the room, checking his states with magic, that I.V. Fluid are flowing and that the bed is comfortable enough for the creature to lay on.

The creature itself is covered in gauze up to its torso. Its head was still damaged but was clearly not nearly as injured as the rest of it. Its body though… what remained was questionable at best. It didn’t need to go through amputation, thankfully, but its mutilated form was horribly disfigured. Whatever it was before is practically gone, Celestia herself wouldn’t even be able to tell its alive if it wasn’t for the heart monitor’s constant beeping.

The doctors that were attending to the creature didn’t seem to pay Celestia any mind as they were still running around. It wasn’t until Celestia let out a loud cough that the doctors stopped and looked at her.

“Celestia!” One of the doctors spurted out before all of them dropped into a bow.

“Please, this is not the time to praise. I simply wish to see the creature and know what’s happening here…” Celestia said, as her mask of royalty seemed to have cracked at the sight before her. The ponies and doctors before rose up and stood at attention each of them looking towards one another as they couldn’t help but wonder themselves. One of the unicorns walked on out from the rest, his brown mane and yellow fur standing out from the rest.

“I can answer any questions you may have, Princess,” the doctor said.

“What do you know about the creature?” Celestia said, taking closer steps toward said creature.

“Well, it’s male… has chimp-like anatomy. We think it’s an omnivore, but we didn’t want to damage its face so it's a simple theory right now… Have you seen anything like this before?” The doctor asked.

“Not once in my life have I seen anything closely resembling this… thing… It looks like a hairless Diamond Dog….” Celestia said, as she casted a spell over the creature, trying to detect any abnormalities that she may find.

“That’s what we thought too, but its arms are too lanky,” The doctor said, Celestia soon stopped her scan once she found nothing wrong with the thing.

“Was there anything foreign on it when it came here? Magical signatures?”

“That’s the thing… There was… No magical signatures,” The doctor said, still puzzling over what he said.

“Nothing?” Celestia said, confusion ever prevalent in her voice.

“Not even the smallest fragment of magic. I understand Twilight teleported the beast here with her but we didn’t even detect her magic on it.”

“But that’s impossible!” Twilight said.

“That’s what we said…”

“Do you know when it’ll be awake again?” Celestia asked, filing away that little tidbit of information.

“We put him in a medically induced coma, the pain would be unbearable if he were awake, so we decided it’s best to keep him down until a majority of his skin is healed.”

“How long will that process be?” Celestia asked.

“Uh… A few weeks maybe? We’re starting magical treatment now but we can only do so much to speed up the healing process. Everything else has to come from him,” The pony doctor said, gesturing to the creature in the bed.

“I see,” Celestia said her head a blur with ideas.

“A question if you will-” Celestia continued “- When do you think would be feasible to move him to the Canterlot infirmary?”

“I don’t see a reason to move him at all. He’s healing just fine and I’d rather not jeopardize his healing right now if we can’t help it,” Celestia looked down at the pony doctor. He had a point, they knew nothing about the biology or physiology of this creature. It was probably better to just let it sit and heal right now. That only lead to one problem of security. Celestia turned around towards her guards and gave them an assignment.

“Guards, I want you stationed outside of this room for the next few weeks, no pony besides medical staff, along with Twilight and her friends, are allowed inside. Understood?” Celestia said. Her guard ponies simply gave a salute and walked outside of the door, taking their positions.

“Princess?” Celestia looked over her shoulder to see Twilight, her gaze filled with confusion.

“Twilight, I want you to gather your friends and tell them what has happened.”

“But… why are we allowed in, what’s your plan?” Twilight asked, confusion still present on her face.

“If this… being is of intelligence like us, then I wish for us to make friends with him. I don’t know what has transpired for it to be in this sort of condition but I want him to know that we are not his enemies and mean him no harm.”

“But… what if he’s more… animalistic?” Twilight asked.

“Then I’m quite certain Fluttershy can handle taking care of it. Regardless, it's important to gather your friends, we may be dealing with a dangerous situation right now… Especially if that portal appears again…” Celestia said, not even looking over at Twilight but instead finding her gaze upon the being warped gauze.

“I… I understand Princess. I’ll get them as soon as I can!” With that Twilight disappeared with a small pop of magic and she left Celestia alone with the other doctors in the room.

“If you could all perhaps leave, I’d like to see the specimen for myself,” Celestia said. Swiftly, the doctors left after one last check. Eventually Celestia was left alone with the alien creature, the beeping of the heart monitor being the only thing to be heard. But suddenly, and without warning, Celestia’s royal mask dropped as she looked down at this poor… thing.

“I’m so sorry for… whatever caused you to go through this…” Whatever had caused this, better have been a freak accident or whoever did would receive the highest of punishments. That she would make sure.

There was a pop behind Celstia and she turned around to the element barriers. All of them looked confused as though they had just been woken up.

“What in tarnation could it be right now Twilight?!” Applejack yelled out, still blinking her eyes awake.

“I must agree with AJ, darling, it is far too late for this nonsense,” Rarity said, trying her best to freshen up her mane.

“I just put every animal to sleep…” Fluttershy said, her man and tail noticeably shorter.

“Yeaaaa, what’s it this time egghead? I got a lot of work tomorrow at Cloudsdale. Gonna be a heavy storm tomo-”

“Yea! What is it Twi Twi! Spooky monsters?! Alien invaders?! Discord betrayed us?!” Pinkie said, pulling a cannon out of nowhere with a match at the ready to light it.

“Not exactly,” Celestia said, her royal mask back on.

“Princess Cel-”

“Please, let us move on from this, I’ve had this happen four times today,” Celestia said. The ponies in the room calmed down quickly before suddenly each and every single one of them laid their eyes on the being laid out on the makeshift bed.

“What in good heavens…” Rarity sputtered out.

“I… I ain’t ever… seen…” Applejack said, her eyes widening in horror at the sight.

“Twilight, did you not explain the situation to your friends prior to bringing them here?” Celestia asked, her gaze shifting over to her student.

“I… Uhhh… I thought it’d be better to show them…” Twilight said, her eyes darting around the room. Celestia stared at Twilight for a few more seconds before she steadied her breath and returned her attention to the new mares.

“Where would you like me to start?” Asked Celestia.

“Hold up! You want us to take care of this thing?!” Rainbow Dash exclaimed, still thinking over Celestia’s words.

“I-I mean-”

“I would appreciate it if you would befriend him, yes,” Celestia said, interrupting Fluttershy.

“I don’t personally see a reason for us to not be friendly to him. I mean he hasn’t done anything wrong,” Rarity piqued up.

“But how do we know he won’t? Far as we know he’s just biddin’ his time,” Applejack said, throwing side glances towards the creature.

“Oh PUHLEASE! I’m going to throw him the biggest and bestest get well party ever! So that way, he’ll already want to be our friend! YAAAAAY!” Pinkie said, pulling out her cannon again and firing confetti into the air.

“Applejack’s right, what if it tries to do something dangerous? We don’t know what this thing can do!” Rainbow Dash said.

“Settle down,” Celestia said in a firm tone.

“I trust each and every one of you to earn his favor, his trust and his friendship when he is to awaken. I know you ponies can, you’ve done it before with Discord! Whatever the being is, I doubt he’s more powerful than Discord!” At that, the mares looked at each other with determination.

“I not only believe you can gain its trust, I know you can,” Celestia said, causing the mares to rally together in a cheerful shout.

“Twilight, I trust you and your friends to see to the care for this being once it wakes up. Until then, I’d like for you and Fluttershy to check up on the being once a day for the next few weeks, can you do that?” Celestia asked, her face turned to her star pupil.

“Yes! I promise Fluttershy and I will do our best!” Twilight exclaimed.

“Excellent, if that is all then, I believe I should talk to my sister about this rather recent development. Not every day we find a new species,” With that Celestia exited out of the door.

“Alright girls-” Twilight said, gathering everypony’s attention, “-I think we should start by making a list of things to do when our new friend wakes up!” Immediately, the room is filled with groans.

Celestia was outside of the room for maybe ten seconds before she heard the sounds of disapproval from inside. She merely rolled her eyes and continued to cast her teleportation spell. Twilight was a smart pony, but she never knew how to read a room.

Celestia, though, had more important matters to attend to. One being her sister.

With a flick of her horn, Celstia travelled far from the small village of Ponyville up to the tall mountains of Canterlot. And with another poof of magic she stood tall in her sister's private quarters. And just as Celestia turns around, she sees a sight that bemuses her greatly.

She saw her sister laying on her back, legs spread apart and face flushed red. While on top of her was one of Luna’s very own night guards, seemingly stopped in the middle of ravaging her. Celestia and Luna shared a look between each other for a couple seconds, words unable to come to each other’s mouth’s.

Suddenly, and without warning, Celestia bursts out into laughter. Her voice reverberating around her as her wails and cries of laughing seemed to have no end.

Luna on the other hoof, was shaken out of her daze and pulled the guard pony off of her and shoved him to the side of her bed, all the while Celestia laughed her ass off.

“Sister! This had better be of importance!” Luna cried out, her face still flushed red. But her voice seemed to have fallen on deaf ears as Celestia continued to cackle and roar with laughter. Luna eventually let out a small groan and eventually cast a small sound bubble around her sister, whos laugh seemed to grow only more and more ferocious.

“Should I leave?” Luna turned her head to her lover and her demeanor softened.

“I don’t imagine my sister would show up here unless it was important… Perhaps it would be best for you to go,” Luna said, still angry.

“Hey, it was nice while it lasted,” The guards pony said, grabbing Luna’s hoof. Luna looked away from her sister and towards her guard pony and simply smiled at him.

The sweet moment was cut off by more inane laughter.

“But yeah, I should get going,” The guards pony said, hopping off of the bed and collecting his armor.

“I’ll be seeing you soon,” Luna said, looking directly at her guard's pony, her lashes simply fluttering upon eye contact.

“And I can’t wait for it,” The guards pony said, before walking past the sound bubble shield and leaving Luna with her now insane sister. The second the door slammed shut, Luna’s smile dropped and her attention turned to her sister whose lungs haven’t somehow collapsed.

“Tia! This had better be important!” Luna said, casting her magic again to drop the sound bubble that surrounded Celestia. Celstia didn’t seem to notice though.

“TIA!” Luna screamed out. Celestia, after a few agonizing minutes slowly broke her laughter down, a few small giggles escaping every now and then.

“I- ha- I’m so sorry, I just - heheheaha- I’m not used to seeing you at the bottom!” Celestia said.

“That was the first time, and last time, you’ll ever catch me during such activities!” Luna exclaimed, the blushing on her cheeks returning. Celestia let out a breath of air and finally seemed to calm down fully.

“Well, it looked like you two were having fun,” Celstia said, her smile coming down on her face.

“Twas a heavenly time!”

“I’m sure it was, Lulu, but onto more important matters.”

“Yes, why don’t you tell me the exact reasoning for you to be here?”

“Well, for one, it’s your turn now as the moon is fully risen and two… My pupil has discovered a new species,” Celestia said, smile falling off completely.

“New species how?” Luna asks, now curious herself.

“We’re not entirely sure yet… Its entrance was rather interesting if I recall Twilight's letter correctly.”

“I feel as though I’m missing something.”

“Well, there was a lot that happened in the last hour.”

“Is it an attack from a conspiring kingdom?”

“No, doubtful, I’ve never seen anything like this in all of Equestria… In all of Equis now that I think of it.”

“Hmmm… You wouldn’t come to me right now unless there’s something you need me to do…”

“Correct.”

“What is it you wish for me to do, Tia?”

“I want you to look into this being’s dreams, see if there’s anything to point out who and what it is and if it posses a danger to us.”

“That’s all? I can do that easily.”

“And when you’re done with that, to get on the throne.”

“Pfft, no pony still visits but I’ve learned to live with it.”

“Yes, I’m quite certain you’re finding companionship elsewhere.”

“I hate you…”

“Does the night last forever with him?”

“That’s not funny!” Luna said, a chuckle escaping out of Celestia's lips.

“I would still like you to investigate any way you can. I already have Twilight and her friends there physically in case anything happens but I’d rather avoid a fight if I can help it.”

“... Alright… Fine, I’ll look into the thing’s dreams and tell you what I find out,” Luna said, getting out of her bed and sitting down on the floor.

“Excellent, I’ll get out of your mane now so you can focus on that,” Celestia turned around and started to walk her way out of the room. But before she exited fully, she stopped at the doorway and turned towards her sister one last time.

“By the way, a good choice out of all your guards, gold star,” Celestia quickly exited the room, a pillow being thrown against the wall the white alicorn was previously at. Luna simply stared at her door for a couple seconds, calming her nerves. She let out a small sigh and then began to work her magic.

Whatever this creature was and whatever its motives were, Luna was sure to find out.

The hospital was quiet. The ponies staffed there earlier today have long since left and have gone home, leaving a skeleton crew to keep an eye on their new patient. The two guard ponies stationed outside of the said creature's room were currently sleeping on the hard tiled floor. They had been awake for hours and with no rest. They simply passed out.

What they failed to do as guard ponies though was notice the sound of approaching steps. The pitter patter of two feet. One hoof and the other a claw.

Discord stood in front of the door, looking down at the two passed out ponies before him and scoffing.

“My, my! Tia should make these guard ponies train more if they’re going to just sleep half the time,” Discord said, conjuring a blanket into his hands and laying it on the passed out ponies. He then started to snicker to himself about what he intended to do later.

He stepped around the ponies and grabbed the wall, quickly pushing it open as though it were a door and then closing it behind himself, making sure to not cause too much noise. Discord, after wiping his hands clean, turned around to see something the creature.

Discord looked it up and down for a few seconds, making sure he was seeing it correctly, before letting out a groan of complaint.

“A human?! That’s what caused all this ruckus?!” Discord said, annoyed as all hell to see a human of all things.

“This thing’s barely worth the trouble! Why is everypony throwing a fit over this thing?! It’s not like it’s anything special!” Discord exclaimed, putting his hands on his head in frustration before he realized something important.

“... How did he get here?” Discord said, as he then looked over to the human, a smile slowly coming across his features.

“Oh, this will be quite fun…”