The Black Eyes of the Nightmare

This story is a crossover of MLP and my own OC's (non-pony related), which they interact with each other. First, the Moon Fox, then Victor shows up, and then I slap several more at you. Lots of OC's, but I think I did fine with this story, overall.

When I first started writing, it was intended to end before the major antagonist showed up, AKA The Forbidden One, but then I felt like I should introduce for OC's to spice it up. The Moon Fox was originally intended to go with Victor back to Vremena, and they would never see Equestria ever again. A My Little Dashie style ending, but I'm not a big fan of sad endings. I like it when the protagonist wins, especially when winning turned out to be incredibly hard for them.

About the combat, it felt like everyone could jump onto action, except for the Mane Six, which is where it story started, so I created the Harmony character, a being stronger than Celestia, a fusion of the Six. But this isn't Dragonball Z. Yes, there is talk about energy, but this story didn't really involve much screaming to get more power. I can, however, list the characters in the order of power:

The Forbidden One > Harmony (Mane 6 combined) > Victor (transformed) > Groves (transformed) > Jin (transformed) > Celestia and The Moon Fox > Luna > The rest

Victor, Jin, and Groves all have transformations, but in base form, they'd be weaker than Princess Luna.

Also, not too big of a romance fan. Yes, I do see potential in it, but I like to stick mostly to the love someone has for another in friendship. That doesn't include benefits. The point is, the Internet is a place where the slightest nudge of affection can lead to unspeakable terror in terms of visuality. I know love can be beautiful, but some wish to bastardize of thoughts on it and turn into something that is frowned upon. I absolutely despise those who spend time creating damnations of the childhood I loved. Right in the childhood, bro.

The OC's will feature on an animated film that is currently under progress. Ask me if you're interested.

Good show, and I loved how it inspired me to write a 70,000 word story about it XD.

I like to thank my friend Jin for going over this and giving me constructive critique. It was really helpful.

Finally done with this story. Now what to do?