Problems With The Plot

In a cold and dark place underneath the ocean, was Rapture. Where neither law or god can questioned the man’s decisions. The man can make his own decisions and learn from the mistakes. A tall man with a brown striped suit paced around in anger. “Is she ready yet doctor?”

A stallion in a white coat shook his head. “No, the subject seems to be unstable.”

“What do you mean, Doctor Statesman?” At this point, Andrew Ryan was furious. Subject pegasus was failing on him and he wasn’t going to waste top dollar something that’s maybe dead. “Start over.”

“Excuse me sir?”

Andrew Ryan put his arm on the table and shoved the things onto the floor, shattering it into pieces.“I said start over! Or else you want me to stop finding the cure for you?”

The stallion shook his head. “Please, don’t sir! I want to be normal again!”

Adrew smirked. The stallion wasn’t really one, he used to be a human up until the plasmids that was supposed to give you the strength of a stallion turned him into one. Ryan knew he wanted to be normal again so he used that against him. “Then throw this thing out.”

“It’s—I mean her name is Scootaloo sir.” He corrected him with a shutter.

Ryan rolled his eyes and began to walk away. “When I come back it better be dead and that trigger phrase working!” He called out to him.

Statesman turned over to the right in his chair. He looked at the small orange pegasus floating in the tube filled with water, wires were pludged into her body.

She had his blood in her, Ryan used his dna when he turned and morphed her into a small filly. It was only a matter of weeks she aged into a filly. Statesman trotted to the tube and placed a hoof glass then sighed. “I don’t wanna kill you, Scootaloo.”

“You don’t have to.”  Statesman jumped at the sound of a caring and lovely. Turning around, he saw a white alicorn appeared in the middle of his lab. “I can take you somewhere you’ll be safe from Ryan.”

Statesman didn’t reply or move. He just stared in fear. “Let me help you, Statesman. You and Scootaloo can be around ponies like you. You have my word.”

“Where? Who are you?” He asked, backing away from the mare. “What are you!?”

"I'm Princess Celestia and I'm here to help you."

Was she really going to help him? He wanted to be human, but he knew Ryan was lying to him about the cure. Scootaloo meant the world to him and he didn’t want her to wake up inside a tube.

He got up from the floor and began pressing buttons on the tube.Smoke began coming out of the tube as Scootaloo was released from inside and fell into his forelegs. “I’ll do it. I’ll go with you.”

Celestia smiled as her horn began to light up, a yellow magical aura sourded Statesman and Scootaloo. Then they was gone in a bright flash and Statesman made his new life in Ponyville with Scootaloo.

The moments when he met another scientist and told him his secrets. He met with a mare at his birthday thrown by Pinkie Pie and soon they fell in love after that. He told her he had a daughter, but not about Rapture or Ryan.

He stared at the filly sleeping in her bed and smiled. “You’re going to become successful when you grow up. “ Lifting Scootaloo’s foreleg, small words in printed in her skin made Statesman frowned. He needed to work on the phrase no matter what.

In a matter of months, the plasmids made him insane making him forget his promise and used the phrase on Scootaloo.