Fluttershy Gets The Sharingan

And everyone, by the way, I understand that most of you don't like the lack of emotional buildup between the attempt of murder. Well, Angel is a bunny. Kind of hard to Implement what he is saying unless it is through his actions.

Also, regarding why Angel attempted the murder, I got 2 pms asking detailed reasons why he did it. Well, I'd think that is you saw someone with red eyes, who knocked you out just by looking at you, you'd feel uncomfortable enough too. Plus he's evil :/. If the actual show wasn't kid oriented he probably would have tried this in the real show.

Another complaint I would like to explain is regarding her discovering the Sharingan. One person suggested she should have conducted tests on her, but in one of the episodes, she attempted to do experiments on Pinkie Pie, which proved to be a failure, I just figured she wouldn't need to bother this time, considering Fluttershy's fragile nature and such. I would think she'd have the common sense that Fluttershy is a bit too weak minded for tests.

The next thing is how fast the story went by. I'm sorry, that was the fault on my part. I guess there wasn't enough conveyance of emotion to make Angel's death significant. I apologize for this. This was the mistake on my part.

It is for these reasons, that I will be updating the story, adding new paragraphs, in an attempt to convey more feeling and go into the depths of Angel's mind. So if you would like to read the new edited version, please follow so you won't miss it. Also, the sequel is out, it doesn't directly involve Fluttershy though. Rarity gets contacts, give it a read if you want. It wasn't exactly as popular as I had hoped, but maybe you'll like it .

Again thanks for reading the story, you guys mean everything to me. Again, I will attempt to be a better writer next time we meet.