Cnideria - Fluttershys New Friend

by TP Night

Chapter 1

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Author's Note

This story was NOT originally created by me.
The original version was written by PonyCleverBlue at Deviant-Art, as a background story for a character he drew.

Problem is, HIS version was basicallly just a wall-of-text.
NO structure, no formation, no nothing.

So I offered to completely overhaul the whole thing, re-writing it from scratch and editing anything that needed editing.

So to recap - I did NOT write THE ORIGINAL, but I DID write THIS VERSION of the story, WITH the original authors permission, blessing and supervision.


Chapter 1

It all began on a sunny day, as Fluttershy was trotting along the seashore and singling quietly and softly to herself. After meeting up with a friendly family of seals, she had decided to take a relaxing trot along the shore to feel the warmth of the sun combined with the gentle breeze from the ocean. It was still early in the morning, so nopony else was around except herself and the seals she had already left. After an hour or so, she was considering turning back and return to Ponyville, when she suddenly heard a quiet voice.
"Um... Excuse me..." the voice said.

Fluttershy looked around to see who had spoken, but could not see anypony.

She heard the voice again.

"Down here. Do you.. have any.. water? Please?"

Fluttershy looked down and saw a small seapony mare lying on the sand.
But it looked different from the seaponies Fluttershy knew about.
This one was smaller, blue, and a bit transparent. She could see the sand beneath trhough its body as it lay there. Her head was covered in thick strands of pink mane that almost looked a bit like earthworms. With much effort, the small creature lifted her fin and once again asked,
"...Water?"

Fluttershy reacted quickly and pulled out her waterbottle from her saddlebag.
"Oh my, yes of course! Here you go. You poor creature, what happened to you? Are you hurt?!" she said and asked, as she poured some of the water over the creature slowly.
The small pony-like creature immediately moisturized when she got the water poured on her,
and a few seconds later she had literally absorbed the water into her body.
"ahh! THANK YOU!" she said as she stood up on her tailfin and started stretching her body and fins, as if she'd been napping. "I'm okay by the way, but a few more minutes and it might not have ended so happily!"
She looked up at Fluttershy and extended her right fin, "Name's Cnideria! It's nice to meet a pony to save my life."
Fluttershy blushed and gave a shy smile as she extended her own hoof toward Cniderias fin,
and gently shook it. "I'm Fluttershy. It's nice to meet you as well, Cnideria."
Cnideria grinned widely, and Fluttershys smile went from shy to a more warm and friendly one, and then shifted again to a curious expression. "Uhm.. If you don't mind me asking..
What kind of pony, or pony-like creature are you? I don't think I've ever seen anypony like you before, and I know most creatures.. If that's not too personal of course, you don't have to answer unless you want to.."

Cnideria giggled a little in response, and started turning around, showing Fluttershy her entire body. "I'm a Jellyfish Pony. I can swim, I'm see-trhough, and... thing like that. Oh, and we're quite rare in these waters, we Jellies come from far down south, we're here visiting!"
Fluttershy smiled at the little ponys enthusiasm. "But if you're basically a jellyfish, shouldn't you avoid direct sunlight? What happened? Why were you lying here on the beach several hooflenghts from the water?" She asked, sounding both curious and a bit worried.

Cnideria smiled carelessly.
"Funny story, actually! I saw a couple of ponies sun tanning and thought it looked like fun,
so I crawled up and wanted to try it myself too!"
Fluttershy was surprised by the sheer stupidity of it all, but being the Element of Kindness and all, she just smiled awkwardly. "Well, next time you better remember Sun Screen. And always have some water with you, and stay closer to the waterline so you can crawl back."
Cnideria giggled, "Yeah" Why didn't I think of that before...? Thank you!"
She crawled closer to Fluttershy. "I wish we could talk a bit longer.. I'd invite you to my place, but.. it's too far away, and you can't breathe underwater.."

Fluttershy gave a gentle smile, and let Cnideria climb up on her hoof so she could lift her up and look her closer in the eyes. "You know.. I could bring you back home to my place..
if you're okay with that of course.. I've invited some friends over, and I'm sure they would all like to meet you."
Cnideria bounced with excitement on Fluttershys hoof, reminding her a bit of Pinkie Pie.
"That's an amazing idea! I love meeting new ponies! Of course I'll go!" She smiled brightly
and rolled her eyes daydreaming. "I can't wait to meet them! We'll have so much fun and they're all gonna love me and I'm gonna love all of them and we're all gonna be friends!"

// End of chapter 1

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