A Trip to Cloudsdale

by ddeleted

Rating: everyone
Tags: Adventure
Length: 524

After Scootaloo learns how to fly, Rainbow Dash brings her up to Cloudsdale with the rest of the Crusaders, and their older sisters.

After Scootaloo learns how to fly, Rainbow Dash brings her up to Cloudsdale with the rest of the Crusaders, and their older sisters.

Some sample writing I decided to whip up, and am hoping to get some help with so I can grow as a writer.

Published 1970-01-01 00:00:00 UTC
Last updated 2014-09-05 00:26:18 UTC

Chapter 1

“Rarity! Rarity!” Sweetie Belle screeches, bursting into the Carousel Boutique, tumbling into the back room, ramming into the white and purple mare.

“Guess what?” She she gasps, with a giddish grin spread across her face.

“Sweetie Belle! I told you, be more careful while I’m working! I’m almost finished with the most elegant of gowns, for a very important pony!” Sighing, Rarity encases her younger sister, in a blue aura, lifting the excited filly off of her, and picks up a few more things, releasing Sweetie Belle onto the ground. “Now, what is so important that you needed to interupt me?”

“Sorry Rarity…” Sweetie Belle mumbles, shuffling her hoof on the ground, but changes in tone, to begin her senseless ramble about the invitation from Rainbow Dash.

“Today, I was at the clubhouse with Apple Bloom and Scootaloo, and after trying to earn our cutie marks in Parkour, by going from tree to tree, starting at the clubhouse, Scootaloo fell, but then she flew, like actually flew! She was so excited we ran to tell Rainbow Dash, and Scootaloo showed her her new flying skills, and Rainbow Dash said how it was ‘so awesome,’ and she invited Apple Bloom, and me to go to Cloudsdale with them. She also invited you and Apple Jack too!” Stopping for a deep breath, she ends with one last sentence, “Won’t that be fun!”

“Gaah…” Rarity stammers, “Well, I… I’d love to but… but…” glancing around for an excuse Rarity could make up, “I… Need to wash my mane!”

Sweetie Belle lightly shakes her head, mane bouncing back and forth. “Your mane doesn’t look dirty!”

Rarity silently curses for using such a lame excuse, especially since it was the exact thing she said to Pinkie Pie in order to plan her surprise party. “Well,” Rarity sighs, knowing that she better tell the truth, because it will come out sooner or later. "I'm... afraidofh..." She mumbles.

"You're what?"

"I'm... Afraid of... Afraid of," she stammers "I'm afraid of heights! There I said it!"

Sweetie Belle shakes her head, causing her candy colored mane to bounce around. "Rarity, it's okay everypony is afraid of something,” nuzzling her sister in attempts to comfort her.

"Oh, I know, I know, but still… I really don’t want to go back to Cloudsdale after what happened at the Young Flyers Competition,” she sighs, shuddering at the very thought of going back to Cloudsdale after that fiasco. A near death experience isn’t something any pony can get over easily.

“C’mon Rarity,” Sweetie Belle pleads, trying to guilt her sister into coming to Cloudsdale with the rest of the Crusaders, and her sisters two friends. “Please?” she cries, long and drawn out, with her special “puppy eyes” look, hoping that will win over the stubborn mare.

Rarity sighs, knowing that she is no match for Sweetie Belle’s cute and innocent looks. “Oh… Fine. I gue-”

“Yay! I gotta go tell Apple Bloom and Scootaloo! Thank you Rarity!” Sweetie Belle squeals enthusiastically, racing out the door with a bright smile.

Shaking her mane, Rarity smiles, but quickly freezes Wait a minute… Parkour? “Sweetie Belle!"