The Beast of War

Hello Everyone. Look I am very sorry about this but I am going to have to take at least this version of "The Beast of War" a major overhaul. I know this is not what you expect but I hope you can hold out a little bit longer.

Just so you can see where I am thinking of taking this, I have been thinking of using the anime "Overlord" as inspiration to create a better of the story.

Here is a sneak peek at what I am thinking about:

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Rainbow Dash, the element of loyalty, was running through the Everfree Forest as fast as her feet can take her. "Why is she not flying?" you may ask. Well thanks to the Caribou taking control of Equestria, all mares the young and the old are reduced to slavery with the pegasi and unicorns of what makes them unique. Rainbow panting as she looked behind her to see her pursuers closing in on her.

"Get back here and take your punishment like a good C****!" shouted a caribou slaver. His companions close behind him. As the chase continues someone or something was watching. The stranger's eyes narrow as it continued their observation. Once they pass by the stranger, an arrow was launched at the last pursuer . The arrow hit its' mark at the neck, killing him instantly. This continued on until on Rainbow and the slaver remained.

The slaver caught up and tackled Rainbow to the ground. "Now I got you b****!" he cried in victory, "And for punishment who wants a go first?" He looks behind and sees no one. "Huh, where is everyone?"

"Letsss jussst sssay they are no longer your concern." a voiced hissed from the forest. Suddenly they were surrounded by a multitude of creatures. Every single one had a varying degree of animal like features. From simply have ears and/or tales to being a full blown anthropomorphic. While vastly different they all share the same symbol on their person.

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So think I should go for this?
Please let me know.