The Human Chronicles: A human in the Rainbow factory. (rewrite)

by Somestrangeguy

Rating: teen
Tags: Original Character, Rainbow Dash, Gore, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Dark, Alternate Universe, Human, Other
Length: 1044

This is the story about Jake, just another normal brony.
One day Jake falls trough a portal and find himself in the middle of the Rainbow Factory.

DISCLAIMER: The concept of this story is not mine, I asked if I could do a rewrite and post it here, the answer was yes.

Original story: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/3814/The-Human-Chronicles%3A-The-human-in-the-Rainbow-Factory

NOTE: I just want people to know that a serious rework/rewrite of this part is on it's way, but it WILL take time as I am in the middle of my exams etcetera etcetera and so on.

Published 2012-05-03 18:34:01 UTC
Last updated 2012-05-03 18:34:01 UTC

A walk.

It is such a beautiful day, I'm wondering how I managed to sit inside for so long.
Well the answer is really simple, ponies.
I have spent more time on the computer since I started watching My Little Pony, listening to pony-songs, watching PMV's and last but not least reading fan-fics.
To be honest, it feels like I have become a part of something bigger than myself, finally it feels like I belong somewhere.
I am a brony and proud of it!

"Hey Jake!" Ugh! I can recognize that voice everywhere, my neighbour.
I never really liked him, so I'm just gonna do what I always do, ignore him.
"Hey Jake, I was just wondering if you wanted to watch the big game with me tonight?"
So much for ignoring, "Nah, can't." I reply casually "Got a date."
Yes I lied, but I hate football and I hate him, so why not.

Right now I just walk, I'm not really the "walking" type, but since today is so bright and sunny, I decided it would be a shame to sit in all day, even to watch ponies.
So here I am, strolling out to the outskirts of the town, and into the nearby woods.
I've always loved being outside, especially in a oak forest on a sunny day.
The rays of gold shining trough the bright green leafs, a chill breeze cuddling with my hair.
That is paradise.

But something feels weird, some sort of tension in the air.
Almost like if the air itself alive, as if tons of electrically charged particles swirling around, giving of an almost invisible light and soundless cracks as they bounce into each other at speeds higher than any mortal human being can imagine.
It's magical.

BOOOOM!

I'm flying, no, tumbling through the air, being thrown by a shock-wave.
The ground is closing in on me and I prepare myself, this will hurt.

eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee........

That ringing in the ears, that god-damn ringing.
I can't hear anything because of it, nor can I think clearly as it invades and occupies all of my brain.
So here I am, struggling with getting up and finding my balance, can't hear anything, and my head is pounding like hell.

Looking over to the direction the blast came from I see nothing but a great big crater.
Regaining my balance I try to move towards the crater only to fail miserably several times.
The ringing is fading now, as I try once again to reach the crater edge, so I can behold what it was that caused such a blast.

I am shocked when I see what is there, nothing, absolutely nothing.
just a great big empty black hole, floating in mid air in the middle of the crater.
I slip, "FUCK!" that is all I can think right now, as fear spreads throughout my body I just keep and I am sliding down the crater, towards the void in the centre, one last thought sweeps trough my mind before I fall in.
"This is it, I'm going to die."

Black.

Black, all is black, is this the end?
Yes, I am dead and this is how it ends, all dark and silent.
And so lonely...

Wait, in the distance, voices.
"What is it?" one ask, "Is it dead?" ask's another.
"It, I'm not an it, I'm not a fucking it!" I feel anger boiling inside me, "I am a person, a human being, not a fucking thing!"
I want to scream out, but for some reason I can't, I cant speak, I can't move.
"Doctor," I hear one voice call "get over here doctor! There is something you need to see."

All of a sudden the darkness give away for a bright and shining light, figures, all in a blur, but individuals, of different colours.
"Am I mad?"
As I blink my eyes a couple of times the figures become clearer, they are ponies. "Ponies? Ok. I am mad, Ponies?"
"Hello, can you understand me?" A dark voice ask, "Can you speak English?"
I try to answer but I cannot say a thing, my mouth and throat are both way too dry, the only sentence I manage to squeeze out is a beg for water.

Water.

As I drink I can feel the water sliding all the way down my throat and all the way into my stomach.
I can feel the refreshing sensation that spread as the cold water lubricates my system, allowing me to talk.
"Thanks." I say to the doctor.
"Now, what and who are you," he replies, "where are you from, and how in Equestria did you end up here?"
My mind just stopped working for a couple of seconds, "Equestria, did you say Equestria?"
"I believe I did," he calmly replies "but now please answer my questions."
I am in Equestria, I guess this goes perfectly as the cherry on the top of the "Crazy ice-cream mountain" which I am currently imprisoned inside.

"What, I am, I am a human, as for who." I start "Well, my name is Jake. I don't really think you need to know much more."
"I will decide that," was the reply "now how did you get here?"
"I, I don't remember, there was this explosion, and a sort of black hole, I fell in, and now I'm here, Equestria."
"But may I ask you something," I continued without waiting for an answer "Exactly where in Equestria are we, and who are you?"
"We are at the Rainbow factory," my heart froze, the rainbow factory, this is bad, really REALLY BAD! "and I am doctor Atmosphere."

When I heard his name my heart exploded into an burning inferno of rage.
As I lounge at him I shout "YOU SICK PIECE OF SHIT!" before I grab a hold and start punching him continuously in the face.
I keep yelling stuff like "YOU SICK BASTARD!" my hand is aching "GRINDING SMALL FILLIES INTO RAINBOWS!" blood starts to stain my clothes "HAVE YOU NO SOU-"
An electric shock spreading from my back trough my entire body cuts me short, and just as the shock goes out of my body I get a hoof in my face and once more, all goes black.