I want to make you cry.

by DerpyHooves MLP

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I created this quickie a few months ago, when I was alone and feeling down about some... Family issues.

This will be my last update until my exams are over later this month, but I felt guilty for leaving you all without anything <3

So without any further ado, plug in some headphones for the song, and just read...


 Please, for the full effect intended, listen to this song when reading.

http://m.youtube.com/?reload=3&rdm=m2d6f02xn#/watch?desktop\_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3De4EqjvnWfRM%26feature%3Dyoutube\_gdata\_player&feature=youtube\_gdata\_player&v=e4EqjvnWfRM&gl=GB

If that doesn't work, then search Muse - Exogenesis Part 3 - Redemption


As you listen to it, think of Rainbow Dash, in a hospital. The same hospital she was in when she had unfortunately broken her wing.

She is an extremely old age and has become very fragile because of it, her skin was covered in wrinkles, more so than Granny Smith back in the time Period of the Friendship is magic series, the deep wrinkles had left the majority of her fur and skin just hanging from her frail body, highlighting her structure.

She is in a hospital because, of course, she is dying. She is dying because age has caught up on her. Death is of course, not a nice thing. It takes someone by surprise, and leaves everyone else in shock. In worry. In pain.

There is no-one else in the room but the dying Rainbow Dash, who is in the bed and has no energy to get out. She has been there, in bed, for days. Not once has she had a visitor, but she didn't tell anyone. She felt like she couldn't tell anyone. Se didn't come to Hospital voluntarily however, she was discovered by her usual post pony, the one who delivers her weekly issue of "Equestria Sporting Weekly", alongside the occasional letters, which grew ever more rare. She was alone and she knew it.

Inside the room, the walls are a very dull grey, apart from the bunch of flowers upon the mahogany wood drawer at her bed-side, which were there simply for the purpose of freshness in the room. It clashed with Rainbow Dash's age, making it rather neutral on "freshness". In the room there is a single window, other than the window on the door. Light filled the large majority of the small room, adding some liveliness to the room, again neutralising when clashing with poor rainbow dash

She has several pictures of herself with with her friends, the mane six, who are all dead due to age as well. Pinkie Pie was the first to go, leaving the friend group shocked. Applejack, widely considered as Rainbow Dash's best friend was the last of Rainbow's friends to die. It was only around one month ago. She just went to sleep and didn't wake up. It left poor AppleBloom in tears for several weeks.

Rainbow Dash left no family, but She did have a Husband, Soarin' , who is also dead. He died tragically a year back after suffering from a vital organ failure. Rainbow Dash hadn't been the same since. She talked much less, and left the house a lot less as well, because the clear blue skies kept reminding her of her soulmate who she had been with for 60 years.

She then had several flash backs on her life. The first one of when she earned her Cutie Mark, followed by meeting Twilight Sparkle and defeating Nightmare moon. Other life memories then followed.

The last memory is the most important memory that she can think of. The memory is a memory in which cannot be forgot. This memory that she thinks of is the point in her life where she realised who she really was as a full grown mare and was so happy about it, she shed several tears. She was ice skating with Soarin', her recently wedded husband. The music playing emphasised the emotion in the air, leaving the couple in an ecstasy of happiness. Rainbow Dash new exactly who she was. Soarin's Wife, Soarin's soulmate, Soarin's pair. She whispered into His ear, "Till death do us part"

The memory is so powerful that Rainbow Dash sheds a tear after re-living that moment in her head and at that point, she closes her eyes, and lets out her final breath. She was the one to finish the legacy of the mane six, and at that finished it the way it was supposed to be done. Age. She was the element of loyalty and was loyal to each of her friends until they all sadly got taken away from her one by one.

Rainbow Dash's legacy has came to an end. All that is left are memories.


If you could please, leave your reaction in the comments, it'd mean a lot to me, particularly on how to make it even more powerful.

I'm also looking for a team of artists/animators to make this into a YouTube film. If anyone would like to volunteer, then please, inbox me.

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