The Vampony Chronicles: Dark Thunder's view

by DopplerEffect

Rating: teen
Tags: Original Character, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Dark, Rarity, Adventure, Alternate Universe, Twilight Sparkle, Princess Luna
Length: 1948

vampony story

When somepony get stigned by a manticore,well...they don't expect to live long after that. Well I was a special case as some Blessed by the moon, or "vamponies" , found me just in time and brought me to, no one less than, Princess Luna herself, she turns me and.....

this is my continuation/modification (from the end of the chapter 7) of the story Vampony Chronicles by SteampunkBrony. Also the main character in this story is one made by me.

link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/16474/The-Vampony-Chronicles

P.S.: this is my FIRST story so constructive commentary is recommended (telling me i suck if far from helping).And the chapter i made are all mines even though i use some off the terms he (SteampunkBrony) made.If you have any ideas please write them in the comment section below.

Published 2012-05-14 14:04:02 UTC
Last updated 2012-11-16 23:19:20 UTC

1: the awakening

original story

sorry for so much fainting at the begining of the story but i hope you understand it and there is alot of dialog
P.S:warnings and authors notes will be in purple at the begining of each chapter, and i will improve this chapter as i will continue this story

''run, run''I said as I ran over to ponyville followed closely by a Manticore. He managed to bite me on the left flank. Seeing that I have not given up, he gave away, still panicked I made my way to the library before fainting.

''Is he alive?''

''i don't know Rarity.''

I opened slighty my eyes to see two mares.One was white and had blue jewels as her cutie mark, the other one was purple and had a multiple stars as her cutie mark.

''Rari..?'' I said but she interrupted me.

''shhh.Don't speak...'' Rarity said. I fainted again.

clop-clop clop-clop clop-clop(by clop-clop i mean the running sound)

As I awoke, I saw that the purple one held me with her magic, she ran wildly fast. I realized that nopony could run as fast as that. Except the one who has had "The Blessing of the Moon".

''Blessed...''i said while looking at her eyes.She looked at me

''Some call this a curse.''

''I don't,what's your name?'' It was hard to speak.

''Twillight Sparkle.'' She said, And i fainted for the third time.

I woke up as she dropped me on the floor, the pain of the sting of the manticore at least twice as bad.

''You have to save him, he's the only pony sized alicorn, exept Cadence, i have ever saw!'' Twillight Sparkle said

''We can't we don't even know if he will be responsible.'' Said a blue alicorn, realising it was princess Luna i tried step up ignoring the pain.

Seeing what i was trying to do she held me down and said ''don't step up it will do no good.'' And then the poison made it to my heart and the pain tripled,I began to tremble because of the pain.

''i can't stand this.'' Thillight said, and then she tried bite herself but Luna stopped her

''leave it to us'' She said as a dark magic cloud surrounded me and Luna. At this moment the pain was unbearable, it was almost impossible to breath.But when i did so i feeled really wierd ,like if a great power just entered me, and i passed out for the fourth time.

I woke as the sun rose up.

''where am i? I said, Oh im is Luna's chamber.(i saw it a we did a tour of the castle with the school)Wait!!!

Luna entered the room at this precise moment.

''Don't move you are weaker than you think ''Luna said.

''But i feel very good!''I said.

''you still need some rest, just like us''Luna said as she slipped in her bed (the one that i was in it) to sleep.She turned her back to me and felled asleep in a few seconds.

-==-==-==-==-

After a few hours relaxing in the bed i got out of it and walked out around the chamber i did not dared to get out of it in case someone saw me get out of Luna's chambers ,we would ask questions, then while i was checking something to play with in the closet Celestia herself got in, i almost got an hearth attack, just before she saw me i had time to close the closet.

''Sister wake up!!!!!'' she said almost panicking

''What..?''Luna said still sleepy

''A whole family had been killed last night by ,what seems like, a manticore! And its not all we saw bloody hoofprints leading to ponyville, worst of all, it was children ones.''

''How old?''Luna said

''from thirteen to fourteen why?''

''Just to know, but we don't think we can do anything for him he must be dead.''

I almost got out of the closet, but then I realized she was trying to help me.

-==-==-==-==-

When Celestia went back to her work i got out of the closet. I asked why she had to hide me from Celestia and she said

''My dear sister really don't like vamponies even if the are Blessed by me..''

''So.. you say i got The Moon's Blessing!?!''

''Yes.. don't you wanted to live?''

''Sure i did but...''

''But what?'' She came closer to give me a hug.

''Its the greatest gift i received, after the gift of life from my parents, i would have accepted it with glee,exept the whole drinking blood to survive thingy, even if i did not needed to continue living!!'' I said, while started crying.

''You know someponies call The Blessing a curse for a good reason.'' She said

Then i started feeling a little bit weird, like i was hungry but not at the same time.

''Why do i feel hungry and not at the same time?''

''This means you will need to drink blood soon.''

''I refuse to take some from anypony if they don't agree.''

''We saw it in your eyes, thats why we agreed to save your life, now we need to find you a place to live.''

''How about the library where Twilight lives?"

"if she says yes."

"Im sure she will.Oh and why do you keep saying we instead of i?"

"Don't you know? I do this so when i talk so its like me and Celestia are together even if we are seperated."

"Oh i guess thats why..."

"why...?"

"Thats why most ponies are scared of you, they think by we you mean you and Nightmare Moon."

"Ok if thats why we will try to say i but thats an old habit."

"And the effect will not be instantaneous, just to say."

2: First feeding

original story

Sorry for the long pause before updating and the shortness of this chapter, it's because im on my ipod.

Twillight accepted my request to live in the library,so i moved into the guest's bedroom.

"Spike!!'' she shouted.

A small purple dragon came in the library,coming from upstairs.

"What Twilight??."he said, then he saw me. "Hi who are you??"

He's ... what's your name??''she asked.

"Dark Thunder." i whispered, a little bit intimidated by the dragon inspecting me with his eyes.

"So Dark Thunder here,she said pointing at me,is going to live here for quite a bit of time."

"He will stay here for a indefinite amount of time,is it ok?"

"Sure why not"

Rarity came in the library right after.

"Twillight my dear i really need the spell to hide theese...."she said pointing at her teeth, right after she realized i and spike where right next to her.

"Oh hors..."

"WHO NOW, APPLEJACK!!?!!?!!" Spike yelled going up the stairs to his bedroom.

"He's going to calm down...soon i hope" Twillight said.

"Hi darling, whats you name and how come you didn't react like spike?" Rarity said

"Dark Thunder."

"You was in a pretty bad shape last time i saw you and that was two days ago so how did you manage to heal so quickly???"

"Luna turned me."

"Ok,so Twi how about this spell?"

"Let me see Spike, i said, while you two search for the spell."

"Ok." Twillight said.

As i walked upstairs, i heared crying in what I assumed was Twillight's bedroom,As i entered the room i said.

"Are you ok?"

"Get out,Spike said,please..."

I sat down next to him.

" Why are you crying?"

"It is just a little to much for me to handle,Twi became a vampony then she turned Rarity and finally she turns a random pony, no offence,im wondering who will be next."

"she didn't turn me Luna did"

And thats when i made the decsision to go live in the castle.

"Ok.then i will go live in the castle."

"You don't have to..."

"I don't want to stress you or anything so then i will live in the castle, beside i always wanted to live in one,but are you ok if i come to see you and twi."

"Sure."

The day after, me,Twillight and Luna we found an excuse for me to stay in the castle,She said I was an orphan and she took me to the castle out of pity,wich wasn't a total lie.

"He's really sophisticated where did you find him???" Celestia said

"We saw his parents die in front of us."Luna said

"Oh.. im sorry to bring up these horrible memories."Celestia said looking at me.

"Its ok, I said, your majesty''

"He is taking this very well."

-==-=-==-=-==-
"Thou have to!!!"luna yelled at me,later that night.Thankfully she had set a sound blocker shield around us.

"I can't do this, you know it!"

She put her right foreleg in my mouth and by reflex i bit her leg.... Lets just say we were lucky she had put a sound barrier up.

Sorry

I'm sorry but this is where this story ends because I don't have any inspiration for this story anymore

3: Rainbow Dash

original story

sorry for the wait and the short chapter.

It was night,I was walking down the main street in search of the library as I got tackled to the ground by a cyan pegasus. I instantly identified her a Rainbow Dash, one of Twi's friends.As we each got back on hooves she said:

''prepare to die monster!''

I started to walk back because she wore one of the only outfits i was supposed to fear, it was a black robe with a few symbols on it: a sun, six hearth and her cutie mark, the master monster hunter robe.I wondered how she guessed i was a vampony but then i realized i forgot to hide my fangs.Buck im so stupid!I thought as she pulled a shiny white sword, probably made of pure silver.

''I think we have a misunderstanding my dear Rainbow Dash.''

She tightened her grip on the blade and she said:

''I see that my reputation precedes me, and do not call me dear.''

''Actually it's Twillight that told me about you.Still she would have told me you were a monster hunter if she knew about it.''I said without thinking, realizing how wrong it sounded i brought a hoof to my face and said:

''I didn't........''

Rainbow jumped at me with her sword high and her face full of rage, i sidestepped to the left and she missed me.As she turned to face me her face went pale, as if she saw a ghost, she dropped her sword and rushed past me.

''Twillight are you okay?''she asked.

I fell, rainbow hadn't missed me, I had a big red gash in the middle of my chest.

''NOOOO!!!!!!!!''Twillight yelled and rushed to me as the world went black.

Rainbow Dash start

Rainbow looked at Twi as she shoved her on the ground.What had she done wrong again?She killed the monster that captured her friend,no?? And then she remembered how the vampony looked like as it said his last sentence:No I didn't mean.. she recalled. As Twi spun back Rainbow saw the look on her face: it was the look of somepony who just lost somepony important to them and blamed her for it, and damn she knew that look way to good.

"Why are you looking at me like that?,Rainbow Dash asked with sorrow, I slayed a monster!"

"Is that what you think of us? Monsters?!,Twillight practly spat the word,You call us that just because we need to drink blood to survive"Twillight shouted.

Rainbow stopped breathing she said "us", that monster turned her! she couldn't believe it he turned her and she didn't thank her no.... she was angry at her?

Rainbow Dash end