Evading the Inevitable

So, after my extremely long "break," I went through my chapters again. Quite simply, I think they need a bit of revision. What I see here, at the moment, is a rough draft. A VERY rough draft. I mean to change that, making it more of what I can truly be capable of. More description, less jumping around, a less predictable plot, and the largest change: Words that require you to pick up a dictionary half the time. :trollestia:

For those that hate this story: please continue the hate! Even though I'm revising this story, it's just practice! I want as much criticism (constructive or not,) as I can get! Well, save "It's unoriginal! DURR." I know this. Like I said: it's practice. Any of the stories I post as "practice" before pooling into my original ideas will be, obviously, unoriginal. Plus, I'm doing this for fun and to improve my writing, not fame.

I'm going to be moving the old chapters to here, just in case you wanted to read them again. Password: EtEScraps