the way magical mystery cure should have ended

by laughingjack013

Rating: teen
Tags: Dark, Sad, Tragedy
Length: 945

the way it ended is not my way... so here is mine. it still has twilight and celestia but, everyone else no. sorry it is just not how my story goes.

twilight goofed.it starts out kind of like the magical mystery sure but then turns down a different path. story is different, but better.
you still get twilight and celestia but no one else really. this is a dark story so only teens can read it is my warning that you not read if you are a fan of twilight.

twilight hears a knock at the door. she opens it and there is a book on the ground that has a note from celestia. it says it is star-swirl the bearded's uncompleted masterpiece. she flips to the back and reads it. she then goes to sleep.

to find out what is different you have to read the story.

Published 1970-01-01 00:00:00 UTC
Last updated 2015-06-11 22:27:13 UTC

the way magical mystery cure should have ended

the way “Magical Mystery Cure” should have ended. (in my dark opinion)

one late night, twilight was reading her book when there was a knock at the door. she looked outside and thought she saw a pony walk away in a dark robe but she thought that pony wanted her to follow so she chased after them. they went around a few corners until twilight had to stop before she hit a brick wall. on the way back she assumed she was just sleepy and that no pony was there and talked to herself about how silly she must have looked. she thought it was a joke until she tripped over something and saw a book. she looked in it and saw a note from celestia. it said it held star swirl's secret masterpiece that was never finished. she flipped to the back and found the spell. after twilight read the spell and went to bed. she had dreams. dreams of her being an alicorn. dreams of her being a princess. that she would rule next to celestia, Luna, and cadence. but alas it was just a dream. she woke in the morning to find a horrid sight, HER FRIENDS SWITCHED CUTIE MARKS! she traveled around asking what the hay was going on. but she got the same answer every time, they was always like that. it took her a while but, once she found out it was the spell she had rushed back to her house to find a way to fix it. she got out spell book after spell book and started searching through them. then… she felt sick. she was in horrid pain. “oh, sweet celestia make it stop!” she cried out. then she felt herself being ripped apart bit by bit. she thought she was dying so she closed her eyes, cried, and screamed as loud as she can. then… it stopped. she opened her eyes and saw celestia standing there. she wiped away the tears. “why am i here, where am i?” she asked while standing in a teal space looking vortex with celestia.

“your actions are why.” celestia said with a disapproving tone. “all this time i have TRUSTED YOU! how could you do something so foolish! do you even know what you did?! you altered destiny! do you know how hard it is to fix destiny?! i can but BARELY! destiny is a delicate resource that when altered is the most difficult to change that is why it is the worst of crimes, altering destiny!”

twilight was scared. “princess celestia the book you sent i-” celestia interrupted.

“no! you may not talk! i sent you no book! how dare you lie to me! you are just trying to weasel your way out of this! it will not work! for your crimes you are hereby sentenced to a star for 500 years!” celestia charged her horn "if you would have just left destiny alone this would not have happened. you just had to mess with destiny didn't you!" then she  blasted twilight."good bye my star pupil. wish it did not turn out this way but i guess there is no other choice."

the pain was twice as it was before. it even lasted twice as long. she wondered what was going to become of her. the next thing she knew she was in a star that was looking towards the earth. she thought if this is what it looked like to Luna when she was banished to the moon?

“no. what have i done!” twilight said sobbing.

she looked down to the earth as she was stuck on the inside of a star. she thought of all the things she had and had not done, things that she was going to miss, the people that would miss her. then she realized some things. “by the time i get back all of my friends will be dead and… spike. who will look after him? OH CELESTIA!” twilight hunched over and looked at herself. she was being sucked inwards. ”she… she sent me to a dead star! i am going to die! die for something i did not mean to do! why dose it have to be this way?! AH!” she sucked inwards. " I AM GOING TO IMPLODE! THE MOST PAINFUL OF DEATHS!" said twilight.

there was a big bright flash. it was white, purple and red. the star imploded and so did twilight. celestia looked up and saw the flash.

"oh, no! what have i done. i sent my star pupil to a dead star! that was not her punishment. how... how could i have done wrong?" celestia started to cry.

behind her was a robed pony in a dark alley. the only thing you can see is their eyes."yes," said the dark one. "there goes the main one. now they can't use their magic anymore." after turning the corner where no pony can see the dark one took off the robe to reveal discord. he walked away and left celestia to cry and feel guilty about HIS actions. that was the end of the one unicorn who could have prevented much tragedy. the last thing she did before she died was feel incredible pain and cried about what was not to be. and the last thing on her mind was if celestia did not send the book then who did? that is no way to go but that is how it went. the punishment for her was death, not 500 years. to think her death was caused by one pony. who would never get caught and never herd from again.