The New Pony In Town

This a remake.

Begin!!!

I use a souhern accent for the apple family, so ah -is- I, ta -is- to etc.

   A new stallion walked into Ponyvillle, his name: Zane, he was leaving his home in Skyville (cheesey name i know) because well, he got sick of being around only pegasi, he wanted more variety, so he took some belongings, put them in his saddlebag, and left for someplace else, he wandered into Ponyville after a few days, and, sick of eating bread, he wanted to go to some restaurant for food.

  He saw a place with a sign saying "Sugar Cube Corner" so he went in, imagining a restaurant, he saw a bunch of ponies eating... cupcakes, he walked up to a counter, with a yellow earth pony, with three cakes as a cutie mark, he ordered a cupcake, and some tea, (what, guys like tea too) when it arrived at his table, he ate his cupcake, and drank his tea, when he noticed a few ponies at another table, and one caught his eye: Orange, with yellow hair, a southern hat, and three apples for a cutie mark, when he finished, he walked up to the group of ponies, her pink friend gasped a " :O " type gasp and ran off, while her purple friend asked...

   "Are you new in town?"

   "Yeah, i'm new." he replied.

   "Well, that's why, she sets up parties for new ponies, and stallions, I'm Twilight sparkle, These are..." she pointed to her friends: "Applejack "Howdy!", Rarity "Hello" , Rainbow Dash "Hi" , Fluttershy "uhh, hi" and Pinkie just ran off so uhh... who are you? she ended with a smile.

   "I'm Zane." he said, smiling and pointing to himself with one hoof.

   Applejack immiediately cut in "Howdy there Zane." with a slightly seductive voice.

   "Uhh hi!" he said back, not really thinking clearly, seduced.

   At about that time, everyone was finishing their cupcakes, and they drank their tea.

   "So..." Applejack asked "you have a place to stay?"

   By now, Zane has clearly noticed she's coming onto him "Step one... check!" he thought as he replied.

With a: "Nope." wondering what she would say next.

   "Well," she said putting some thought into it, then continuing on with, "i guess you can stay at mah place."

   "Thanks, i guess I will, until I get a house." was Zane's only reply.

   "Well, we'd better get going, I wanna introduce you ta mah family!" she said, sounding upbeat.

   "OK,let's go!"

   On their way to the house, Zane talks to Applejack.

   "So, where do you live?" Zane asked.

   "Oh, ah live over there." she pointed to a farm, with a nice house.

   "Oh, so, how many spare rooms do you have?" Zane asked, curious.

   "Well, ah hadn't thought about that, we don't have any. she replied, panicked.

   "It's alright." Zane said, in an attempt to calm her.

   "Well, ah suppose ya could sleep in mah room..." she said, again slightly seductively.

   "Step two... check!" he thought.

   "Well, we're almost there."

   "So, you work on a farm?" he asked, again, curious.

   "Yup, ah sure do!" she replied.

   "Cool!" he said, looking at her with a seduced face.

   "Uhh, what're yah doin'? she aid, looking at him with one eyebrow up.

   Snapped back into reality, he said "Uhh, oh, sorry, i left home a while back, and well, i find myself staring at random stuff as I think about it." he lied.

   "Oh, OK, ah'm sorry." she said, thinking she'd hurt him.

   "No no, it's alright." he said.

   "Okay, if you say so, ah'll try mah best ta make you feel at home here, okay?"

   "Thanks!" he said.

   By now, they were walking into the house, Zane saw a green pony, with white hair, and an apple pie cutie mark, Applejack waked up to her and said, "Howdy, Granny!"

   "Howdy doo!" she replied.

   "Uhh, Zane, this is Granny Smith." she told him.

   "Hi, Granny Smith." he said.

   "Applejack, who's this?" she questioned.

   "This is Zane, he moved inta town, and well, he doesn't have a place ta stay." she replied.

   "Okay, well, have fun with your friend." she said.

   Zane knew she didn't mean it like this, but that gave Zane some perverted thoughts, he thought he felt a nosebleed about to happen.

   "Well, let's go inside!" Applejack said, pushing Zane along.

   They went into a big room, a living room, with a kitchen, and a few doors, he guessed they were storage, and a bathroom, he then saw a stallion, and a filly, the stallion: red, with yellowish orange hair, and a big green apple cutie mark, the filly: yellow, with red hair, and no cutie mark.

   "Howdy Big Mac, howdy Apple Bloom" Applejack said.

   "Howdy."  was the reply from both of them, but the stallion, Zane guessed was Big Mac said it more calmly.

   "Who's your friend, ah haven't seen him before?" the filly Apple Bloom asked.

   "This is Zane, he's new in town, Big Mac, what time is it?"

   Big Mac looked at the clock, and said to her "It's 8:47, you otta get some sleep, you gotta buck tomorrah.

   As they walked up the stairs, Big Mac stopped Zane, and whispered to him "Don't do nuthin ta get on mah bad side, son..."

   Zane nodded, and continued walking, he got up and Applejack opened her room door, her room was nice, a single row of apples for a wallpaper, a window, two pillows, an apple covered blanket, a lamp on each side of the bed, on a nightstand, and the design on the lampshade, shined little dark apples all over the room.

   "Nice room you've got here." he said, impressed.

   "Thanks, and now it's your room too!" she replied.

   "Oh, yeah, Big Mac said we should get some sleep.

   They walked over to the bad, and as Applejack climbed into the right side, Zane climbed into the left.

As he laid there, he looked a her, she looked back at Zane, she had the sexiest face ever.

   About 3 hours later, Zane, still wide awake, looked at Applejack again, she was awake too, she looked back at him.

   "Hey." Zane managed to get out.

   "Howdy, why're you still up?" she asked.

   "I can't sleep." he replied.

   "Oh, neither can ah." she said.

   She started scooting along the bed, until she was resting her head on him, and Zane felt an explosion of pleasure from her warmth, he felt an erection growing, and tried to push those thoughts out of his mind, it didn't work, so he stopped trying,  she must've noticed his discomfort, and she asked what was wrong, he replied with a quick "Nothing!"

   She was not stupid, and that kind of quick response and alarmed voice, meant he must've been embarrassed, she took a moment to think, then realized what he was talking about.

   "Uhh, Zane, ever since ah met ya, i've had some, feelins' for ya, you know?" she told him.

   "So, so did I." Zane confessed.

   Zane then rolled over on top of her, with then both still under the blanket, he moved down to her pussy, and started to eat her out softly, then after a while, he started bringing his tongue in and out of her, she moaned softly, and made the sexiest face ever.

   He then brought a hoof up and tweaked her nipple, then brought his head of of her dripping lips, and bit her nipple hard, she gasped, he then kissed her on the lips, as her tongue slithered its way into his mouth, he then brought his tongue into her mouth, their tongues danced as Zane moved his cock up, and brought it into her, she whinnied in pain, as he pushed through her hymen, sending trickles of blood out of her, he tweaked her nipple again, to ease the pain.

   Zane then stared thrusting in and out of her, she moaned in a really sexy seducing tone, then Zane felt a weird feeling build up in his cock...

   "Applejack, i'm gonna, i'm gonna!" was all he could get out before he spilled a load of liquid fire into her, she moaned extremely loud, doubling the sexiness, making him speed up, he fired a few more times into her, before slumping down on top of her, and rolling her on top of him, as he hugged her, they both fell into sleep until the next morning...

Well, i fixed the whole "no stops", made it even longer, fixed errors, made it not a fail, what else could you ask for?