A rare moon

I want to point out that this story is not dead. I've simply been thinking as to what I'm going to do, and decided on this: a rewrite under a new story. The story idea will stay the same, I'm just going to change some stuff so it flows better. It may be a while, but when I get to it, I'll put a link to it in an update for this story. In the mean time, my thanks to those who followed and liked this iteration of the story. The rewrite will have the same major plot point, just written and rearranged a little better, as this is not the best example of just writing a story with just the outline, which is how I write my stories. I swear, the rewrite will be out sometime in the coming months, but with school and my other stories, I can not say a definite date. Let me know what you guys think down below, and any possible ways to improve this in rewrite mode.