Death Sense

by doodlebob

Rating: teen
Tags: Dark
Length: 1168

A short story with short chapters that has to do with Pinkie Sense.

I'm rewriting this, even though I'm not exactly a good author.
Well, rewriting it eventually.

Published 1970-01-01 00:00:00 UTC
Last updated 2012-06-06 19:59:46 UTC

Chapter 2: The Orange Death

Death Sense: Chapter 2: The Orange Death

"What? Where am I?" Pinkie said as she woke up. It was pitch-black out. She couldn't see a thing. "Where's a light switch? Ah, here's one!" Pinkie flipped it on, and she regretted it.

What she saw was a corpse of Yaplap. His dark orange body was sprawled over the floor in a pool of blood. His cutie mark in particular was in a peculiar place: It was nowhere to be seen.

"Where'd his cutie mark go?"

She quickly ran out of the room. What she didn't know was that she wasn't in his house.

She was in her house. "What?! That WASN'T his house!?" Pinkie shouted. "But, how'd he get to my house then?" She wondered. She was gonna go back home, when suddenly-

"Pinkie dearie! What are you doing up so late!?" said Rarity from out of no where.

"I'm not sure! But I found something."

"Really? What did you find? Some deluxe ribbon?" Rarity asked enthusiastically."I need it for a new dress."

"No, I found something much worse."

"I can settle for regular ri-"

"I found Yaplap dead next to me in my house. He was in a pool of blood."

"What do you mean?"

"I'll show you! C'mon!"

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"What? You just woke up to find Yaplap next to you dead? In all that blood?" asked Rarity.

"Yup! And I can't find his Cutie Mark! It was ripped off!" replied Pinkie.

"Well, honestly that isn't much of a loss. It was just a Caps Lock key. But how peculiar."

They stood in silence, hanging over the dead pony's body.

"...I'm going to go tell Twilight. She can tell Princess Celestia about this."

Chapter 3: The Next Day; Fourth Wall breaking and all

"LOCAL PSYCHOTIC PONY FOUND DEAD."

'twas the headline for the Daily Hay the next day. Everyone was shocked. The hay was going on? There was something going on...

There was various rumors around town on who had killed Yaplap. Some said it was Celestia,  some thinking she was jealous of him getting more praise. Others said Derpy Hooves due to them being the only mentally-disoriented ponies in town, claiming Derpy had killed Yaplap for more attention.

"I just don't know what went wong!" Derpy would often say, afraid of people accusing her. However, there was one pony many ponies thought was the killer.

Pinkie Pie.

"We think this due to her odd twitching." claimed the WHAT group; The "We have awesome theories" group. "We saw her twitch yesterday in a way she never had before."

Pinkie was shocked at hearing this. How could she, a pink bundle of joy, be a ruthless killer? She ignored the rumors, remembering her motto: Love and tolerate. At least, that was Fluttershy's motto.

Fluttershy.

Maybe she knew what happened. Or at least her animal friends may have seen what happened. She decided to go to her house.

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"Hi Fluttershy!" said Pinkie happily.

"Oh, um, hi Pinkie." said Fluttershy. "I wasn't expecting you."

"Huh? What do you mean? You know to ALWAYS expect me! Silly goose!"

"That's not nice. Geese aren't silly Pinkie."

"Still, can you help me?"

Gulp.

"Help...you? How so?" asked Fluttershy nervously.

"Something wrong?" asked Pinkie.

"N-no. I'm fine."

"Ooookay. Well, tell me, have your friends seen who killed Yaplap last night?"

"I honestly don't know. Let me ask them."

Silence.

"Well are you going to ask?" asked Pinkie.

"At night I will. That's when they see me."

"Oookay. That's not creepy."

"Alright then. See you later then."

Pinkie left.

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"...Is it quiet?" asked a mysterious figure.

"...Yes. No pony is around." replied the other.

"Stop saying that. I get what you mean."

"Fine. What do you want?"

"I want to know how it went."

"It went well. No problems."

"Good. They won't have a clue..."

Part 4: The Mysterious yet obvious pony

Death Sense: Chapter 4: The mysterious yet obvious killer

There was suspense in the air in Ponyville. Everyone was waiting for the Daily Hay to see if someone had died overnight, as if they expected it.

No one had died.

"Yay! We still have the same amount of friends!" shouted Pinkie happily.

"Agreed. It's nice to hear that." replied Fluttershy.

"It's not just nice! It's REALLY nice!" teased Pinkie.

"Right. You know what I meant."

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"Angel, you know what we need to do."

The bunny nodded in agreement.

"So who's next?"

The bunny shrugged.

"Let's think, who's useless?"

More shrugging.

"Derpy?"

Angel nodded no.

"DJ-PON3?"

Another nod "No."

Fluttershy thought for a second.

"Octavia?"

This time, a nod yes.

"Wait, Pinkie didn't twitch today! We'll have to fake it well."

A voice spoke from the bushes.

"Why Octavia?"

"Because no one likes Classical or whatever the hay she plays."

Silence.

"Go do it Angel. Or I'll kill you too."

The bunny ran off to do the job.

"OCTAVIA FOUND DEAD. IMPALED BY HER OWN CELLO OR WHATEVER THE HAY SHE PLAYS."

"Local cello-or-whatever-the-hay-she-plays player Octavia was found dead last night. The cause of death appears to be the fact that she was impaled through the chest with her own instrument. That is all that is known. In other news, Madame Flour has made another story about Fluttershy. More info on page C4."

Chapter 1: And so it begins....

The next morning, in the "Daily Hay", the local newspaper, the newsline shocked everyone:

"BON-BON REPORTED DEAD BY PONY POLICE"

"Authorities found Bon-Bon dead this morning. She was found near the bakery. The body revealed no clues to who committed this crime. Lyra, a close friend of the victim, had this to say:

'I'm shocked! I don't see any reason why anyone would murder her. I mean, sure, she criticized me for sitting abnormally, but she was nice otherwise!'

Authorities are looking for potential witnesses and/or potential suspects. If you have any information, call 1-800-1337.

May you rest in peace Bon-Bon."

Everyone was shocked. Who would do this? While this wasn't the first time this happened, this was unusual. Ponies sobbed and there was funeral.

"And so, that is the end of Bon-Bon's service. Now...EVERYONE GO HOME!" Yaplap shouted with his usual shout.

"That Yaplap guy is a jerk. Of all ponies, HE had to do it." shouted Lyra, crying out of the Church.

"....Who do you think did it?" asked Pinkie Pie.

"YAPLAP! I BET HE DID IT! THAT PONY HATED BON-BON!" Lyra responded furiously.

The area was silent for a few minutes. The loss of a friend was always terrible. Then it happened:

Pinkie twitched in a way she hadn't before.

"Pinkie, what does that mean?" asked Twilight calmly.

"I don't know. It's never twitched like that."

"You sure?"

"Yep."

"Weird. Just go home and rest. You seem tired."

"Oh, I am! I woke up early today. I was taking a walk, for some reason."

"Hmmm. That's weird. Well, good night Pinkie."

Little did they know that tonight, another death was to occur.