I'm looking for opinions and criticism on my grammar and vocabulary. I'd also appreciate some feedback telling me if I should continue writing this story in my free time and please do tell me if it's not that "thrilling". If it's not thrilling enough do please give me an example, I'm very new to writing stories from my head.

It's about my OC going on an adventure if didn't catch the short description.
Also, be sure to keep in mind that this is the first time I wrote for the public and also there's no cover art :D

If I continue, I'll look for an appropriate cover art and a better title