Death's Gift

Author's note:
This is just a test to see how people like my writing style, I'd appreciate it if you guys could give me some pointers on how I could improve my writing, thanks, keep blaring those yays.

Blayze, an 18 year old of average height with blue hair, was walking down a cold, dark street on his way home from his job at the local aluminium factory.

“I hate working nightshifts…” He muttered to himself as the cold night air stabbed at the back of his throat. Eventually, he came to a crossroad and took a right turn. The air around him suddenly dropped in temperature, almost freezing his tongue and making his throat scream in pain. He sped up and looked up at the night sky, it’s black expanse dotted with the tiny specks of light known as stars and the giant orb that they surrounded known as the moon. He smiled and returned his gaze downward, noticing he had arrived at his street, not a single light was lit in any of the houses. He walked up to his door and fumbled with his key, his hands too cold to listen to his brain. He managed to open the lock and enter his house. He flicked on the light switch and the hallway was lit up by the light which hovered overhead. He went into the kitchen and opened the fridge.

“Yay, still have some left.” He cheered quietly to himself, closing the fridge, a can of Ice Tea in his hand. He walked into the living room. He dropped the can he was holding as he saw a hooded figure with a scythe standing infront of him.

“You’ve been a tricky one to track down, Blayze…” It said, its voice raspy and cold. It pointed a bony finger at Blayze.

“You have been generally good throughout your life, yet you have also committed sins.” It said, its scythe shimmering in the light that had been turned on just seconds before. Blayze just stood there in shock, unable to form words. After what seemed like an eternity, his mouth began to function again.

“Who are you?” Blayze asked, hands returning to their previous state of being frozen. The figure simply laughed a raspy laugh that would make a Doberman tremble in fear.

“I am Death, my boy and I have come to both congratulate and punish you.” His tone grew heavy as he raised his scythe.

“You shall be sent to the world you desire to visit the most, yet you will be given something that will represent your sins.” Death slashed his scythe at Blayze and all that he saw before the scythe hit him was the flash of a rainbow.

Blayze felt his body groan as he floated in the empty space that was the void. His muscles ached, his bones were sore and he couldn't move. After a few minutes, a voice sounded.

"Come, do not be afraid, you'll be safe here, I promise." It was a warm, soothing voice. Blayze started floating towards a light that had appeared shortly after the voice sounded through the darkness. His eyes screamed as the light blinded him and then everything went dark.

"Ugh...can't get a break, can I?" Were the first words he mumbled upon waking. He moved his right arm and froze. His eyes snapped open and he drew in the dreadful sight that was his right arm. His entire arm was just bone, he could move it and it was strong enough to not break, but it was bone all the way up to the shoulder. It took him a minute to take in the horrible sight and when his brain registered the scene, he screamed loudly, causing the birds in the trees to scatter. He curled up into a ball and lay there, rolling back and forth, quietly mumbling to himself about how it was all a dream. After about ten minutes of just mumbling to himself, he regained his composure and stood up. He took in his surroundings and started walking in a random direction. Eventually he came to the edge of the forest he had been in for the past hour or two and spotted a familiar looking town.

"It can't be...It is!" He exclaimed, as he inspected the town from a distance. It was Ponyville, the town from his favourite TV show, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. He walked cautiously towards the town, on the look out for any ponies. He eventually got to the edge of the town and could now see all the ponies, walking around, doing their daily business. He heard something behind him and spun around quickly only to see a very frightened pony scream.

"MONSTER, EVERYONE RUN FOR THE HILLS!" The green pony screamed. Everyone froze as they caught sight of Blayze. He just stood there, looking at the crowd. The second he moved his right hand, everyone screamed and ran into their houses. He sighed and facepalmed. His eyes widened as he felt the left side of his face with his left hand.

"Dear god..." He said as he felt his completely exposed cheekbone and jaw, which where protected from infection by some sort of magic barrier. He looked into town and then up at the mountain range behind him, seeing a city sprawled out on it's side. He turned and started walking towards Canterlot. Eventually he noticed that someone was following him, he looked to his left slightly just in time to see a pink blur zip from one bush to another.

"If I know that law of physics breaking anywhere, it's Pinkie..." He muttered to himself, knowing that if she did speak to him, it would probably be about what he just said, involving the questions, who are you, how do you know me, do you like parties, all that stuff that usually happens with Pinkie Pie. He sighed and kept on walking, thinking that he would hopefully get atleast halfway to Canterlot before dusk.

Just after dusk, he found a small cave which he would use to camp for the night. He had gotten about halfway to Canterlot and he was proud of his feat. He gathered up some wood and lit a fire, which he slept next to until morning where he would awake peacefully...Or so he thought.