Pinkie and the Roo

by PSInfinite

Rating: everyone
Tags: Pinkie Pie, Random, Crossover, Main 6, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Comedy, Other
Length: 4867

Pinkie Pie got a new pet, and he seems friendly, but definitely NOT normal!

During his last battle with Crash Bandicoot, Ripper Roo is teleported to another world due to one of his explosions gone wrong. As the deranged kangaroo wanders around, a hyperactive, pink pony finds him and well, this can be only the start of ultimate chaos...

Crash Bandicoot crossover.

Takes place after Ripper Roo's fight in Crash Bandicoot 2: Cortex Strikes Back.

I do not own characters of MLP or Crash Bandicoot, they belong to either Hasbro or Activision.

Published 2017-02-03 02:20:02 UTC
Last updated 2017-04-18 06:22:53 UTC

Pinkie's New Pet

Warp Room, Unknown

Crash had just exited the fifth door with another crystal and gem as he began to walk to the center platform. At least until the Holo-Projector turned on, indicating that Cortex had something to say. Suddenly, the mad scientist's hologram appeared on the projector and Crash payed attention for what his 'partner' had to tell him.

"Listen up! We are not without enemies; some of them you may even recognize. Although they cannot harm you inside this warp room, they can attack you on your way to the next one. To get to the next warp room, use the platform that appears in the center of the room. Good luck!" The projector shut off as Crash was able to step onto the platform and was ready to face whoever was waiting for him as he entered the next room.

Crash soon found himself in a temple-like chamber with him standing on a giant stone platform just barely separated by the walls with stacks of books, ladders, and bookshelves scattered along them as well as a giant waterfall pouring from the direction he was facing.

But what caught the marsupial's attention was that in front of the waterfall, there sat a blue kangaroo with a blonde mustache dressed in a top hat, straitjacket, glasses, and was holding a cane on a desk. Crash soon recognized him as the maniacal Ripper Roo, who looked as if he had become a refined being at seeing him currently reading a book from the stack on his desk.

However, Ripper Roo looked up from his book and jumped in shock as soon he caught sight of Crash, which caused his books to fly out into the current. The kangaroo simultaneously glared and growled at the bandicoot, implying that him interrupting his reading was a huge mistake. He then jumped from his desk onto the platform and began hopping around it on his cane, like a pogo stick.

What Crash quickly noticed was that every time Roo landed on a tile, it turned into a TNT square which started at six seconds this time instead of three seconds. He had think fast if he was going to avoid being blown up into smithereens by the armed spaces. He then watched Ripper Roo's pattern and quickly jumped to the safest corner just in time for Roo to stop jumping. At this moment, the first space detonated, creating a path of explosions that ended at Ripper Roo's current position.

As soon as he came in contact with the exploding space, Ripper Roo began his famous hyena-like laughter as he jumped in place, reverting back to his previous self as well as losing his cane and hat in the process. He proceeded to leap around again, but this time leaving Nitro spaces wherever he went rather than TNT.

Everything suddenly clicked together for Crash on how to defeat his adversary by repeating the exact strategy and running to the corner that led him out of harm's way. A second later, Ripper Roo finished his bouncing and jumped onto the last space, which led to a violent blast that disoriented the blue marsupial and allowed Crash to attack him, being effective.

But the fight was not over yet, as Roo launched himself to the ceiling, and fell back down dressed in his hat and cane once again. He continued to repeat the same action of leaving TNT spaces as Crash would retreat to a safe corner, and hit Roo again once he was dizzy from nitro explosions.

The same process repeated, but instead of the insane kangaroo jumping to lay nitro spaces around the platform this time, he leapfrogged onto different tiles and pressing them as if he was about initiate something.

Sure enough, the ceiling of the cave opened as a numberless quantity of nitro and TNT crates slowly fell, soon about make everything within the cave go kaboom. Crash looked up and saw his impending fate falling towards him. "Woah!" The bandicoot exclaimed as he frantically searched for any cover \to protect himself with, but had no such luck and was about to give up until he heard a voice in his head:

'Don't worry Crash, I know about your predicament as of now. Ripper Roo will most likely won't survive from such explosion, so I'm sending you back to the warp room as I speak.' Cortex telepathically said.

Within a second, Crash was immediately beamed back to the warp room to safety as Ripper Roo growled at his opponent getting a ticket out of doom. After looking up one last time, he did the only appropriate thing at the moment: he broke down into unstable laughter as the countdown neared its end.

Once it reached zero, an immense explosion that nearly rivaled the might of a nuclear missile occured and scattered everything in the cave around Wumpa Island until the peak of Mount Wumpa was no more.

Ponyville Lake, Equestria

A small vortex suddenly opened and faded away after dropping Ripper Roo on the ground, who remained unconscious as he landed. Soon, he opened his eyes and took a great moment to observe the new environment; seeing that wherever he was definitely could not be Wumpa Island or his waterfall home.

He found himself standing near a large lake surrounded by a beautiful meadow with many shrubs and trees scattered around, birds chirping soft melodies, and butterflies serenely flying by. He curiously hopped over to the lake and examined his reflection in the water. Noticing that he no longer had his handsome blonde hair or mustache, he just saw the wild animal he had been ever since that accursed scientist zapped him with his darned Evolvo-Ray.

Strangely, Ripper Roo did not feel any rage or sadness within him, he felt contented. Contented that he is far away from the two banes of his existence: Dr. Neo Cortex and Crash Bandicoot.

He began to psychotically guffaw and bounce in celebration that he was now free to do whatever he pleased. Ripper Roo then saw a dirt path and followed it while laughing all the way, hoping to find out wherever it took him.

Meanwhile...

"Pinkie, I need a batch of raspberry cupcakes for this fellow stallion here ASAP!" Called Mrs. Cake.

"On it, Mrs. Cake!" Said Pinkie Pie, who immediately began by mixing milk, baking powder, and flour in a bowl. She proceeded to pour the mix into a cupcake tray and add raspberry flavoring into each portion before placing it the oven for the appropriate time.

Upon hearing the oven's alarm go off, Pinkie pulled the batch out and put every freshly-baked cupcake into a box. "All doooonnneee!" Pinkie announced in a sing-a-long voice.

"Thank you, sweetheart." Mrs. Cake said as she took and passed the the box to the customer. "You know what, Pinkie? I think you've done enough orders for the moment, why don't you take your break now? Like go see what your friends are up to?" She suggested.

"Thank you, Mrs. Cake! See you in an hour!" Said Pinkie as she trotted out the door. "Oh wow! I wonder who I should see today? Twilight? Dashie? Or Flutters-" Pinkie abruptly paused as her tail began to twitch. "Twitchy twitch! Twitchy twitch! My Pinkie sense is telling me that there's somepony new coming into town!" Pinkie then gasped in excitement. "And he loves to laugh and SMILE! I just have to meet him! In fact, my Pinkie sense is telling me that he's coming from that direction!" Pinkie then took off towards the entrance of Ponyville at full speed to meet this mystery pony.

Ponyville Entrance, Equestria

After a few minutes, Ripper Roo kept hopping along the trail until it ended next to a sign that read: "Welcome to Ponyville." He became a little confused at such name for such a community, but started laughing due to him knowing that he was a THOUSAND times more crazier than a name like Ponyville.

Ripper Roo decided head onwards and check out what this town had offer. But before he could even a make leap, a pink blur unexpectedly tackled him to the ground until he saw the blur revealed to a pink horse with hot pink curly hair (including her tail), a symbol of three balloons on her rear end, and wore a gigantic smile on her face.

"HI THERE! I'M PINKIE PIE! ARE YOU THE PONY MY PINKIE SENSE TOLD ME ABOUT?!?! WERE YA?! WERE YA?! WELL YOU SURE AREN'T A PONY, YOU'RE LIKE A BLUE DOGGY! BUT DOGGIES AREN'T BLUE SILLY! WHY ARE YOU WEARING A STRAITJACKET? CAN YOU DO TRICKS? CAN YOU TALK? COME ON DOGGY, TALK!"

Ripper Roo tilted his head and he stared blankly at Pinkie for a few seconds until he rolled onto the floor while succumbing to unrestrained laughter at how silly this pony was. Pinkie's smile continued to abnormally stretch widely at how this 'dog' loved to smile and laugh, noticing how he already had a few things in common with her.

"Oh my gosh, even better! A DOGGY WHO LOVES TO LAUGH AND SMILE, LIKE ME!!! But hey, could you please do a trick for me doggy? Pretty please?" Pinkie Pie asked.

Ripper Roo heard this request and ceased his laughter to suddenly jump into the air to drop a strange crate from his feet that was labeled 'TNT'.

Pinkie became confused at what 'TNT' meant. "Hmm. TNT, not what does that stand for? DOES IT STAND FOR TOYS N TOYS?!?!" Then the kangaroo landed on the crate, activating a countdown. "Wait, why is it counting down?" She wondered as her eyes suddenly widened the moment she finally realized what the crate was going to do. "WAIT, DON'T DOG-"

Unfortunately, it was too late for Pinkie to warn him once the crate detonated, leaving a flash that blinded her that once she looked to where Roo previously stood, only remained was a large scorch mark emitting smoke.

Pinkie's hair quickly deflated, losing it's puffiness and making it straight as well as losing her smile. But none of that could be considered worse than what was going to happen. She could feel her eyes be momentarily filled to the brim with tears as she unleashed them and bawled very hard.

"WHY?!?! Why did you have to do it doggy?! You had so much to live for!" Pinkie cried out as she didn't notice Rainbow Dash come up behind her.

"Hey Pinkie, what's with the waterworks? And I heard an explosion a second ago, do you know anything about it?" Rainbow Dash asked.

Pinkie began to calm down and explain her story. "Oh Dashie, it's terrible. It started once I got on break, when my Pinkie sense then told me about a new pony heading into town, so I rushed to meet him but once I found him, he was just a cutie, wittle, bluey doggy! So I found he loved to smile and laugh like me, but then I asked him to do a trick, AND HE BLEW HIMSELF UP!!!" She sniveled.

Rainbow shot her a strange look, unconvinced by what she heard. "Um Pinkie, I understand your distress and all, but I find that a little hard to believe." She truthfully said, despite honesty was Applejack's thing.

"But, but he was here Dashie! And he exploded with a dynamite crate! You gotta believe me!" Pinkie insisted.

Dash then shrugged, "Sorry Pinks, I just can't. I mean, a blue dog? How am I inclined to have seen a-" She stopped talking once she heard laughter come from the sky, seeing what she thought she would never see: a blue dog wearing a straitjacket.

Ripper Roo then landed on Pinkie's back as said mare walked up to a frozen Rainbow Dash (who left her jaw dropped) with a smug grin and said, "Told you soooo!"

Rainbow Dash shook her head and gave up on any retort she planned to say. "I can't do this now. See ya later, Pinkie." She instantly bolted into the sky and off towards her cloud home for a nice, long nap.

"Bye Dashie!" Pinkie shouted, as her happiness was washed away by anger as she glared at Ripper Roo, who gawked at her with a smile and his tongue hanging out.

"And YOU! Blasting yourself away like that! Are you really loco in the coco?!?! What do you have to say for yourself mister???" Pinkie interrogated him as the crazed marsupial waddled over, and gave her a nice, big lick on the face, that being his apology. And sure enough, Pinkie's anger vanished as she and the kangaroo fell down and both had a great laugh over it.

"Oh doggy! I never could stay mad at you! You're too adorable! But, I know that your name probably isn't 'Doggy', so I guess I'll have to come up with something!" Ripper Roo rapidly nodded his head, knowing that Pinkie Pie was for sure on to something.

"Jumpy Bluey?" Roo shook his head. "Danger the Dog?" Another shake of the head came from the kangaroo. "Well, that's all I could come up with. Maybe you have some ideas to han-" Pinkie paused as she saw something on Ripper Roo's straitjacket. "Wait, what's that?" Pinkie looked closely, seeing the name "Ripper Roo" sewn onto it.

"Ripper Roo? Is that your name? Wait a minute, that means you're a kangaroo puppy!!! Come here lil' Roo!" He happily jumped into Pinkie's arms as the mare lovingly nuzzled him. "Don't worry for a second, because Mama Pinkie's going to take care of you." Ripper Roo slowly felt himself warm up to her, knowing that there was someone who cared for him and didn't treat him like a test subject.

"Come on Rippy, let me show you to your new home! You're going to love your new brother Gummy!" Pinkie said, as he hopped onto her back as she trotted her way back into Ponyville. As they wandered through town, ponies gave strange faces at the creature on Pinkie's back, not that Ripper Roo cared.

Author's Note

As I was thinking of another crossover, I thought of Ripper Roo meeting Pinkie and decided that this was going to be my next story. Hope you have a blast with this one!

Ripper's New Family

As Pinkie trotted along, Ripper Roo observed the town as he saw various cottages which looked like they came out of the Medieval Ages. He of course saw many ponies wandering around and going about their business. At least not the ones who shot him weird looks as he passed by, but Roo ignored them as him and his new owner reached 'home'.

"Okay Rippy! Here we are!" Pinkie announced as he turned his head forward to now encounter a building that resembled a gingerbread house of some sort. There was what looked like icing lined up along the eaves of the place, as well as the highest point designed like a cupcake with candles on it.

"Now here's the plan Rippy, I'm going to cover you with a blanket. As I talk to Mrs. Cake in there, I want you to be super-duperly, ABSOLUETLY quiet as I try to convince her to let you stay, right?" Ripper Roo eagerly nodded his head. "When it's time, bounce out of that blanket for your amazing introduction!!!"

Pinkie then drawled a blanket out of nowhere and covered him with it, making a shushing sound to remind him of the plan before heading in. As soon as she entered, the front door's bell rung which alerted Mrs. Cake of customers who should not be in the shop at the moment.

"I'm sorry, but we're closed at the moment. Please come back-" She was cut off by the voice of a familiar pony.

"Mrs. Caaaakkee, I'm baacckk!!!!!" Pinkie said.

"Pinkie, are you back already? You were gone for less than ten minutes. Are you alright?" Mrs. Cake said in concern, as she walked out of the kitchen.

"Oh I'm fine, Mrs. Cake! But you won't believe what happened!!!" Pinkie exclaimed.

She then took notice of the blanket covered lump on Pinkie's back. "Um, what's under that blanket Pinkie?"

"Oh I'm afraid I can't tell you just yet, until I tell you what happened!"

Mrs. Cake was a little skeptical at first, but gave out a sigh in defeat. "Okay then, I'll bite. What happened, dear?"

Pinkie cleared her throat and began her story. "It first started once I left here, when my Pinkie sense alerted me about a new pony with a HUGE passion for smiling and laughing just like me was on their way to Ponyville, so I just HAD to meet him! But once I found him, I found out that he was just an little, adorable, blue doggy! So I ask him to do a trick for me right? Then he pulls a TNT box out of nowhere! NOWHERE! Suddenly, he goes kablooey!!! I thought he was bits for a second, until he came flying down from the sky! I scolded him about it, but then we had a good laugh over it! Next I tried to name him, but then saw his name on his straitjacket: 'Ripper Roo'. Once I saw 'roo' in his name, I suddenly thought, "Oh my gosh, that means he's a kangeroo doggy than just an ordinary dog!"

Cup stared in bewilderment, unable to take anything Pinkie rambled about into account. She knew that the party pony was random and quite a mystery at times, but this took the cake. (No pun intended) "Um, I'm not quite sure I follow your story very well. But it definitely sounds like something you've been writing, and it's coming along pretty well if that's the case." Cup said, as she chuckled at the thought of it.

In response, Pinkie released a frustrated sigh due to the fact that she wasn't being taken seriously. "No, Mrs. Cake! It's very TRULEY, WULEY TRUE! In fact, he's under the blanket right now! So can he stay, please?" Pinkie begged, now wearing the infamous 'puppy eyes'.

Mrs. Cake froze once she heard that question, knowing that could set things back a step for the business. "I don't know Pinkie, it's already tough running the bakery with Pound and Pumpkin around, and you already have Gummy. Are you sure this one won't get in the way?"

"No, you won't have to worry! I'll be on top of everything! I'll keep him in line, take care of him, and the foals will love him for sure!"

"Are you very sure he won't interfere with the business? Or are you just saying that?" Cup questioned, raising an eyebrow in suspicion.

"I absolutely promise! No, I Pinkie Promise! Cross my heart, hope to fly, and stick a cupcake in my eye!" Pinkie finished by sticking her hoof deep into eye, leaving Cup to reel in disgust.

Nevertheless, Cup believed her since the party pony ALWAYS kept her Pinkie Promises, and expected anypony to do the same or else... "Alright then, let me meet 'Rippy' was it?"

"Yep! Now it's time, Rippy! Introduce yourself!!!" Pinkie exclaimed.

At the signal, Ripper Roo jumped out from under the blanket and right in front of Mrs. Cake. He looked at her, waiting for a response as he resumed his laughter like usual. Cup however remained still and in shock, speechless at this creature standing before her.

"Well, what do you think of Rippy? HUH?! HUH?! HUH?! Is he-" Pinkie was cut off by a blood curdling shriek released by Mrs. Cake, who retreated back into the kitchen, knocking plates and other various appliances off the counters in the process.

"Mrs. Cake! Calm down and take a chilly pilly! So can he stay Mrs. Cake? I'm sure he-"

"NO!!!"

Pinkie was taken aback by the sudden outburst. "B- but, what do you mean no?"

"I mean no as in that "Rippy" or whatever he is CANNOT stay here even if I said that he could a second ago! Take a look at him for Celestia's sakes, Pinkie! He's a wild animal! And he's wearing a straitjacket! That just gives me bad vibes and lets me know that a savage like him will not go ANYWHERE near my children!"

The party pony's eyes began to water at the hurtful words used against poor Ripper. "B- b-but I 'Pinkie Promised' you! Rippy won't be a problem to anypony! Just give him a chance, Mrs. Cake!"

"Sorry Pinkie, but I've made up my mind. He cannot stay here. Just go and send him back to wherever you found him." Mrs. Cake confirmed.

Pinkie suppressed her urge to cry, but that did not keep her hair from deflating in despair. Ripper Roo felt sorry for Pinkie as he growled menacingly at Cup, and was dead set ready to pounce on her, but Pinkie stopped him. "Forget it Rippy, it would just prove her point about you. Let's just go take you back to where-" Pinkie was interrupted by a loud cry that broke out, as somepony came through the front door.

It was Mr. Cake, who looked like he had been deprived of peace as the Cake twins sat on his back, bawling their eyes out. Mrs. Cake looked concerned for her darling husband. "Honey, are you alright? You look like-"

Carrot gently placed his children on the ground before unexpectedly embracing his wife. "HELP ME HONEY!!! The twins just won't stop crying!!! I tried feeding them and making them laugh, BUT NOTHING SEEMS TO WORK!!!" Mr. Cake cried out. "FOR CELESTIA'S SAKE, I NEED YOU TO-" As Carrot was about to finish his rant, he eyes fell upon a certain blue creature. "Uh honey, what is that?"

"That thing? That is a wild animal Pinkie brought thinking that she could move it into our home! So she is about to send him back to the Everfree or wherever he came from, right Pinkie?" Said mare silently nodded as Ripper Roo retorted with a snarl. He then directed his attention towards the crying foals with a pang of sympathy striking his heart. This suddenly gave Ripper Roo a clever thought to ease the emotional distress of the babies. In which doing so would lead to him earning the respect and trust of Mrs. Cake, who would just have to let him stay!

Ripper Roo hopped over to the twins and gave Pound and Pumpkin a good lick across their faces, which caused the infants to giggle as the sensation tickled them. The giggling earned the attention of Cup and Carrot, whom the former believed that the 'beast' was going to attack her children, so she decided to save them like the good mother she saw herself being.

"Stay away from our children, you-" Cup was immediately stopped by Carrot, who said, "Wait honey! Look!" Cup then looked at the scene for a moment to see the supposed 'monster' cheering her babies rather than the mauling that she feared would follow. The further she watched, Cup soon felt like a complete moron for what her poor judgement had led to. 'How could I have been such a fool? I thought Rippy would be a threat to my family and he's got Carrot's job under control.' She then turned to look at Pinkie, who had a small smile on her face despite her hair still remaining straight. 'The worst part is, my judgement caused me to yell at poor Pinkie when I had already given her the right to let him stay! And Rippy doesn't seem dangerous since he and the twins quickly bonded, so what kind of pony was I to judge? It's time to make things right.'

Cup walked over to Pinkie and placed a hoof on her shoulder, in which the touch surprised her. "M- Mrs. Cake, are you alri-" The party pony was suddenly hugged by her boss. "I'm so sorry dear, it's just that I was only worried for safety of my children, but that gave me zero right to judge Rippy and shoot down your offer when I had approved to grant him a roof over his head. Can you forgive me for what I've said, Pinkie?"

Pinkie did not need to be told twice, as she leaped into the air with her hair becoming fluffy and her coat brightening once more. "Are you kidding? Of course I forgive you Mrs. Cake! Everypony makes a mistake in their lives, including me! Come on, give Pinkie a hug!" Cup smiled and reciprocated with the hug as promised. Once she pulled away, she noticed that Pinkie had a grin on her face that was stretching in an irregular fashion. "Um, Pinkie? Do you have something to say?"

"Yeah, so um... CAN RIPPY STAY???"

Mrs. Cake playfully rolled her eyes with a light smirk before turning see Ripper Roo hopping around with Pumpkin riding on his back, both laughing with content. She then turned her head back towards Pinkie with the same smirk. "Yes Pinkie, Rippy can stay."

The party pony inhaled sharply and zipped towards Ripper Roo, planting a fast kiss on his forehead. "DID YOU HEAR THAT RIPPY?!?! YOU'RE NOW PART OF THE FAMILY!!!" Upon hearing at this, Ripper set Pumpkin down and leaped onto Pinkie's back, nuzzling affectionately into her fleecy mane.

Mrs. Cake still had unfinished business to attend to as she approached the kangaroo carefully, since she and him did not get off to a great start. "Um, Rippy?" Ripper Roo then faced her, no longer sporting any sign of aggression but that usual smile of his. "I'm terribly sorry for seeing you as a monster that would endanger my children, I was only looking for their safety. But that doesn't excuse me for jumping to conclusions about you, so may we start over? Hello, I'm Mrs. Cake and welcome to Sugarcube Corner: your new home."

Ripper Roo responded bouncing up to her face and licking it before landing with his typical laughter. Mrs. Cake grimaced while brushing off some of the drool, but was not offended since he did with love and not attack her.

Carrot then came over to Ripper to get acquainted with the new member of the Cake family. "Hey fella, I'm Carrot and any friend of Pinkie or my kids is a friend of mine." Ripper Roo tilted his head and laughed in a way of saying, 'Great to meet you, Carrot!'.

As Pinkie watched Ripper, something instantly came to mind. "WAIT! I completely forgot!" She proceeded to zip upstairs and return a second later with Gummy on her back and dropped him in front of Ripper Roo. "Rippy meet your new brother Gummy, and Gummy your new brother Rippy!" Ripper laughed in a manner of saying 'Hi, brother!' Gummy stared blankly with the occasional eye blink until he brushed his tongue against his left eye, as a way of saying, 'Likewise, new brother of mine.'

You know what everypony? Why don't we cherish this moment together with a family picture?" Carrot announced.

"That's an excellent idea, honey. Why don't we have you and me stand next to each other, while Pinkie stands next you. Then Rippy and Gummy will stand in front of us between Pound and Pumpkin. How does that sound?" Cup suggested.

"That's perfect! I'll go grab the camera!" Pinkie took off and brought back the Cakes' family camera, setting it up on a tripod. "Is everypony ready?"

"We're ready, Pinkie. Just tell us when." Carrot said.

"Alright then. One, two, THREE!" Pinkie pressed the button to start the timer as she ran back into position. She announced before the timer ended, "Come on everypony, time to smile!". Everypony (including Ripper Roo and Gummy) each beamed their best smiles as the camera flashed and ejected the photo.

Pinkie grabbed the photo and showed it to Cup and Carrot. "HOW'S IT LOOK? HOW'S IT LOOK?" They both a gander as they both looked at Pinkie. "It's perfect, Pinkie. We see an excellent, loving family what we are and will always be." Carrot said as she and his wife shared a kiss. "Together."

"Well I guess we should open up shop since there's nothing else to do." Cup went and flipped the door sign to 'Yes, We're Open.' Pinkie then thought of another idea. "Oh, oh! Can Rippy help me make cupcakes? I'll teach him the Way of the Party Pony!"

Cup considered it for a moment, thinking if it wouldn't be risky for business. "Okay then, dear. But teach him well! We cannot afford to lose bits!"

"Okey dokey lokey! Come on, Rippy! We've got cupcakes to make n' bake!" Pinkie clamored out as she and Ripper Roo headed into the kitchen to set up for business.

Author's Note

Sorry for the long update since I've been putting it off and that if this chapter seemed like filler, but I'm just thinking about how the future of this story will turn out. Should I keep the story short or long? Leave me constructive criticism and comments as this continues. Thanks!