Comet Tail's Secret Crush

by ThePonyConquerer

Rating: everyone
Tags: Slice of Life, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Romance, Original Character, Random, Twilight Sparkle
Length: 1786

At a young age, Comet Tail had always felt strong feelings for a certain alicorn.

Art made by ChainChomp2

When Comet Tail was in magic kindergarten, he had feelings for a certain purple unicorn about his age. And that would lead to him trying to impress her with his magical abilities... only for them to backfire on him.
Then after hearing of young Twilight being taken up as Celestia's Pupil, Comet outright comes to the conclusion that he undoubtedly really needs to improve his magic.

To impress Twilight of course.

Published 2017-05-04 04:10:10 UTC
Last updated 2022-05-21 02:50:07 UTC

Comet Tail's Secret Crush

“Again. I just have to try harder." A young Comet Tail says standing in the front of the classroom, besides him being a potted plant, although the plant appearing to be dead.

"I don't know. I think you've done all you could." Says Mrs. Fiddlehoof, one of the many magic kindergarten teachers at Celestia's school for gifted unicorns.

"No no I got this." He says confidently, then focusing all of his magical energies into reviving the plant.

After a minute or two, all that he can muster out of his horn is just a small, single spark.

Feeling embarrassed after all that, the teacher comes to his side, trying to comfort him. "Now now, many unicorns of your age haven't yet master the art of revival. Maybe you should just try something less advanced." The teacher says to him, trying to make him feel better.

Comet trying not to shred a single tear. "I suppose."

A young Twilight Sparkle walks over to the dead plant. "Revival ay? I know just the spell." Twilight says before concentrating on her magical abilities.

After a while, coming from her horn to the dead plant, the spell occurs.

After several seconds, the plant soon rises up back from the dead, being at full bloom again.

Twilight puffs up her chest confidently, proud of her doing.

"Very nice work young filly. You always seem to know what spell to use, and how." Mrs. Fiddlehoof says to best student. (No offense to every pony else.)

Comet, looking what Twilight has done to the same plant that he struggled with, blushing a deep shade of red, walks back to his desk.

'How does Twilight make it seem so easy? What with her lovely mane and tail and... flank. What!? No, she's just some regular, ordinary smart pony who's probably not interested in me.' Comet thinks to himself at his desk, hiding his still blushed face from anypony else.

Comet Tail was, as his parents would say, different from everypony else.

However when compared to Twilight Sparkle, he was just like everypony else.

Also the fact that Comet may or may not have had a bit of a crush on her.

'I just knew that Twilight would've been impressed if I revived that plant.' He opens up his notebook, flipping to what looks like a checklist titled: Spells to Impress Twilight Sparkle. A bunch of hearts drawn by her name.

On the list were different spells. One being a balding spell, and another being a hair growth spell. Both having X's marked next to them, meaning failure.

Towards the bottom of the twenty spells, the plant revival spell, Comet marks it off.

'Well, how will I impress her now?' Comet gets a sad thought in his head, turning his head up to face the teacher, then looking towards the desk that seats Twilight, who appears to be digging deep into the book on her desk.

Fifteen minutes pass as the students are dismissed to their next class.

Right when Comet is making his way out, Mrs. Fiddlehoof calls out to speak to him.

"You see, I would just like to know why in the past month you've been showing the class all these different types of spells, only for you to fail? Everything alright with you?" She asks him concerning.

Trying to hide his sadness he says, "Oh uh.. I just like to show everypony my magical abilities." Comet puts on a fake smile.

"Oookaay." The teacher says a little worried.

Comet then leaves the room, making his way to his locker only to have a surprise on his way there.

Not looking where he was going due to his sadness, he bumps right into Twilight, who's also not looking because of the book in her face.

Bumping into Twilight causes her to go backwards, dropping her book, losing her place in it.

Comet also falling backwards, causing his papers and notebook too to fall out all over the floor. The notebook just happening to open up to his checklist.

Comet reacts quickly to it, grabbing the papers as fast as he could before seeing his crush on the floor in front of him.

He gets up off the floor, running over to lend her a hoof, Twilight taking it.

He then realizes who he bumped into and his face starts to blush a little, starting to act nervous, and feel a slight sweat.

"Well, uh sorry 'bout that. Better get on my way and-" He musters up to her.

"Sorry too. It's just this book." She holds it up with her magic to him. "Is really interesting. I'm sure there are many spells that you can do in here." Twilight interrupts him, showing a small smile.

"Oh." He says after hearing what she said while also thinking for a second. "Well can I borrow it for a while? If it's ok with you."

"I guess. Just bring it back to me tomorrow during lunch, ok?" Twilight says approvingly.

"Ok. Thanks again." She hands him the book, then soon after walking back to where she was going.

"She likes me." Comet says happily, looking down at the book with a smile.

Back at his house later that night, Comet's laying on his bed, all stretched out, constantly looking at the book Twilight said he could borrow.

Another thought occurred to him that day also. Does Twilight like me too?

After thinking for so long he decided to give the idea a rest, shutting his eyes close for maybe a minute or two.

Twenty five minutes pass before Comet Tail's mother, Blossom Tail, walks into his room.

"Dearie. Oh sorry for waking you, but I should tell you the good news." She says waking Comet up from his slumber, motioning his hoof as if to have her say what the good news is.

"Well I'm sure you know who Twilight Sparkle is, right?" She asks him first, a slight red blush coming over his face.

"Uh.. yeah. What about her?" He tries to hide his feelings towards her.

"Well, I heard that earlier today she took this very hard, very advanced test. Hatching open a dragon's egg. And to everyone's surprise, she'd pass."

Hatch open a dragon's egg? "Yeah, is that all?" He says trying to hide his true feelings, wearing a fake smile.

"Well, I've heard because of this, Princess Celestia herself has decided to take her up as her own. Meaning she'll move on from magic kindergarten, moving onto the next level of her studies. Aren't you happy for her?" Blossom Tail says excitedly for Twilight.

Comet on the other hand, becomes all shocked at this new bit of news.

His mother would leave him be soon after, leaving her son to think about what he's just been told.

'Will I ever see her again? What about her book, and...' Comet looks down at the book on the bed, then thinking of what to do next.

"Twilight gave me this book to help me improve my magical abilities. And that's what I'm gonna do."

Author's Note

(Part of the Background Story Challenge on Equestria Amino.)

Epilogue

The Friendship Castle was unusually quiet today.

Like so quiet you could hear a pin drop probably.

Twilight was in the castle’s library by herself, categorizing books in their proper place.

“Starswirl’s Guide to the Magic of the Stars. Magic.” She levitates it over by the other books labeled under magic.

Right when she picks up another book, a knock sounds on the door, echoing all throughout the long, empty hallways of the castle.

“I suppose I could use a break.” She walks over to the big front doors of the castle, opening it with one strong push.

On the other side shows Comet Tail. His face showing a small blush along with a confident smile as he sees Twilight opening the door.

“Oh uh hello.” Comet can just feel sweat coming down his face. “It’s been awhile since we’ve seen each other and...” A blank comes to his mind.

What to say, what to say.

Comet stands up straight, feeling confident. “And this book you gave me back when we were young. I just wanna return it to you. As a friend.” Really.

“Oh.” Twilight sounds surprise at this, looking the pony over from top to bottom.

Well, what'd I do? Do I just take it or not?

“Well thank you.” He levitates the book over to her, Twilight taking it from his magical grip. “While you're here, can I... get you a snack or something?” Twilight asks him. In a friendly way of course.

“Oh yeah... can I use your bathroom?”

“Sure.”

“Thank you.” He runs into the castle, not hearing even where it was located.

Alright. Twilight looks down at the book given back to her.

I don’t know what to say.

How wet this book is, or that he remembered?

Remembered. He remembered when I gave this to him.

You know, I’ve experienced many things in my life, but how I can clearly remember doing this as a filly is surprising.

You don’t think? What no.

It’s not like somepony from my childhood who had a crush on me would still be interested?

Can it?

He did say friends.

Twilight looks down at the book sadly, hearing from behind her Comet Tail coming back from the bathroom.

“Hey Twilight. You may not wanna go in there for awhile.”

“Oh. Well, thank you for the book back. I better let you go back on your way.” Twilight forces a smile, trying to look and sound happy.

“Eeyup. I better be on my way.” He does the same as her.

Well, go for it. This is my shot. I should use it now.

Comet looks Twilight into the eyes, crossing his forehooves. “Oh yeah Twilight, I was wondering if... you’ll like to go to this new fancy restaurant opening tonight? You know, as a...” Say it. “ Date.” He says trying to hold back his sweating.

Well, it was worth the shot.

Twilight becomes surprised at what he just offered to her.

“Um...” Yes or no? “I’ll gladly accept your invitation as your... date.” She puts on a small smile.

Wait what. “Well see you tonight I guess. Bye."

“Bye.”

Comet walks away from the castle, still surprised of what he just heard.

Twilight closes the castle’s door, walking back to the library.

Putting the book back into its proper place, she then starts feeling something she hadn’t felt in a long time.

“He likes me.”

Author's Note

So here's a short story I've been working on.

Hoped you enjoyed.

Isn't shipping fun?

Young Twilight's Thoughts

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