The Electric Knight

by VoicefulAuto76

Rating: mature
Tags: Main 6, Romance, Princess Luna, Thriller, Original Character, Cutie Mark Crusaders, Adventure, Sex, Profanity, Violence, Princess Celestia, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Death, Human
Length: 5881

A normal man who enjoys life to the fullest meets an untimely death in an accident. Now finding himself in a new world completely unknown to either him or any other human, he must now find a way to make it in this alien world.

Jason Wright was a normal man with a normal life. He lived in Miami, Florida in a nice beach house with the most heavenly view.
He loved to be around his friends and family, and if the circumstances deemed it necessary, he would even give his life for them. One day as he walking home down the beach coming from work, a mysterious storm appeared out of nowhere. As he was trying to get home he was struck by a bolt of lightning, and unfortunately perished. Now waking up in a new world with new powers, he must now learn to live with his new found powers and learn how to use them to defend his new home along with his new friends.

Published 2018-03-31 11:10:06 UTC
Last updated 2018-06-21 13:58:46 UTC

The Beginning

Jason Wright was a normal man. He was a 6'4 mixed colored man who had a fairly toned and muscular body. He lives in Miami, Florida in a nice looking beach house that has the best view for watching sunsets. Currently, he works as a mechanic at an auto repair shop that his father had opened when he was just a little boy just a mile away from his home on the beach. He loved to be around people especially his friends and family. He would always have their backs when they are in a time of need. Heck if the circumstance called for it, he would throw his life away just to protect them from any harm. Right now Jason is at work working on a car that was said to be having some issues. It was about 5:30 p.m, so it was almost his shift's end. Well, as he was working on the car that needed to be looked over, he heard something from the TV.

" The rest of the evening is expected to be sunny with low wind speeds and without a single cloud in the sky. Perfect time for a late swim and a perfect time to view the sunset." Said the weatherman.

" Well that's good, maybe I will ask Sarah if she will like to come for a swim after my shift is over." He said out loud to nobody in particular. As he continued his work, he heard the bell above the door make a ringing sound signaling that somebody had entered the shop. Jason looked up and smiled warmly as he saw Mr. Patterson, the owner of the car that Jason was working on and a very close family friend of his as well, walking through the front door.
Mr. Patterson was an elderly man, at least in his late sixties and he has seen his fair share of life. He had a circular head with some stubble both there and there on his face. He was also a very close friend to Jason's family and even closer friend to his parents specifically

" Well hello, there Mr. Patterson. What brings you by? Your car isn't scheduled to be ready until tomorrow" he asked inquisitively.

" Hello, Jason. I was just coming by to checking in on things and seeing how you've been. "

" Well everything with your car is just fine, it just needed a few adjustments. Nothing I can't handle. Besides that everything is well in my world. I think after work I'm going to head down to the beach" he said back.

" Oh yeah? I remember back in my day every summer everybody would head down to the beach for some fun in the sun. Yup, those were the best moments in my life. Make sure that you cherish moments like that, life is too short to miss out on the good stuff. "

" I will be sure to do that Mr. Patterson. I love life too much to let it go to waste anyways" Jason responded honestly. A few moments passed by and Jason checked the time to discover that the end of his shift for the day.

" Well, I suppose it's time to head back home. Your car will be ready to leave by lunch tomorrow Mr. Patterson" Jason said as he started to gather his things. Both Jason and Mr. Patterson started to head to the door. Before they went their separate ways, Jason started to lock the door, leaving room for more words to be said.

" Don't forget about the thing I said earlier about the little things. Make sure everything that you do counts, you won't regret" Mr. Patterson said waiting for a reply.

"I won't sir. You can count on it" Jason replied giving a firm handshake before leaving. "See you around old-timer."

"Likewise Jason. Enjoy the rest of your evening" and with that, they both left to go to their respective destinations. As Jason started walking back home, he decided to make a quick phone call.

*Ring *Ring *Ring

"Hello" came a voice from the other side of the line.

"Hey Sarah, I was wondering if you wanted to come to my house for a swim down at the beach, you interested" Jason waited patiently waited for a reply.

"Interested? I'm already here waiting for you to come home! Do you think that I would let this perfect day go to waste? Ha! You thought wrong", Sahara replied with energy.

" One step ahead of me just like always, huh sis?", he asked back as he cracked a smile.

" Of course I am, big brother. I have to be, it's the rules of being related to me" she said back with a small giggle.

" Haha, very funny. Ok, I'm on my way right now, I'll be home in a few minutes." With that they both hung up the phone and Jason continued his way back home. While he was walking down the shoreline, he took the time to enjoy the scenery around him. Taking notice of the setting sun.

" Sunsets like this make life worth living. Enjoy the little things." With a wide smile, Jason continued his way home. After about five more minutes went by, Jason noticed a slight breeze coming out of nowhere. Deciding to ignore it, for now, he continued on his way. Still walking down the shore, he noticed that the wind was getting even stronger and strange dark clouds were starting to form right above him. Standing still, curious and quizzical about his current situation, Jason didn't notice that the mysterious storm had formed so quickly that it was already starting to pour. Shortly after starting to rain, thunder and lightning could be heard and seen in every direction. Bolts of lightning could be seen striking the ground with an immense amount of explosive force. Something with this storm was very wrong. It just came out of nowhere and hurricanes shouldn't be arriving this early in the year.

" Jason! What are you doing? You need to get inside right now, it's not safe!" Sarah exclaimed with a sense of urgency.

Pulled out of his stupor and only being less than a hundred yards away from safety, Jason started to make a mad dash for the house. But suddenly up above, a strange blue light started to appear right above Jason, giving him all the more reason to inside.

" Come on! You got to run faster! It's not safe out there! The storm is out of control!" Now only twenty yards from the house, Jason suddenly stopped and fell to the floor screaming in excruciating pain.

"AAAAAAGGGGHHH!!!!" All around his body, he felt like he was on fire. Every single fiber of his being screamed at him. Stealing a few glances at himself, Jason could see that the veins in his arms were burned with electricity. Then it finally dawned on him. He had been struck by a stray bolt of lightning.

"JASON" Seeing her older brother being struck down by lightning overwhelmed Sarah in mere seconds after it happened. She could see her brother writhing in pain on the wet ground, his clothes burned and smoking slightly. She ran without a moment's notice. She ran like her life depended on it, but rather like her brother's life depended on it, which in this case it did. As she ran up closer to him, she started to notice what that bolt of lightning really did to Jason. His skin was burnt and charred as well as his clothes. She also took notice of his veins, they were all visible and looked black as if they were burned on the inside out.

After rolling in pain for about five minutes, Jason tried his best to open his eyes and try to look at the things around him. All he could see was his sister looking at him with a worried expression and a very blackened sky above. He saw her pull out her phone and start tapping away at the screen, most likely calling for help. As his vision started to fade, he could faintly hear his sister say " Hang in there Jason, help is coming."

"Sarah, please. H-Help me." he managed a faint groan and shortly after that his vision went black.

Author's Note

Hello there everyone. I hope that you enjoy the first chapter of my very first story. Some helpful criticism is welcome. If there are any mistakes, which there most likely are, let me know in the comments below and I will try to fix them later on. In the next chapter, I plan to make the story go to Equestria and continue it from there.

Death And Rebirth

PERSPECTIVE: JASON

Darkness. That's all that I can see around me. I'm floating here in an endless void of darkness. Now trying to figure out why I'm here in the first place, I seem to recall yesterday's events. I remember calling my sister and telling her if she wanted to come by my place to hang out. As I walked down the shore I remember there being a huge increase to the wind speed. although there was never one prior to the moment. Just deciding that the weatherman just made an incorrect prediction in the weather, I continued on my way. Shortly after that moment in time, strange black clouds started to appear in the sky and along with it, stronger winds. When the clouds got above me it started to pour uncontrollably. Lightning and thunder could be seen and heard in every direction that I looked. Looking back at my house that wasn't terribly far away, I could hear Sarah screaming at me to get inside quickly. Seeing her this worried about the weather made it seem serious, since she wasn't the kind of person to be really bothered by some rain.

I remember running to the house and and seeing some weird light. I took notice that the light was coming from above me in the clouds. As I started my attention back to the house, I remember being forced to the ground with such a force that the impact alone should have knocked me out. But no, instead I was pushed to the grounded and started scream. For some reason my body started to burn with a fire so great that it felt like i was going to melt. I stole a few glances at the things around me. I took notice of my arms and how the veins in them looked burnt and darker than the night sky. Then just like that it hit me. I was struck down by a stay bolt of lightning. The pain was unbearable. It felt like I was burning from the ly inside out and my back felt like a freight train ran into it, mostly like the result of the bolt hitting me there.

The very last thing I remember, was my sister looking down at me with the most worried expression that I have ever seen on her face. She was crying and talking to somebody on her phone, which was probably the emergency services. After that everything was a haze.

Now considering my situation of floating in a dark and endless void a came to a conclusion. I was dead. But I still can feel everything around me. Maybe I'm just unconscious? Well if that is the case, that would probably explain why I can still feel a burning sensation all around my body. I looked down at my arms to see if they were covered in burnt veins. Hhhmm. Nope the burns are all gone.

Just deciding to leave alone for now, I ignore it and go back to looking around my surroundings. Still nothing but a black void, but I did take notice of something that wasn't there before. It was talking. I could hear people talking.

" Doctor is he going to be okay?" That voice sounded familiar. I sounded like Sarah. But there was also a second voice that I heard that I never heard before.

" I'm afraid that Jason has suffered-" Then it stopped. I started to hear a rumbling noise coming out of nowhere. I turn around in an attempt to see what was causing the sound. Behind me was a very bright white light. It got even brighter to a point I had to cover my eyes. Eventually everything just disappeared. The white light and the rumbling noise had stopped. When I had opened my eyes, instead of being met with a blackened void, I was met with a white wall. I looked around very slowly. I took notice of a tv set hanging in the corner of the wall. Looking around some more, I saw that I was laying in a bed. Now I started to hear something. It sounded like beeping. Glancing to my right I took notice of a heart monitor. Huh, I must be in the hospital. To my left I heard a gasp.

" You're awake!" Finding the source of the voice, it was my sister, Sarah. She had a huge smile plastered to her face

" Huh, I guess I am. How long was out for?" I asked.

" You've been out for a week." She said sadly, dropping her smile. Man I hated it when she was sad. She was to good of a person to be sad. " Jason have something to tell you and it's not good."

Now with my interest peaked I ask with a curious tone, " What is it sis?"

" Jason, the doctor said that you've been paralyzed from the waste down and that you aren't expected to make it through the night." I was dumbstruck. Not only am I now paralyzed, but now I'm going to die. I look down and start to think about things. Yes I have lived a very good life, but it wasn't enough time. There are so many things that I wanted to do in my life. I planned on joining the military and follow in my father's footsteps as a soldier. I wanted to go places and see the world. Now that none of these things are achievable, I look back to my sister with tears in my eyes. I was all she had left and now my time is up. I won't be able to be there for her anymore. Before anything can be said again, the door to the room opened, revealing the doctor that was treating me.

" Ah, you're awake. That is very good to see." I looked at him with the question that I never saw myself asking for a very long time.

" How long do I have doc? Please, I need to know." He looked at me with a saddened expression.

" You have about an hour or less. Your body is shutting down at an alarming rate. You've already lost some of your organ functions. I'm sorry, but we can't save you Mr. Wright. I wish there was more we could-"

" I understand doc. Say no more, please just spare me." I looked back to sarah. "It looks like this is it kiddo. I wish we had more time to do more things together. Maybe it was meant to be. Despite all of things that's happened, I couldn't be any more proud to call you my sister." And that was her breaking point. She started to sob quietly. She came closer to me and and gave me a tight hug. As we held each other in a heartfelt embrace, I started to accept my fate. At least I finally can be reunited with the rest of my family. Finally I can be at peace..

Suddenly my body started to feel weird. It was a tingly feeling that gradually became a burning sensation. The room started to get really hot and I started to sweat. My vision started to blur and fade in and out. Seconds later I started to jerk back and forth uncontrollably. I couldn't move or anything. Putting two and two together, I figured out that I'm experiencing a seizure. Perhaps this is the way go out. I could hear my sister screaming out of pure terror. I heard voices coming from the door. The voices started to fade and I started to get tunnel vision. I think that this was truly the end for me. In a matter of seconds, stopped moving. The last thing that I head was sustained noise coming from the heart monitor.

PONYVILLE

" Spike stay back. This spell could be dangerous." Twilight Sparkle has always been that of a very curious pony. Well just a few days ago she got curious about something. Where there other things out there other than Equis? Like, is there other living and sentient beings out there in the vast reaches of space or on the plains of a different dimension? Well for the past few days she has been searching for spells that could tell her the answer to her question. The spell would allow the caster to see into other dimensions parallel to Equestria, but this is also her first time using this spell.

"Spike I don't know what will happen when I cast this. There are a number of things that can go wrong" She said in a calm yet serious tone.

" Whatever you say Twilight just be careful. I can't prepare for the arrival of the princesses all by myself. Let me know if the spell was a success. I will take my leave now. See ya." And with that the little purple and green drake took his leave and left Twilight to her devices.

" Alright then let's give this a try." Twilight stood stock still in the middle of her castle library with complete concentration.
She closed her eyes and after a few moments, her horn lit up. It took her a moment, but soon she started to put more magical energy into the spell. Her horn glowed brightly and soon started to spark up a bit due to the amount of energy she was using. Finally after about a minute or so, she started to get results. Straight in front her, a portal opened. I faltered slightly but she was able to stabilize it. Opening her eyes, Twilight looked into the portal, but what she saw confused her. What she saw within the portal was nothing but black storm clouds and lightning. All of this was lived very short though because just as she was about to express her confusion, the portal collapsed on itself and sent a large wave of magical energy in every direction. The result of this was Twilight sent flying into a bookshelf followed by books falling on her and the ground.

" W-what happened? The spell didn't work. What a total bust. Looks like I will have to try again, but not now, it's getting late. I will get some rest and try again tomorrow." And with that Princess Sparkle went to bed.

But what nopony ever noticed in the peaceful town of Ponyville, was the large flash of blue light in the Everfree Forest.

Author's Note

Hello again. My new chapter is now ready to be read by whoever wants to read. Like I said in the last chapter, if there are any mistakes, just comment below and I will try to correct them later on.

Until then, keep calm and read on.

Discovery

Perspective: Jason

Great. Just great. More fucking darkness. I guess this is what being dead is actually supposed to be, at least temporarely anyway. I can feel nothing as I now sit here wondering what is to happen next. The only thing showing evidence of there being something, was the fact that I am somehow standing in the middle of a void. All I can do is sit here and wait. Wait for what I wonder?

As I contemplate this, I start to hear things. Like whispering voices. I can't quite make it out , but there are quite a few voices speaking all together. All I actually make out of the combined voices are, " He is the one", "He is their guardian", and "The knight". I keep hearing all of these voices, but never actually see anyone. Come to think of it, it's starting to get louder and bothersome. As the voices start to get louder I put my hands over my ears in an attempt to drown out all of the voices. The voices just keep going and going, getting louder and louder. When will this end? It's starting to become torture.

"Ah!" I scream out due to the volume of the voices coming at me all at once.

"Make them stop! Pease!" I pleaded. The voices were getting even louder and started to cause me a great deal of discomfort. I closed my eyes and tightened the grip on the side of my head in a futile attempt to keep the voices out. And then, just like that, it all stopped. The voices I mean. I looked up confused and curious as to what had happened to the voices. But when I looked up, I actually could not believe my eyes. Standing in front of me, were three cloaked figures with the hoods draped over their heads.

"Who are you people? Where am I at? How did you even get here?" Now I'm just confused. Who are these people and what are they doing here?" I waited for a reply for a bit. Finally one spoke . By the sound of the voice, I was guessing that the person talking was a female.

" We know that you have questions for us. To answer two of your questions though, we are the Watchers. Currently we are nowhere on the plain of reality. Where we are doesn't really exist. As for how we got here, we can't unfortunatly tell you that." Well now I at least have some knowledge about these people, but now there was a question that had to be answered for the sake of my sanity.

" What do you want with me?" That question rang in my head for a hot minute. I mean, they must want something if they are making such an effort to say something to me." I mean is there a reason that you are here?"

The mysterious woman that talked to me beforehand looked at my and replied with a serious tone, " We are here for you Jason Wright. We are here because we believe you to be the Chosen One." Now... Now I'm deadass confused about what this lady just said to me. The Chosen One? The Chosen One for what exactly? I'm I just going to be the lightskin version of Luke Skyywalker or something?

" The Chosen One? Whatever do you mean by that?" This has to be answered. I need to know what exactly is going on here. Like is there a secret agenda here? You know what? Maybe I'm not dead and I'm just asleep dreaming this weird ass dream.

" Like I said, we are your Watchers. We have watched you for very long time and have reason to believe that you are the one to protect them in their darkest hour." What. The. Hell. Am I on right now? Actually, am I high on that crazy stuff right now? Who is they? Protect?

"Who am I protecting? What the hell is acually going on?" I'm beginning to lose it. Non of this crap makes sense. This is starting to get on my nerves.

" We've given you the means to protect them, but the question is, will you protect them?" I have so many questions for this lady right now. I want to ask her, but I can't piece them together.

*Rumble*

What is that sound?

" It is time to go now. We hope that you protect them with your life. For now you are reborn. Welcome home Electric Knight." Hold up. What did she call me?

On that note, a huge white light burts from behind the mysterious people and then procceded to suck them away. I other hand did not go out the same way. The ground began to crack, and give way. Shortly it swallowed me up and everthing went numb.

2 hours later

Uuugggghhhh, my head. I don't feel so great. Why can't I see. I can feel things around me, but I can't see anything. Oh. I found the problem. Huh, my eyes are closed. I opened my eyes and was met with darkness, but not complete darkness. It was nightime right now. Other than the nightime setting, I have absolutly no idea where I am right now. I'm in a small clearing surrounded by a forested area. But how did I get to a forest? I don't think I'm in Kansas anymore.

Well now I just have to find out where specifically. Especially because there is probably predators here and I'm not trying to become some walking talking chocolate bar for the next thing looking for a bit to eat. Well then on that note, I take my leave and set on my journey throught the forest.

You know what? This isn't all that bad, walking through this forest I mean. Its quite nice. It's nothing compared to the sunsets on the beach, but its up there. A new change of scenry and some good fresh air. I feel very calm ad relaxed right now.

*Grrrrrrrrr*

"Ok I know I'm not hearing things. What in the wide wide world of planet Earth was that?" That didn't even sound like any animal that I've ever heard before. I need to get out of this forest as soon as I can before I become somebody's dinner." Know having an actually reason to actually get out of this forest, I start to jog nervously into a straight direction.

1hour later

*Guuuurrrrgggg*

Looking down at my stomach, I put a hand on it and hold it while at the same time feeling little shakes coming from said stomach.

"Crap. I need to find something to eat but I'm still lost in this forest. If I don't find something to eat soon my mood is going to go sour rather fast." After thinking for a moment I decided to look for food in the forest. After about a ten minute search I come across the most beautiful wild food that has been descovered by mankind. Blueberries. A whole entire goddamn bush of wild blueberries. Suddenly feeling energiezed about coming into contact with food, I make a beeline straight for the bush covered in the delicious blue fruits.

As soon as I get to the blueberry bush I quickly grab handfuls of them and simultaniously stuff my face. I could literally live off of this stuff for the rest of my life. If only my body would let me do that. Stupid dietary needs. More and more blueberries get grasped by my hands and soon swallowed to be later digested in my stomach.

After about ten miutes of this I had reached my limit. "That's it. I'm done with these. I want to eat more but I don't think I have enough room for a single berry anymore. No more berries, I can't take it anymore." With a big sigh amd a full belly, I make my way through the forest once again. With nothing better to do I start to think to myself about the most recent events that have occurred in last few hours.

Ok, so first I'm having a good day at work on a nice summer day talking to dear friend of mine. Then I'm going home to go hang with Sarah, my sister. Right when I see her at the house s a mysterious storm comes out of nowhere and then electricutes me. My sister was hovering over me crying and on the phone with emergency services. Next thing I know I'm in a hospital bed with only a few minutes left to live. All of the sudden I start having a seizure, next thing I know I'm talking to cloaked people and then wake up in a random forest in the middle of nowhere. Yeah that's a lot ofthings to take in at once. Yeah, in my mind thats not really a good way to end the day, considering it was late in the evening when this all started.

*SNAP

" What the hell was that?" I do a a quick 180 in an attempt to find the source of the noisebut find nothing." Whose there?" No response. I don't know, but I think that someone or something is out here and is watching me." Show yourself immediatly of suffer the consequences!" Huh, what am I talking about? If that's a wild ass animal, I'm going to metaphorically raped. This is starting to really put me on edge. Whatever or whoever is watching me, I think---

*Boing*

Oh. It was just a rabbit. I swear if I'm in this forest for to much longer, I'm going to have a heart attack. Well it looks like I can continue my walk throught the forest. At least hopefully this time I don't enconter something that might actually bring me some harm. Now, off to Wonderland. Just joking, but in all seriousness, I've got to be getting close to getting out of the forest, I've been walking for hours.

*RRRRROOOOAAAARRR*

I whip around with a quick 180 and I could not believe my eyes. Standing right in front of me was a lion, but this was no ordianary lion. This one had wings like a bat and had a tail that looked like its from a scorpian."I don't think I'm in Forida anymore", I quickly say as I turn around and run as fast as I possibly can.

*RRRRROOOOAAARRRR*

"AAAAHHHHH!!!" I scream as the lion bat scorpian thing starts to give chase in order to turn me into it's next meal. Unfourtunatly for me I'm not as fast as this beast and it catches up with me fairly quickly. It gets as close as it can to me and gives me good smack.

The force of the impact was enough to send me into a nearby tree. I hit the tree so hard that it knocked the wind out of me. As I lie there on the ground the creature starts to slowly, but surely, close the gap between me and it, studing me and thinking about all of the pain it's going to make me feel. I sit up against the tree and stare at it with wide eyes.

"Am I going to die? Again? Death by failed hybrid experement? This is the worst day of my entire life", I say as the beast gets closer to me. Finally it gets within four feet of me and manages to crack a sinister smile as it brings up it's massive paw in a final strike to claim my life. I watch in slow motion as it brings it's paw down upon me. In a final effort to protect myself, I
close me eyes and bring my arms up and thrust them towards the monster. And in the fraction of a second later I hear a cry of pain. I crack open my eyes and can not truly believe what I saw. Before me was the lion but what made it very suprising was the newly formed hole in the middle of it's chest. Around the hole I could see little traces of electricity. I look at my hands and they have the same little traces of electricity dancing between my fingers. I look back at the animal and hear it let out a pained groan and watched it fall to the ground, unmoving." What the hell did I just do?" They stress of everything finally got to me and I fall back against the tree, passed out. What I never noticed though, was the rainbow colored creature watching from the clouds above after being awoken from a flash of blue light

Perspective: Rainbow Dash

"Sweet Celestia! What the hay was that!? That this just took out a bucking Manticore in one blow! I'd better go get Twilight and go tell her about this.

Five Minutes Earlier

Perspective: Twilight Sparkle

Sleep. Sleep is something that I don't get too often. Mostly because of all of the studying that I do. Tonight though, was supposed to my break. Espestially after that failed experiment with that new spell. I was having the most wonderful dream too. I was dreaming of standing beside Princess Celestia with her looking down on me with such a prideful exspression. After all of the years of hardwork, I finally stand beside her as her most prized student. The dream would have been better if it wasn't so shortly lived due to a certain rainbow maned pony crashing through my balcony doors in the middle of the night.

Present

" Rainbow Dash! Why did you blast through my doors and wake mem up?" To be honest I was not in the mood for this. I was having an excellent dream and I was getting a decent amount of sleep for the first time in a long time. Whatever Rainbow Dash came barging into my library for, in the middle of the night better be important." Rainbow, what is the reason for you to barge into my home and wake me up?

" Twilight, you'd never guess what I just saw!" Dash exclaimed.

" Well what was it?

"That's just it. I don't know. It was some two legged light brown colored creature."

"Oh. Well that doesn't sound too bad. How much harm could it really do? And there can't be that many of them considering that that creature doesn't sound familiar. Let me go look." I said as I got up and went downstairs to look for any information about this creature Rainbow found.

" Hhhmmm, let's see. Two legged creatures... well that's odd. " I say generally confused.

" What is it Twilight? "she asked.

" Well it appears that the creature you saw doesn't seem to be in any records that I have. You may have stumbled upon a new species! We will look for it in a few hours when the sun comes up. Let the others know to come here in the morning so we can get prepared".

"Aye aye captain" and with a quick salute rainbow takes off into the night sky.

Well I'd better get back to bed and get as much rest as possible. "We've got a big day tomorrow."

Author's Note

I'm sorry that this took so long. I've been procrastinating and forgetting about this. I've been working and have been getting tired to the point where I'm just finding any reason to sleep but it's here now. And because this is my first story, any helpful criticism is appreciated.

Keep calm and read on.