Author's Note

Hey guys thanks to all of you who voted and gave your opinions. I'll be uploading this rewrite chapter with a few days in between them, I want to make sure that I spell check them and make sure they make sence. And a big shout out to sword master for helping me.

Chapter 1

Night time in Equestria, the moon was a perfect crescent shape, shining its light upon the world below and on a city in the clouds, Cloudsdale where the Twilight and the Wonderbolts celebrate the anniversary of Rainbow Dash and her time in amongst the Wonderbolts. "Let give a big ol cheer for Rainbow." Applejack raised a mug of cider in one hand while the other was around Rainbow Dash’s shoulders.

Dash blushed, and playfully pushed Applejack’s arm off. "Hehe thanks, guys. It means a lot that I get to share this night with you, and my teammates," she replied taking a swig of her cider.

A Pegasus with a yellow coat and bright orange mane wearing a blue and yellow jumpsuit. She had an air that demanded respect when she entered the room, she walked up to Rainbow and gave her a proper slug on the shoulder in honor of her achievement. Spitfire had decided before the occasion to leave her uniform on along work the other members Fleetfoot, and Soarin attended the party

Tonight was different though as it was a time to kick back and enjoy the company of friends and her fellow Wonderbolts. "You've earned it rookie! Not only have you broken academy records, but you've shown to be an excellent leader," She exclaimed leaving Rainbow Dash to blush again at the compliment from her superior officer. “Keep up the good work and I might just have somepony good enough to replace me someday eh?”

“Hey wait!” Soarin called out from across the room after he had noticed Spitfire was starting to get a little chummy with his wingmate. “I wanted that promotion! I’ve been here way longer than her, don’t I deserve it?”

“Heh, maybe next time.” Spitfire laughed. “Unless you two wanted to go outside right now and have a race. I’d possibly consider the winner when it comes time to choose my replacement.”

“Wait, you’d only consider it?” Soarin exclaimed in dismay while Rainbow blew a raspberry at him from behind Spitfire’s back. “What about the last show we did for Princess Celestia…? Doesn’t that count?”

“As I recall you bumped into Fleetfoot over there and wrecked the routine about halfway through the show.” Spitfire countered with a smirk, looking at Soarin like he was a naughty colt that needed some humility taught to him. “Still want to buck for a promotion for my job or can I pull out some other examples for you? I can think of a few more times can’t you Clipper?”

“Ha! You hear that Soarin? Spitfire thinks I’m Commander material!” Dash declared pridefully before Spitfire turned on her as well.
“Don’t think you’re off the hook Crash.” She chuckled to which Dash shuffled her hooves nervously and avoided the knowing gaze of her Commander. “I’ve got plenty to say about your performances. You’re good Dash, one of the best. Don’t let that go to your head though. You may be a Wonderbolt but you’re not Commander yet.”

“Wha’, Dash lettin’ her head get too big?” Applejack laughed from outside the conversation. “Never!” Applejack was a earth pony mare who wore a red flannel shirt under a pair of blue jeans overalls and a seton hat at top her blond mane. Dash blew her a raspberry and stick out her tongue causing the farm pony to chuckle.

Dash took the time to chat with all her friends and teammates. Attendings said party were the following. The princess of friendship Twilight Sparkle who wore a purple skirt a white button up shirt with a violet vest. The animals lover Fluttershy who had a green turtleneck sweater and tan pants. Next was the party mare pinkie pie who wore a light blue tank top with white stripes and blue Jean shorts. And finally the fashionista pony Rarity, she wore a black sweater with black shorts and leggings with a pink beret

As the party went on a loud boom came from outside, causing the ponies inside to investigate the origin of the sound "Hey! Look everypony! It's a shooting star, let's make a wish," Pinkie said cheerly while pointing to a shining light cutting across the moonlit sky.
As the ponies stared in awe. They couldn't help but notice the star was coming towards them at an alarming speed.

"I'm no star geek, but I'm pretty sure that isn’t a shooting star, Pinkie," Rainbow Dash exclaimed as the star came closer and closer, causing the ponies to scatter as the shooting start quickly went through the clouds, in a few more they heard it hit the ground below with a deafening boom. The girls looked over the edge of the clouds and saw a smoke rising from somewhere on the ground near the Everfree Forest.

As the group made their way down to the crash site where the meteor had landed in the Everfree Forest, they soon saw the enormous crater that had been made by the impact.

"Whoa. That must have been one big space rock to make a crater this big," Rainbow Dash exclaimed as she briefly looked from one end of the crater to the other.

"With any luck the meteor could be huge, which means more to examine. Think of all the research paper I could write!!" Twilight squealed in excitement focusing her magic in her horn as it glowed and she summoned a quill and paper.

"Ooh! perhaps, it may have some kind space jewelry inside," Rarity said, her eye sparkling as she imagined the different kinds of dresses she could make.

“Or maybe it's some sort of huge alien monster sent from another dimension to conquer Equestria!!!" Pinkie yelled both half scared and have excited.

"I hate to burst your bubble there sugar cube, but that seems a bit far-fetched, don't you think?" Applejack interjected waving a hoof dismissively.

Rainbow Dash, being the “go-getter” type, flew down to the center of the crater, "Well, whatever it is, we won't know until we find out,” she had reached the center but couldn't see what lied ahead due to the large clouds of dust that had yet to clear.

"Careful, Rainbow Dash! It could still be hot from entering the atmosphere!" Twilight yelled, trying to warn her friend from being reckless.

"Relax Twilight. I'll be fine. Besides, it's just some old space rock. What's the worst that could happen?" She laughed as she used her wings to blow some dust away.

"OR IT COULD ACTUALLY BE AN ANLIEN THAT OPENS UP AND GRABS YOUR FACE AND PUTS A BABY ALIEN THAT WILL GROW UNTIL IT POPS OUT YOUR CHEST!!!!!!!" Pinkie yelled as she began to take deep breath from speaking so fast. All the ponies looked at her with both confusion and concern "What? I saw it in a movie." she shrugged as she winked at the audience.

"Pinkie, who are you winking at?" Fluttershy quietly asked pinkie who was looking the other way from the group.

"Oh, nopony. Hehehe!" she giggled. As the group wondered whether or not to take Pinkie Pie’s, albeit weird, suggestion seriously, Rainbow Dash had blown away the remaining dust, revealing a dark, large lump.

"Hey, Twilight. I think I found that meteor, and it is huge guess you'll be able to nerd out huh?" She grinned, turning back to her friend, but to her surprise, they all had a shocked look on their faces, Fluttershy and Pinkie's seemed a bit more paler.

"Hey, what's the matter?I thought you girls were excited about this thing," she shouted pointing behind her. As she watched her friends as they continue to grow paler, until she noticed Applejack gesturing with her hand for her to turn around.

"Geez, what's the matter with you guys. It's just a roooo.....ck." As she turned to make her point her eyes locked to where the rock had been earlier, and notice it was taller than before. Her eyes widen as she slowly gazed up seeing the rock was no rock, but a creature that stood almost a foot taller then herself. It's tall body was covered by the black dust that covered everything but its eyes. And as it moved to toward her, she could see it's eyes looking straight at her, its mouth open to breath showing a mouth with sharp canines.

"I KNEW IT WAS AN ALIEN, EVERYPONY RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!!!!!" Pinkie screamed as she started running in the opposite direction of the crater. The creature looked up at the ponies at the top of the crater, and back to Rainbow Dash tilting its head.

Rainbow Dash just froze as the creature crouch leaned close. "What are you?" Were the only words that escape from her lips before the creature push off the ground and started to take flight.As she watched, she noticed the mysterious creature had no wings to fly with, and questions raced through her brain "It can fly? How can it fly without wings?" She wondered as she saw two of the Wonderbolts flying after it.

"Hey Crash, get it together! We need to see what this thing is and if it's going to be a problem." Spitfire yelled passing over the crater following the other two pegasi in pursuit of the alien.

"Wah? Oh, right. I'm coming!!!" She said, snapping out of her daze, before getting her balance back as she took off in pursuit to rejoin her team.

As Rainbow Dash quickly caught up to Spitfire and the rest of the Wonderbolts, she was able to see the creature flying a head of them "Any idea what that thing is newbie?" Spitfire asked while gaining speed.

"No idea, but whatever it is, it's as tall as us and can fly without wings." Dash began to flap her wings harder as tired to increase her speed to catch up with Fleetfoot and Soarin.

"Yeah,tell me something I didn't already. What I meant is what in Equestria is that thing?" Rolling her eyes as she and Rainbow Dash caught up to the other two Wonderbolts and began to fly in formation with her and Rainbow Dash in front and the other pegasi flying on either side of them. As they soon were gaining on its tail, the creature looked back and started to dart in a different direction, making a sharp left. Rainbow and the others couldn't react fast enough before they stopped in mid air ,and stared flying after it again.

"Whatever that thing is it sure knows how to make sharp turns." Spitfire examined catching her breath while she and the others tried to get back on its tail.

As they flew after the mysterious creature, they found themselves over a huge lake, that glistened under the moonlight. The creature flew low until its body was barely touching the water, causing the surface of the water to part ways. "Now's our chance! Everypony, dive!" The rest of the group nodded as they folded their wings in and made their decent. As the dove, they began to pick up incredible speed until they right on top of it. The creature looked back and saw the four anthropomorphic ponies gaining on it and started to pick up speed. In a quick movement, it dove under the water, causing the water to shoot up spraying the pegasi in the face. The water splashed with powerful force hitting their bodies, causing them to fall into the lake. Rainbow Dash, however was a bit higher up then the others and remained airborne. She watched as it had made another sharp turn this time going to the right.

"Oh no you don't. Not this time!" She quickly banked to the right, leaving the group behind in hot pursuit of the creature.

Soon she and the creature were above a patch of trees they had apples in them as far as the eye could see. "Woah, we must be over Sweet Apple Acres." Her attention had been brought back to the creature, once she saw how close she was, she flapped her wings hard. Once she was close enough she reached her hand out ,and was about to grab what she assumed to be a it's. "Is that a tail?" Before she could even ponder this thought, the creature turned body so it was facing her but still flying away. It raised its arms to its face and yelled "SOLAR FLARE!!!"

A bright blinding light shined out of nowhere leaving Rainbow Dash blind. As she rubbed her eyes trying to relieve the spot she saw her vision came back only to see a red barn in front of her. "OH BU!!!!!!" She yelled unable to fly away as she crashed into the barn, pushing her head into a room while the rest of her body was outside.

"What the hay, what's going on?!" A small filly yelled looking around her room only to see Rainbow Dash's head above her bed.
"Rainbow what are doing up there?" Applebloom asked tilting her head.

"Oh, hey Applebloom....did you see an...alien go by?" Rainbow muttered as her head spun, and all she could see were twinkling lights and stars.

"Um are you okay Rainbow? Do you need a doctor?" Applebloom asked before helping the prismatic pegasus out of the wall only to have her pass out on the floor.