Hey guys, It’s me again, I’m writing this story for practice, nothing more. This will probably be the worst thing you have ever read…ever. I am new to being an author and won’t really be updating this story that much if I continue it (that is if it is reasonable). So yeah, please don’t give me to much hate, constructive criticism sure, but no hate please. So yeah, welcome to Tom’s Time In Equestria: Revamped, coz the first one was shit.
P.S. If some of this is weird or I’ve messed up some character’s personalities or even missed them out altogether, its because I’ve only watched up to Season 2 Ep 7 “May the best pet win”
Where are you? Who are you? How did you get here? A million questions cross your mind as you awaken lying on the ground. You feel grass under you, and hear birds chirping the melody of nature. Your back hurts, like you landed on it hard… but you don’t remember how. You try to remember your name. What was it again? Tim, Timmy, you know it started with a “T” Tyrone…Wait, Tom, Tomas…Yes! That’s it Tomas, or Tom for short.
Great, so you know your name. But what ever was in you mind before is gone, nothing, empty. You still haven’t opened your eyes as they are crusty and it feels like they haven’t opened in a while. This is starting to feel scary. You notice that your feel panicky inside. You once again try to open your eyes, and you manage just opening them a crack. You see blue skies with very little clouds drafting in them. You close them again and try to move but find you can only rock to and fro without it hurting. Why is it hurting in the first place? This question crosses your mind over and over.
Ok You think to yourself. How did I get here? Where-ever “Here” Is >
You try remembering anything that would be important. A word suddenly forms in your mind, “Human”. This seems to jog your memory. Ok I am a human You remember what a human looks like. Suddenly it all comes back to you. You are a young human teenage boy, you go to high school and you are currently undergoing a profession in Electronic music. You are reasonably intelligent and are currently coming back from a depressive streak. You are also into cartoons and anime. You remember something specific about yourself, You are a Brony. A person who watches A cartoon called My little Pony who is above the age of Thirteen.
You try and remember what you were doing just before you somehow came here…. That’s it! You were getting ready for school when you started to feel weird and collapsed. So, you blacked out and when you woke up you were here.
You try and clench your hands, but find you cant. You try moving your toes, weird, you cant do that ether. It feels like someone has chopped both your hands and feet clean off! What is going on here? You think. You try to form some words in your mouth, but cant. You feel an undying thirst mingling with an equally undying hunger. You really need sustenance. You try opening your eyes again and find you can open them a little more then before. You open your eyes to a Yellow Blob with pink around it. The blob seems to be forming itself when you realize that its you eyesight accommodating to its surroundings. Then a voice cuts through all rational thought.
“Umm…S-Sir, may I ask w-why you are laying on the cold ground?”
You blink as your eyes refocus, and realise you are staring up at a..... Pegasus pony? The pegasus has pink hair and a yellow face and cute features. Wait… Wait...WHAT, Y-Your in...in...Oh my god, your in Equestria. This is unreal, this is every bronys dream. You. Are. In. Equestria....But wait. this might be a joke. But it seems so real. Bt enough of that now. so you know where you are. You think. All the while the pegasus is staring down at you with a worried face. Suddenly you realise that you’ve seen this particular pegasus before, on MLP. What was her name, yes, you remember it is a she. But what is her name? ... Fluttershy? Yes that’s it, you remember now.
You try and speak.
“F-Flutt-Fluttershy?” You croak. You can barely speak your throat is so dry, and the fact that your still reeling over the fact that your actually in Equestria...
“Y-Yes, Wait…how do you know my name? I’ve never seen you before, do you know me?” She enquires.
“May I please have some water? My throat is parched.” You ask, purposely not answering her question.
“O-Oh! Umm, Yes, hang on ill be back soon, h-hang on.” She hurries off in search of a water source. You close your eyes and try to get some rest
After about a couple of minutes she comes back with a bottle of water In her mouth. She places it on the ground near you and bites off the bottle cap. “Here, let me help” She says in a kind voice. She picks up the bottle and tips the precious clear liquid in your open mouth. You swallow repeatedly, feeling rejuvenated by the second. Soon all the water is gone and you feel much better. “Thanks Fluttershy” You say.
“Your welcome….and can I ask again how you know my name?” She asks.
You sigh, “It’s a long story, and I’m afraid that I don’t think you are the right pony to hear it.”
“O-Oh, Ok” She looks downcast.
“Not that I don’t trust you or anything” You say hurriedly “its just… well, kind of huge.”
She looks at you kindly “I understand Mr Stallion”
“Thank yo…. Wait, what did you call me?” You do a double take
She has a questioning look on her face “I called you Mr Stallion….Why?”
You look down at yourself, and yell out loud.
Your body is a light black and you have (as Fluttershy tells you) a black and dark green striped tail and mane. You look down at where your legs used to be you notice that you have rear pony legs with hooves on each. Where your arms used to be are front legs with hooves on them as well. You arch your back and feel something move. Could they be… You try to stand with the help of Fluttershy. As you get to your feet (ill use feet instead of hooves so that you who are reading can understand more) you notice that you have a pair of wings tucked to you sides near your back.
You’re a Pegasus! Wow. So much for being Human
Thank you readers for sitting through this. Im not sure if I should continue this. I’m planning (if I decide to continue) that the main character should hook up with ether Fluttershy (because of her gentleness) or Vinyl Scratch (because of the same music profession) . Any help will be appreciated, and tell me what you think of the story. Remember…Not hate. Love and Tolerate. :D