Memories Long Forgotten

First I'd like to thank crazypony26 and arielg1284 for being the first to read my story and comment on it.

Three people so far didn't like my story, that's discouraging, but what's even more discouraging is not
a single one had the decency to comment and let me know what I did wrong so I don't cause more
hating of my writing later. Please if your gonna thumbs down my story let me know why? Otherwise
I can't improve.

There's a few parts of my story I tried out in what I thought was a clever way and would like to know how
many of them worked. First I know most of you probably guessed it rather quick, but how many of the
gem was breaking did you read till you guessed what was happening?
Second how well did my sonic rainbow scene work out, did you really think I let her die? Did it cause
you to fear for her? or did it backfire and you almost just stopped reading the story there disgusted
at me for even daring to kill Dash?
Lastly did any of you guess what I'd do in the epilogue to finish up my story?
I'd really like some feed back on these questions and to know what else you might of liked or hated that
I did so I can do better if I write another story.

Deleted scenes
the first one is right after the sonic rainboom, I wasn't sure if it really fit in or not so I decided to leave it out
let me know if you think otherwise, please
the second one takes place when Sonic's telling his story, after I finished that chapter I realized I forgot to
put it in. Since it's only real purpose in the story was to confirm that Pinkie's family was dead and wouldn't
miraculously show up later and to imply that a little weight was taken off Sonic's emotional shoulders with
the knowledge her family hadn't suffered I decided I didn't put it back in. Besides it seemed kind of morbid
to me but if you want to see it continue on after the other deleted scene.

"No Dash tell me what happened now!" Applejack said in a firm no nonsense voice
"Fine! Discord tricked me, I thought he had moved the ground up and I wouldn't be able to pull up"
"And you continued to try it anyways!"AJ exclaimed.
"Yeah I couldn't let you all down, we needed Pinkie, I couldn't give up"Dash answered defensively.
"What good would it have done us if we had got back laughter and then lost loyalty!"
"I hadn't thought of that."Dash said quietly, but AJ continued on
"More important what made you even think that we could stand to lose you, whether you were an
element or not, did you even stop and think about how we'd all feel if we lost you! We could'a
tried again or found some other way, you didn't have to sacrifice yourself for us! Promise me
Dash! promise you'll never do something like that again!"AJ shouted as angry tears of worry
ran down her cheeks.
"I promise AJ, I wasn't thinking and I'm sorry"Dash mumbled,"Now did it work?"she asked in a
hopeful voice.
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"After the first trip back to her farm I went and broke into the morgue, in the coroners office I found
the files on her family. Inside I found the reports and pictures of them all that I forced myself to look
at. I was relieved to find that the explosive had sent the inside of the silo into a central area of speared
metal that killed them all instantly. although still guilty of what I'd done, at least they hadn't suffered
from my mistake.