Tanks Fantastic Equestrian Adventure

Yes, well, on a overall level this story sucks, but I will continue it in the hope I will get better along the way.

And I will need a proof-reader most indefinately, for the lack of grammer and spell checks on the site restrict me to write like I speak, which isn't good.

I also appreciate all the constructive criticism, it helps me grow as a writer and I hope that I will improve over time.

-Lancejack77