This is my first fanfic for this site
Disclaimer:i only one my charater nothing else
NOTE:READ THIS NOTE BEFORE YOU COMPLAIN YOU'LL MAKE A FOOL OUT OF YOURSELF IF YOU DON'T!!!!
I'm in 8th grade so i'm still learning grammar and what not plus i'm not allowed to use P.O.V. script writing which the entire story was relying on. and this laptop is old so some keys on the keyboard becomes unresponsive every now and then.
Chapter 1 In a new world
Time:13:00 Location:somewhere over Equestria
"Ok It looks like the dimensional portal works but will take awhile to get back a full power" said a mysterious Stallion to his droids .time to launch B.E.E.-probe-XR" and just like that a Giant Bee-like robot came appeared "You know what to do and also there's 7 unknown energy source detected go and find out what it is" he commaned and off went the probe.
Location:Ponyville library
As Twilight was sorting all of the books she heard Spike's screaming "TWILIIIIIGGGHT!" he shouted, "What is it spike?" The unicorn asked. "THERE'S A GIANT METAL BEE IN THE HOUSE!!", "Don't be silly there's no such thing as a-a-a-a-...." she became speechless as she realized that he was telling the truth. Then with out warning the 2 part what appears to be the eyes suddenly shined some type light on her and Spike as if i was studying us then a holographic model of Twilight and Spike appeared then went towards it's eyes after that the lights went away so did the metal bee. "What just happened"?Spike ask still struck with fear "I GOT TO ALERT EVERYPONY SPIKE TAKE A NOTE AND SEND IT TO EVERYPONY!" she shouted instead of answering Spike's question.
Location:Apple Farm
As the Probe went to what appears to be a apple farm for there was rows and rows of apple trees B.E.E. detected another unknown energy source It decided "I might as well take a sample of a apple and continue scanning" It thought so It went to find the source and get a apple. as it was getting the 5th apple because the fist 4 had worms in it,it see orange mare but this one had a cowboy hat that goes by the name Applejack who happens to be the source of the unknown energy making this one energy source 2 out of 7. "what are you and what do you think your doing?" she asked. It only responded by scanning her and stored the non-worm apple just before it could fly off it got taken out by rocks thrown by 2 ponies that was Big Macintosh and Apple bloom which by it's guessing is her relatives. As it recovered from the hits the metallic insect scanned the other 2 and went on.
45 min later
Location: FlutterShy's cottage
It encountered a little cottage home to hundreds of animals which by also guessing is the location of unknown energy#3.As B.E.E. approached it get knocked down again only to hit the ground this time from taking 2 carrots to the head forcing it to shutdown after who knows how many min later it reboot only to see a yellow Pegasus known as Fluttershy along with a rabbit named Angle who could have been the one responible for the sudden reboot It scanned which caused the shy pegasus to faint them and tried to fly away only to be blocked by the Angle who threw 2 carrots at me it countered this action by creating a flash that temporarily blinds the target befor flying off to source #4.
50 min later
Location:Rarity's Boutique
"Oooh gems This would be something worth taking a sample of" It said as It grabbed a gem from the only Boutique in town deciding not to test reflectivity because the last it need the laser to bounce back towards it destroying the probe and many more."GIANT BEE!!" shouted a young filly, B.E.E. turned around to see Sweetie belle a young white filly along with her older sibling know as Rarity which has the energy source so it did my little routine only to be hit with a stick "DROP THAT GEM!!" Rarity commanded. But the probe responded by saying no causing Rarity to say "IT TA-TA-TALKS!" before fainting while Sweetie belle was hiding so i proceeded to make an escape.
Location: The Cake's House
"Error Error target is moving at blinding speed does not compute" it thought as Pinkie pie a pink mare that it just scanned after scanning the cake family who are currently hiding kept bouncing around with a cake that i was almost done taking a sample of. "YOU NEVER GET THIS CAKE!!! she shouted.For the sake of my energy level (which is currently at 50%) It grabbed a cupcake put it in the sample storage and continued on to source #6.
30 min of searching for a cloud city while taking samples later
"Bouncable clouds it Thought these were one of a kind" I thought as closed the sample storage door just before being alerted that source 6 is approacing me at hight speed. "Initiating pursuit mode" It said in which it transformed in to a more areodynamic version of the B.E.E.-probe just in time to see the infamous cyan rainbow colored mane and tail Pegasus Rainbow dash pass by it which is source 6 thus starting the pursuit. As B.E.E. was preforming speed sync in which it attempts to match the targets speed it scaned her which caused her to notice it then put in the brakes causing B.E.E. to fly right in to a cloud. It wasn't long before i was found by the same cyan pegasus who happens to be the first one to recived the alert. "You must be that metal bee twi was panicking about i'm taking you to the princess" she said.Fearing that it would get dismantled it tried to escape from her she tried to take B.E.E. somewhere but i used the blinding flash freeing it from her grip allowing It to fly toawrds a castle for the final source unaware it was spotted by a young orange Pegasus Scootaloo.
At the castle
2 min later
"Your telling me that the Bee is heading towards here?" Princess Celestia said Questioning scootaloo. "YES....THAT'S.....RIGHT!" scootaloo said between gasps indicating she got here by running. "Alright then GUARDS! SEAL OFF ALL ENTRANCES AND EXITS WE HAVEN INCOMING INTRUDER!" the princess of the sun shouted
Even though they have the entire castle on lock down the probe won't let that stop it for it has not yet shown it's full potential .
As it approached the now secured castle it picked up speed while forming a drill in front of it's face breaching the castle.
Determined to complete it's task it explored the biggest rooms first only to find guards ready to fend it off but were no match for it's blinding flash. Attempting to get away unnoticed scootaloo quietly runs while the bot wasn't looking but ends up getting scanned anyways for 2 reasons 1: it knew she was there all along Reason 2:she has a link to the unknown energy. Just as it left help arrived: The mare 6. "Have you seen a-" Twilight started before being interrupted "Giant metal bee yes i have in fact it went that way." scootaloo said pointing to the left sending them on their way to assist the princess at stopping this unknown mechanical creature.
I know the grammar is horrible just tell me what needs to be fixed and I get It fixed ASAP Because not all of my Ideals comes out good let alone perfect and also for now on any negative comments needs to contain improvement request those that don't contain one,or are there just to describe how bad i am,or to make fun of will be removed starting on 9/14/2012. Also Most editing and chapter writing will be done on weekends and holidays.
