A Pair Of Assholes

by Birdybirdbird

Rating: mature
Tags: Sex, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Zephyr Breeze, Porn, Fetish, Rainbow Dash
Length: 5107

RD stays over at Fluttershy’s parents’ house after some tiring Wonderbolt training, but in the night her sleeping body receives an annoying, horny and very kinky visitor.

Exhausted, tired and very sweaty, Rainbow Dash decides to crash at the Shy’s residence as her body needs sleep, but little did she know that a certain Zephyr Breeze would also be there, him fully willing to take advantage of her sleeping state to get a taste of what he’s always craved: her stinky, sweaty asshole.

Contains a shit-ton of ponut kinks: particularly huffing, rimming, and then fucking the dirty ass of a sleeping Rainbow Dash.

Enjoy!

Art by dragonpone
1560002 on Derpibooru

Published 2023-08-16 21:10:01 UTC
Last updated 2023-08-16 21:10:01 UTC

Rainbow Smash

In a nice suburban family home up on one of many clouds, Posey Shy and Gentle Breeze were sat in their living room, idly reading a newspaper and a book in a comfortable silence. The married couple were just doing what they always did, and they loved the moments that they got of peace and quiet where nopony-

Knock, knock, knock.

“Hm?” Confused, the parents looked at each other. Nopony was supposed to be coming round today, and especially not at 10 at night. But Posey got up anyway, and trotted over to the door calmly, opening it as welcomingly as she could. “Hello, how can I-“

The mother expected a stranger, or some random pony trying to sell something. What she didn’t expect was to see an old friend of her daughters stood panting exhaustedly at her door.

“Wh-What? Rainbow Dash? Why are- A-Are you okay?” In any other situation she’d invite the fellow pegasus inside, but her mind right now was focusing on the very intriguing sight before her.

Leaning with a hoof on the Shy home’s doorframe, Dash was dressed in her Wonderbolts uniform, it clinging to her body more than usual. What Posey noticed first was that she was clearly drenched in sweat, her fur, mane and attire showing that very clearly, and beyond that, there was plenty more to inquire on. Despite her matted hair, she was panting, needing to lean against something as if she was about to drop from exhaustion. And then there was the unknown reason as to why she was here: was she flying away from some dangerous pony and needed shelter to hide?

Posey Shy didn’t let these questions go unanswered for long. “Rainbow, dear, what’s happening? You’re drenched, and you look exhausted!” Placing a tender hoof on her shoulder, the elder mare tried coercing her inside, but Rainbow didn’t want to move her body just yet.

The multicoloured mare took a little time to catch her breath, but after that she stood up straight and finally looked the other pony in the eye, her breathing steady now. “Hey Mrs Shy. Listen, I know this is a lot to ask but… You mind if I crash here for the night?”

Shy’s mother-senses tingled, and without thinking about it for even a second she answered. “Oh, of course! We don’t mind. What’s going on though?” She wanted her answers.

“Well, training today… It was- It was agony on my body. My wings are killing me and my place is still another 50 miles away.” It was all the truth. It turns out, at the Wonderbolts HQ, you don’t lose bets, or else you become as tired and sweaty as Rainbow is here.

“Come on in, Rainbow. You can have ‘Fluttershy’s old room.” Posey stepped to the side, allowing her surprise visitor to enter.

And having regained a good portion of her energy, Rainbow made her way in, trying to ignore the aching in her wings and the clinginess of her suit. “Thanks so much, Posey. I really, really appreciate it.”

Happily, the mare pet out a chuckle with no ill intent in it. “I can tell, Rainbow.” They marched through the living room, and after explaining the situation to Gentle, the two mares strode to where Fluttershy’s teenage room had been, making small-talk now that Rainbow was feeling much better. “So, how’s life as an esteemed Wonderbolt?”

“It’s pretty good, well, it has it’s ups and downs. At least I’m never gonna go out of shape with the workouts they give us though!”

They strode into the bedroom where the blue pegasus would be staying, and even after giving her a place to lay her head, Posey couldn’t help but want to make her guest more comfortable. “Is there anything else I can do for you then, Dash? A mug of hot cocoa or something?”

“Oh no.” Rainbow raised a hoof, trying to put on her best appreciative face. “I’m good, thanks. After the day I’ve had I just want to collapse onto the bed and sleep. No distractions.” She could shower in the morning, now was the time for rest.

But this comment made the mother pause. “Well… There is something that could be a bit of a, umm, a ‘distraction’.”

“Hm?” What does she mean by that?

“Well, well, well, if it isn’t the one. The only. Lovely Rainbow Dash.” In walked Zephyr, Zephyr Breeze. With his typical swagger, the annoying sibling of Rainbow’s closest friend butted into the conversation after making himself known, eying her up and down before making another unwanted comment. “Why’re you here then, good-looking? Come to try and seduce me again?”

Oh shit, that’s what she meant by that. Facehoofing, Rainbow physically cringed at his presence. Why? Why today? Why me?

Sensing the instant shift in atmosphere from warm to… this, Posey strolled out to leave them two alone. “Well then, I’ll leave you two be. Have a good night, Rainbow!”

“Thanks, Mrs Shy.” Lifting her face up, she put a deadpan look on her muzzle as she eventually had to acknowledge Zephyr’s presence, and of course he wore his usual goofy smile. By far the most irritating thing about Zeph’ was how annoyingly attractive she found him, and if he was any other pony she’d absolutely consider accepting one of his many date invites, but this was him, and unfortunately for Zephyr, his mere existence bugged the shit out of her, something she never tried to hide. “So, better yet why are you here? You lose the hairdressing job too?”

With the classic cockiness he held about him, Zephyr laughed, clearly the same pony she’d known for so long. “Oh come on, hot stuff, you really have that little faith in me?” He winked at her, and she hated it.

She hated how his advances did attract her, and she hated even more that she’d considered giving him a chance a couple times. Rainbow had no clue what it was, his cocky personality, his clear interest in her, or his well above-average genitalia that she’d caught herself ogling a couple times, but whatever it was, she’d make sure he never knew about any of it. “Yes, Zeph’. I do truly have that little faith in you.”

“Well now you’re just being mean.” He feigned being emotionally hurt, the act finishing as quickly as it started. “I’m actually here to visit my parents, just so you know.”

“Sure. Suuuuuuure.” She did hate Zeph, but their banter could be fun when he wasn’t driving her up the wall. So as long as he didn’t do that-

“Anyway, are you wearing that skimpy get-up for me or what? Not that I’m complaining.”

Rainbow Dash could feel a vein on her forehead throb at the words. “Actually, this ‘get-up’ is my Wonderbolts uniform, only given to some of the most elite flyers in Equestria.” Pridefully, she splayed her wings as a hoof placed itself on her chest.

“Woah! So you all wear those tight things?” A smirk was appearing on his face, something that guaranteed she wouldn’t like what he’d have to say. “…I’ve gotta get myself a ticket to the next show.”

It took all Rainbow’s willpower not to roll her eyes, already she was tired of the stallion’s antics. This conversation’s gone on long enough anyway... Her body was calling to the bed behind her, and nothing, especially not Zephyr Breeze, would be keeping her from her well-deserved nap. “Anyways Zeph’, it’s time for me to sleep. I’ve had a tiring day so if you wouldn’t mind pissing off so I could collapse into bed, that’d be nice.”

“Fine, I’ll go then. But good luck keeping me out of your dreams!” Moving to the door, Zephyr ‘left’, stepping through it but not yet heading to his room. Because he wanted to see something first.

With the door ajar and Rainbow oblivious to the pony peeking through it, she turned, moving around the bed. Facing away from the door, the mare unknowingly and unintentionally was giving the sly stallion exactly what he wanted: a clear view of her ass. Her tail swished to the side one time while he watched her, and when that happened, Zephyr got only seconds to ogle what was underneath it, but still that was more than enough for him to enjoy the view.

Because beneath the thin fabric that hid nothing and stuck between her two large, shapely cheeks, was Rainbow’s asshole; a big, blue and bountiful ponut that enamoured him every time he caught even a glimpse of it.

Subconsciously, Zephyr licked his lips at the sight of it, and between his legs he could feel something in him stir up. But then her tail returned to it’s natural place and his fun ended. Sweet Celestia! What I’d do to get a night with Dash’s sweaty ass… The horny stallion wanted more than anything to stay and maybe even catch a striptease from her as she peeled off her snug clothing, but he wouldn’t. He was already pushing his luck just being here uncaught, and with his horsecock remaining halfway out of his sheath, he thought it’d be best if he went back to his room instead of risking being caught by Rainbow, or even worse his parents!

So as Zeph’ unhappily meandered back to his room semi-erect, he never saw her move the clothes all the way over her bubbly yet athletic butt, nor did he see as her shining, sweaty anus was presented to the world, him having missed his chance. Ahh! Finally!

But Rainbow never noticed he’d been there. She didn’t even realise the door was still slightly open. All she could be bothered to think about now was falling onto her bed and drifting off into some random dream. So she did just that.

After turning the lights off, blissfully, Rainbow Dash got under the bed covers, and sunk her head into the pillows. Lying on her side, it took only seconds for her to succumb to her body’s demands, and so her eyes shut and she fell into a deep slumber.

Meanwhile, a few rooms away, Zephyr Breeze was staring up at the ceiling. Lost in thought, he was still horny despite his dick having returned to it’s sheath, so obviously his mind was on his favourite mare.

Shit… I mean, how the fuck is her ass so perfect? She has those round cheeks, those perky tits underneath, her ponut… It was obvious he had an obsession with that one hole of hers, but he couldn’t tell just what about it turned him on.

Regardless of what about Dash’s anus aroused him so much, Zephyr wanted to know what it was like up-close. What did it smell like? What did it taste like? What did it feel like? Or better yet, what kind of lewd sensations would he experience if he ever got to stuff his eager face or his fat dick into her crack?

All he did know was that nothing could get him hornier than Rainbow Dash’s asshole, and the idea that it was so close to him, sweaty and there for the taking, was easily enough to make his cock shoot up, hard and demanding satisfaction.

Looking at his throbbing dick, he sighed, returning to his brooding. Unlike other times where he might’ve been eager to rub one out, Zephyr Breeze wasn’t in the mood to masturbate. He didn’t want to get off, all alone, to thoughts of the mare he wanted to fuck. He wanted to actually be there, revelling in the glory of Dash’s ass that he could do whatever he wanted with.

Well… I mean… I don’t HAVE to take care of this thing alone tonight… His mast twitched again, already liking where this idea was going. Rainbow IS only down the hall… Slowly, a plan formed in his lewd head. She was DEFINITELY super sweaty a sec’ ago… Whether he should do this or not never occurred to him, only if he could and if he wanted to, which he did. And with how tired she looked, I highly doubt she’ll wake up, no matter what things in the night might… disturb her.

The plan was perfect, and already Zephyr was rising from his bed with his erotic intentions in mind. He didn’t need anymore convincing. He wasn’t thinking with his head, he was thinking with his dick, the same one that was the hardest it’d ever been.

Super horny and with all his hung meat hanging between his legs, Zephyr Breeze slid off the bed, trotting silently to his door and making his way through it. Thank Celestia Mom and Dad are always asleep by now!

Causing as little noise as possible and dodging all the creaky floorboards (even with his big, dangling horsecock making that difficult) Zeph’ finally made it to Dash’s bedroom, and peeked inside. She was there, sleeping, snoring quietly, and in the perfect position for him to strike.

Nice! Slipping in, he made sure to shut the door behind him noiselessly, and then he swooped on his prey.

At the bed, he didn’t need to hype himself up, nor did he need to convince himself to do this. He typically wouldn’t do anything bad, having a pretty good moral compass, however this was Rainbow Dash’s plot, and nothing could stop him from yearning, from hungering over his sister’s best friend’s butt. Plus, he’d been wanting to enjoy this for a while, so now that the kinky opportunity was presented to him, he wouldn’t be letting it slip away.

Gingerly and delicately, his wing began lifting the covers, slowly, almost tauntingly building up the big reveal. And then eventually, what his body needed was shown. Unclothed, Rainbow’s big, bare ass was there, her tail not blocking the view and giving him -for the first time in his life- a close-up of what her fantastic rear looked like.

But before he got to truly admire the view though, what hit him first was the stench that had been trapped under the covers. Wafting from where it had been trapped, the aroma travelled up into his nostrils, and already Zephyr was intoxicated by it, needing more. It smelt like Rainbow, but more than just her. It was more primal and lewd, and easily made his dick throb again wantingly.

Long story short, Zephyr Breeze wanted more of what the Rainbow ass had to offer, and he was going to get it.

Throwing all thoughts of shame away, the stallion placed the blanket just past her buttocks and lowered his body to the bed. Like this, Dash’s genitalia were right before his face, and here he could truly appreciate them. There was her outer folds hiding her pink cavern, the ones that led to her womb which he eventually wanted to claim as well. But what he was here for wasn’t her pussy, it was the round, raunchy hole right next to it.

Moving his muzzle closer, it was everything he’d dreamed about, but there was one thing he needed to try first, something he couldn’t resist doing.

Zephyr’s face dove in, and he shoved his nose straight into Rainbow’s stinking shithole.

SNIIIIIIIIFFFFFFF!

All at once, it was as if his body recoiled at such a potent stench entering his nostrils. He’d gotten a slight whiff of it a second ago, but this… this was Rainbow’s purest, most concentrated musk, and he couldn’t get enough of it as his dick was achingly begging for stimulation, unattended to and ignored.

Holy fuck! It was like what he might smell when being in Dash’s home, but it wasn’t. The stench was dirtier, lewder, and reeked of sweaty, unwashed pony ass.

Keeping his nose pressed up against the ponut, Zephyr Breeze never wanted to have to smell anything else as his body embraced the degeneracy, but of course, he didn’t come here just to flood his head with her unique stink. He’d wanted to do whatever he could with her asshole, and he planned to make the most out of tonight, so Zeph’ was going to try one last thing before he satiated his crying-out cock’s needs.

He stayed where he was, refusing to pull back until he had to. And then, out of nowhere, Zephyr’s eager tongue shot out of his mouth, digging into the helpless, blue donut like his life depended on it.

Instantly, his taste buds would’ve orgasmed if they could. The forbidden flavour of sweat exploded on his tongue, and he visibly revelled in such a long-awaited sensation finally being his.

What he got was salty, it obviously not having the purpose of tasting nice, but that didn’t mean he didn’t enjoy it! Hungering for more, he went for more, and so his tongue went in again, and again, and again.

In just a matter of a few indulgent seconds, Zephyr went from tasting to french-kissing. His lips were smushed firmly on the puffy hole, and he could feel her jiggly asscheeks squish around parts of his muzzle, but that just fuelled him more to want to trace every contour of her ponut with his tongue, lapping up every bit of it’s dirty, lewd taste he could get.

In the end though, when every drop of ass-sweat was gorged by him, Zephyr still didn’t finish, liking his time down here and taking the time to savour it… But one thing caught him off guard, the pony he was pleasuring moving a little as a moan was let out above him. “Ah…”

Holy shit. She moaned! It was easily the hottest thing he’d ever heard. But if she’d moaned, that must’ve meant- She’s enjoying getting her ass toyed with!

Zephyr was loving this more than anything. This was probably the best experience of his life: he was getting to have as much of Rainbow’s butt as he wanted, and she was even drowsily sleep-moaning as he has his way with her hole. But those things, they were both having an effect over him, in the form of the big, bulging, begging horsecock between his thighs screaming at him, and making it impossible to ignore his urges any longer.

Ngh! H-Holy fuck! He’d never needed stimulation more than he did now, not even in the past times Rainbow had accidentally aroused him. But if his dick was demanding such satisfaction, then who was he to not give it what it wanted?

The longing pegasus knelt on the bed, and only here did he how desperate his schlong looked. Above his hefty cum-tanks and having come from his large green sheath earlier tonight, Zeph’s equine dick was entirely pink, all the way from his girthy shaft to his flared tip that was currently leaking his pre. Running up it, a few blood-pumping veins travelled the entirety of his rod, but each and every one of them were bulging, throbbing and making the whole meaty cock throb with them.

So his cock was needy, desperate, unstoppably horny, and begging to be stuffed into the hole before him as it sent waves of hypnotising arousal throughout him. There was only one way this was going to go.

Shuffling forward, Zeph’ lined himself up, almost in awe that this was finally happening and that he’d finally get to wreck Dash’s asshole. And then, after positioning his front legs on each side of her body, essentially mounting the sleeping mare, he pushed into the fat hole.

The saliva on her and the pre-cum on his head barely lubed-up his entry, but with plenty of pushing, her round ponut was stretched open enough to let his wide head be shoved into her tight depths crushing down on him. That wasn’t all her body did though.

“Ahn…” Involuntarily, Rainbow let out another cute and undeniably arousing noise. It was music to Zeph’s ears, and he knew he could get more out of her if he tried.

Pushing deeper in and easing more inches of his pole up her ass, the stallion felt it start to feel better for the both of them. Her butthole’s vice-like grip was squeezing down on his meat, so the more he pushed into her, the more of his lengthy horsecock was pleasured by her insides, and the more of her sensitive inner walls his meat was rubbing against.

“Ngh… F-Fuck…” It wasn’t too difficult to get deeper, so with that, and her feeling phenomenal around him, Zephyr didn’t know what his favourite part of the experience was: the feeling of her ponut rubbing on his skin as he enters her, the lewd moans occasionally coming from her delirious slumber, or that he was getting to finally satiate a want that’d been building up for a long time. No matter what it was, he wouldn’t be leaving the mare’s body until he was done and was brought to his climax by her hugging walls.

“Hngh! H-Holy fuck, Dash! You feel…” She felt indescribable was what it was like, with him unable to resist moaning and grunting as quietly as he could while he used her resting body.

But right when his heavy balls squashed against her asscheek, and Zeph’s whole cock was hilted in Rainbow as his hips met her rump, the strangest thing happened, something Zephyr Breeze would’ve never expected in a million moons. “Ngah… Z-Zeph’…”

Ha! The quiet moan caught him well off guard, and the stallion bucking her couldn’t help but internalise a laugh. Of course she’s dreaming that I’m the one stuffing her ass full! He was sure that she at least knew some other stallions, but no, Dash sleep-moaned his name from whatever wet dream she was definitely having.

As anypony would’ve expected, he was determined at this point to continue. He didn’t think his body and dick would let him not! So with the extra drive, Zephyr reared his hips back and let the thick, blue ring cling to his cock as he pulled back. Her ponut moved with his dick, it especially holding onto his medial ring but letting most of the horsecock be unsheathed from her. “Angh… Yeah…”

And then, Zephyr went back in. Biting down on his lip and moaning, he thrust his leaking dick all the way back into her, and felt the waves of euphoria tingle up his spine, burying his fat, girthy cock all the way in her again. With how much thick pre his tip was dribbling out, second insertion was much easier, and it would only be getting better from here!

Readying himself and preparing for the pleasure the tight ass would inevitably give him, the lust-driven male pulled out, and thrust in, and pulled out, and thrust in. Soon, Zephyr was thanking every deity he could as he gluttonously humped Rainbow Dash’s defenceless yet undoubtedly fuckable butt. With every dive in, her second cavern had to expand again, pleasuring the lusting pony currently mating Rainbow as her walls clenched down on him and squeezed his cock perfectly, forcing moans from the stallion. Meanwhile, with every slide out, his flared head caused constant friction with Dash’s insides, hitting every spot her ass had and forcing out moans from her too.

From afar, the sex may have even seemed consensual too, with both clearly gaining pleasure from it. But instead it was just Zephyr fucking Dash while she slept, all so he could use her blue butt to end his blue balls.

In, out, in, out. With the self-produced lube his length was spewing out repeatedly, Zeph’ was picking up the pace, even making her cheeks faintly clap every time his enthusiastic hips hit them. And she never woke during any of it. Her body felt it, and her body reacted to the pleasure, but still she remained resting, unaware of her own body’s actions. “Uhn… Yeah… Zeph’… More…” Her words were nary, and they were very slurred, but the sole pony hearing them would soon realise that they weren’t the only way Dash’s body was reacting to his ‘advances’.

Hm? The fuck’s that? Not even thinking about slowing his frantic attack on her insides, Zephyr smelt something in the air, something that was only now strong enough to reach his nose. It smelt like Rainbow’s plot had, only it was sweeter, but still helped encourage him to rampantly keep pounding her hole.

What it was was Rainbow Dash’s snatch. Because of Zeph’, it was now leaking, trickling down onto the bed from her winking pussy and filling the room with their mixed aromas of lust. In other words, the smell of sex surrounded them, and it was hot… At least to Zephyr, anyway.

But with time passing, and so many different arousing stimuli assaulting the pounding pegasus’ head and him never ceasing to plow Dash’s behind, he felt it building up inside of him: his orgasm, rising up climactically.

It’s a good thing he wasn’t slamming in and out of her pussy right now, because Zephyr definitely wasn’t pulling out. Not only did he need to hide the evidence of his devious deeds, but Zephyr Breeze absolutely needed to fill up Rainbow Dash’s butthole with his hot horse cum. He couldn’t not. So still thrusting to and fro at full speed, the stallion didn’t slow until the most powerful orgasm of his life threatened to burst from him, and then, on his last slam into her sleeping butt, he shoved every last bit of his horsecock he could into her, and let his body do the rest as it showered him with satisfaction.

“Hnghhhhhhh!” Grunting, Zephyr felt his hanging testicles clench. From his full balls, all the way to his tip, semen travelled through him before his splooge splurted harshly out of his tip. Rope after rope of his cum was blasted out, and was dumped deep into Rainbow’s guts, Zephyr even sticking his tongue out as the most intense climax of his life was all pumped up the ass of his deepest desire.

Bucking a few more times after emptying his balls, making sure to relieve himself of every last drop of his spunk, Zephyr exhaled dramatically, the surges of elation dwindling now that his orgasm came to an end.

…H-Holy fuck, Rainbow… Fucking her ass after smelling and tasting it had easily been the best experience of his life. But now it was over, and he needed to get back to his room.

Catching his breath and panting, Zephyr let himself regain a little energy while his cock softened inside of her. But after more than enough time basking in the aftermath of it all, he began pulling his dick out.

Slowly, the meat was relinquished from her insides, sliding out slowly before it popped out of her ponut and flopped down onto the bed. A few strings of cum stuck to his tip and connected him to her gaping yet closing hole, but besides that, all of his goo was still stuck in her belly, and all the evidence of his naughtiness was hidden from sight (besides the slight bulge in his cumdump’s belly).

And it was here, that Zeph’ took his leave. He’d done ~~what~~ who he’d wanted to, so after admiring how her clit kept winking at him, the satiated stallion strode on back to his room; satisfied.

His dick slunk back into his sheath, and as it did, Rainbow’s sphincter sealed up.

Entering his room, it was as if he’d never engaged in his carnal activities. And then, Zephyr retreated back to his bed, tucking himself in. This was officially the most pleasurable night of his life, so when his eyes closed and sleep overcame him, he hoped Rainbow Dash would be coming to spend the night again sometime soon, only next time he hoped that he could properly seduce her before, and claim her other hole in a much more consensual fashion.

After not long, Zephyr fell asleep, happily dreaming of plowing a certain mare’s holes and filling them to the brim with his seed.

Next morning, the sun rose. It’s light shone on many mares and stallions, but it also woke up a blue pegasus, one who was feeling rejuvenated after the sleep she’d just gotten. Her limbs were no longer aching, but she found that something still felt… off.

More specifically, something felt weird, in her pussy, her ass and her belly.

The fuck? As she rose, Rainbow found her butt was aching a little, her feeling a little pain in it. And then her belly, for some reason, felt as if she’d just eaten a huge meal.

Looking between her thighs, she still didn’t understand why her ass and stomach were feeling the way they were, but she found why her pussy was bothering her: it was achingly wet, so wet that it had created a tiny pool of her mare-cum on the bed.

Dash couldn’t explain two of three of the feelings, but she was at least able to figure out one thing: she’d had a wet dream. And a really fucking good one by the looks of it. She hadn’t been this wet since the last night that she’d spent in the same house as Zeph’, when she’d snuck into his room and sucked his huge cock while he slept, masturbating and cumming as he came into her mouth.

Just at the thought, her marehood sent a few jolts of need through her body, it demanding her satisfaction now as it kept leaking downwards. Well… I suppose rubbing one out wouldn’t hurt.

She had no clue that Zephyr did what he did with her last night, and she’d end up never finding out, but she lost interest in why her body felt this way as she lied back and placed her hoof between her legs, rubbing madly as she thought about the desirable dick of a stallion that bugged the shit out of her.

Author's Note

In case people are wondering why I changed this from Anthology Of Ass to this story, then check out one of my blogs, that explains it.

And also, I remember in the show that Rainbow Dash is like a heavy snorer, but c’mon, I’m not adding that.

(One final thing, could those who see this tell me what they thought about this chapter and how I can improve? I wasn’t so sure about this chapter when writing it, thinking I went a tad too far with some parts of the sweat kink and maybe thinking the sex scene’s a bit boring, so I’d love to know how I could do better in the future if you’d share your criticisms!)