When Mary Thorps went PortCon dress as a female Jared Hoppworth from The Magnus Archives. she was expecting to have a fun time maybe buy a few souvenirs or well-made props but when she finds a professionally made version of The BoneTurner’s Tale, but she was not expecting was to be sent to another world entirely.
Now she has to do with the fact that she is aware of every part of herself at all times and Has to consciously make an effort not to lose bits of her self all over the place

I would like to encourage you to write comments on how you think I could improve this.
Or just on what you like about this.