Ocellus's "Peer Review"

by MasaStormyPonez

Rating: mature
Tags: Profanity, Random, Gallus, Young Six, My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Comedy, Porn, Ocellus, Sex, Fetish
Length: 4114

Gallus learns the hard way how much of closet perverts his friends can be when given a chance. However, he doesn't mind...

During the spring break Student 6 is visiting the Castle of Two Sisters in search for finding something interesting to show in the class when the break is over. However, Gallus learns the hard way why the spring break is considered a vacation for horny teenagers.

Sexual shenanigans ensue...

CV: M/F, urination (not watersports!), peeing in front of friends, public exposure, voyeurism, public sex, vaginal, anal fingering, Student 6 acting like sex-grazed morons

This story is partially written by TheVClaw who let me use some of the green texts he had written on his Discord server.

Proofreader: SWikey

All characters are 18+ in this story!

Cover art by hioshiru (id:1821954)

Published 2024-04-21 22:10:00 UTC
Last updated 2024-04-21 22:10:00 UTC

You know, for science!

"We made it guys!" Silverstream said exited when she and all her friends had arrived at the bridge leading to the ruins of the Castle of Two Sisters. They all were staying at the School of Friendship during the Spring Break, and had decided to go for an expedition in the castle ruins.

"I hope those hedgehogs wouldn't ruin everything this time!" Gallus looked around to make sure they weren't followed.

"Ahem, those creatures were 'pukwudgies', not hedgehogs!" Ocellus corrected, making Gallus shrug.

"Like I care!"

"I heard Professor Fluttershy has already taken care of that problem," Sandbar explained, "We should be fine!"

"Oh, did she kill 'em all?" Smolder chuckled, "Now that's awesome!"

"What? No, not like that!" Sandbar shook his head, "She persuaded them to move somewhere else so they wouldn't need to attack anyone crossing their territory!"

"Works for me!" Gallus replied and started leading the way towards the castle, "Those little rats were super annoying!"

"Yona scare those rats away!" Yona remarked as they followed Gallus, "Yaks best at scaring!"

"Can't argue with that!" Smolder smiled and looked at Ocellus, who snorted at the joke.

"And look at this, everyone! Silverstream gasped as they arrived at the door, "Have you ever seen such beautiful-?"

"Yeah yeah, we got it! Stairs!" Smolder rolled her eyes, "You've already said that!"

"I did?" Silverstream scratched her head for a moment, "Well, second time's a charm then! These stairs are just so pretty!"

"But they're just stairs!" Smolder raised her eyebrow, "Do you seriously lose your shit every time you see stairways somewhere?"

"Nah, I'm not like that!" Silverstream shrugged, "I just really like architecture, that's all!"

But as she and Gallus had pushed open the large front doors leading to the castle's hall, the students noticed much bigger a stairway leading up to the upper floors at the back of the hallway. That sight was too much for Silverstream to behold!

"Oh! My! GOSH!" She almost screamed in excitement, making Smolder shake her head.

"For crying out loud!" She said annoyed, "That's even worse!"

"Hey! Let her have her fun!" Sandbar reassured with a hoof on her shoulder, "We came here to learn new things anyway!"

"Yup! Remember our mission, guys!" Gallus commanded, "We look around and take something cool for the show and tell we're having when this vacation's over!"

"You think you're the leader here, buddy?" Smolder disputed, "We know what to do! AND we can manage on our own here!"

"Well, Professor Twilight asked me personally to take care of y'all while we stay in the school," Gallus replied, "You think, like, Silverstream could do that instead?"

"I heard that!" Silverstream shouted back from the other side of the room where she was admiring the stairs.

"Well, whatever you say!" Smolder said sarcastically and shrugged, "Let's see if we can find something "cool" for that show and tell!"

"Right! Keep that attitude!" Gallus said and turned to leave, "I gotta take a leak first. BRB!"

"You got it, boss!" Sandbar replied and waved at Gallus as he fled the scene.

Walking down the aisle, Gallus tried not to trip on stones and branches on the floor.
"'Good architecture', my butt! This place is a mess!" He cursed as he stubbed his paw on the edge of the floor paneling.

He was looking for good spot for urinating, not wanting to make his friends feel uncomfortable by being too close doing it. Griffons usually didn't think about others and did their business in the open, but Gallus had standards. He preferred finding a room with actual walls providing him some cover instead of being on the display!

After a while he found a good enough spot; he had entered a room with a single tall tree growing through the ceiling and wall, with a silhouette of Evergreen Forest looming from the large hole as if it was a landscape window.

"Now that's a nice view!" Gallus chuckled to himself. He rose on his rear legs and grabbed his sheath to aim himself at the tree's roots, and with a swift motion he pulled back his sheath to expose his pink griffon penis before letting out a surge of golden urine that started trickling satisfyingly against the wood's surface.

As his stream grew in volume, he let out a sigh of relief and closed his eyes to enjoy the moment. He had been holding it in for a couple of hours after all and now his wait was over! He waved his dick to make his stream splatter all across the roots he was watering.

But as Gallus continued to go, he felt someone's presence very close to him. Through the rustling of his urine he could hear quiet footsteps, as if someone was sneaking right behind him. It was like he was being watched just a couple of feet away. And not only that, he soon felt someone's warm breath against his cock!

Gallus opened his eyes to immediately notice he wasn't alone; from the corner of his eye, he noticed Silverstream staring at his junk as he went, and on the other side of him he saw Ocellus doing the same. Turning his head around he notices all his friends having followed him and gathered around him, with their eyes locked on his peeing lenght. It was as if he was on display at the zoo!

"H-hey!" Gallus shouted in panic. He cut off his stream and covered his junk behind his talons, "A little privacy here!"

"Awww, did we scare you?" Silverstream asked and gasped in awe as her gaze traveled down towards Gallus's member, "Why didn't you tell us your thing was so... Big?! It's MASSIVE!"

"Yeah! Pissing all by yourself, handsome?" Smolder added, making Sandbar facehoof behind her.

"Oh? Umm... W-well..." Gallus blushed for a moment, not sure how to react as a girl he knew was complimenting his genitals. Feeling his privacy being violated, he cleared his throat and looked at his friends with an unamused look.
"Do I really need you all to watch me for this!? I can pee by myself just fine, you know!"

"It's for science, Gallus!" Ocellus replied, "We were just curious to see what your penis looked like. That all!"

"Yeah, Ocellus calls it 'Peer Review' for her study." Smolder smirked, making Gallus's eyes go wide.

"Peer review?" Gallus didn't believe his ears, "Like... Are you ranking us or something?"

"Well, not exactly..." Ocellus said and gleed, "It's more of an analysis of how different creatures perform their various... Ahem! 'Needs', if you know what I mean..."

"It has a part where she analyzes how we pee." Smolder revealed, "And your turn just got up!"

"M-my turn?" Gallus was confused, "Did she even ask our permission for any of this?!"

"Well, duh!" Smolder shrugged, "I've already done my part. Didn't she ask you about that a couple of days ago?"

"Well..." Gallus suddenly remembered how Ocellus had appeared before him one day and asked if he could help with an assignment that involved giving her his urine sample. Thinking Ocellus was just joking, he played along and agreed, the idea was just too hilarious to ignore.

"I... I didn't know you were ACTUALLY gonna do that!" Gallus started sweating, realizing he had yet again agreed on taking part in Ocellus's embarrassing experiments! He just never learned...

"Yona already saw Sandbar piss!" Yona said boldly, making Gallus give her a disturbed look, "Ponies have huge penises and pee a lot! Yona doubt gryphon penis too special~"

"H-HEY!!!" Sandbar called out in embarrassment, "You don't have to tell that, Yona!"

"Yeah sure. I kinda knew you two were bathroom buddies..." Gallus shook his head for a moment.

"Wait a minute!" Gallus suddenly realized something, turning his head towards giggling girls in an utter confusion.
"If Sandbar already did it, then WHY is he here too?!"

"Well, uhhh... Ocellus asked me to stay and watch you." Sandbar scratched his neck, "Not that I liked watching guys pee or anything-"

"WHAT?! W-Why?!?" Gallus was shocked.

"Well, I'll explain my hypothesis after you urinate on camera." Ocellus chirped happily, taking out a camcorder she had brought with her, "Don't worry, it's only for science!"

"CAMERA?!?" Gallus's heart skipped a beat. He already felt very exposed standing there in front of his friends covering himself, feeling a stinging in his bladder as he didn't have the chance emptying it.

Smolder hummed to herself quizzically while scanning through Ocellus' notes she had taken from her bag, "Let's see... Female Yak Urination, Male Yak Urination, Diamond Dog Joint-Knot Urination, what the... Fetish-Based Exhibition Urina--"

"HEY!!" Ocellus used her magic to snatch the notebook from Smolder's claws, floating it back towards her. "That's not fair! You don't see me reading through your private notes..."

"Wait a minute!" Silverstream gasped and pointed a talon straight towards the black notebook in Ocellus' forelegs. "That's not your science notebook! That's your diary! I saw you hiding it under your mattress!"

The rest of Ocellus' friends turned to face them with varying looks of confusion and curiosity. None of them looked too upset, not even humiliated Gallus, but that fact wasn't relieving enough to keep the changeling from blushing obscenely hard.

"...Uuuhhhhh... Well, that was... For... The privacy reasons!" She explained, "Although... I admit maybe we should have made a non-disclosure agreement first!"

Gallus sighed and rolled his eyes. "You changelings are SO weird sometimes!" He grunted and shifted his position a little, "Fine! I REALLY have to pee now, so if you pervs wanna take a look, then help yourselves! There won't be a next time!"

"Oooh, nice!" Silverstream moved closer to Gallus, "I've never seen a boy pee before. I mean apart from my brother and dad, but it's not the same thing!"

"Well, now you do. Because I can't hold it any longer!" Gallus huffed, and as he shuffled his claws away, a spray of urine immediately shot out of his tip. He groaned as he felt the relief wash all over him once again, he didn't even care about his friends staring at him at his most vulnerable, doing one of the most private things he could ever be doing. By the sound of it, if felt as if they were quite impressed of his "performance".

After a moment that felt like an eternity, Gallus felt his stream slowing down to a trickle. He flexed the last jets of his pee before he started shaking his member dry.

"Whoo! Shake your money maker, Gallus!" Sandbar catcalled as Gallus tried to ignore him.

"You know it, baby! Shake it for mama!" Smolder added huskily, "Are you playing with yourself or what?"

"Nah, just giving you pervs a good show!" Gallus replied with a sarcastic tone, shaking off the last couple of drops before he lowered himself and turned around to face his friends who greeted him with clapping and hollering. He hated to admit it, but he kind of enjoyed being watched like that, in some mischievous way. Maybe he could try that again sometimes!

"Oh, so you boys shake it dry?" Silverstream asked curiously, "Do you even get it dry with that? Don't you ever wipe it?"

"It's not a nose, you can't blow it!" Sandbar replied, answering Silverstream's question for Gallus.

"I could blow that thing, you know!" Smolder added and smirked.

"Umm, you shouldn't actually blow on it, Smolder." Smolder blushed, "It's preferable to try sucking it instead. Also you're a dragon-"

"Oh, come on!" Smolder rolled her eyes, "You know what I meant!"

"Do I?"

"Sandbar shake too!" Yona said in excitement, "Sandbar's penis bigger than gryphon penis!"

"Well, ehhh..." Sandbar blushed, "I wouldn't mention it, though..."

"Woah... Now that's something I didn't want to know!" Gallus said in disgust, a mental image of Sandbar's horsecock filling his mind. His once hidden gryphonhood started slipping out of his sheath, taking his friends by surprise. Having already showed them his cock, he didn't try to hide it anymore.

"My GOSH!" Silverstream gawked, "It really IS big!"

"Not bad, Gallus!" Smolder said while pinching with her fingers, "We thought you had a teeny-weeny. Like cats do! You've even got a knot in that thing!"

"Well, we're technically not cats, you know!" Gallus replied, "We're gryphons. Totally a different thing!"

Gallus shook his leg to get the last annoying drop off his tip, when Silverstream suddenly lunged at him with huge glee on her face, "Can I help you with that? Or you prefer me to lick it off? I can do that too!"

"H-hey, you can watch but not touch!" Gallus grunted and shooed disappointed Silverstream away, "I'm not in the mood right now!

"Aaaww! I wanted to taste it!" She pouted, wondering why such a hunky male griffon wasn't in for sexual activity. She had thought Gallus was as horny as she was at that moment, always ready to lay his mate by any given chance!

"Bet it tastes like chicken?" Smolder chuckled, "Or like a sausage?"

"Eww, did you forget we don't eat meat!" Ocellus groaned, making Smolder grin and flash her teeth as a joke.

"Ok, now I'm NOT gonna let you anyhere near my dick!" Gallus said nervously, "I'd prefer to keep it, you know!"

"Chicken!" Smolder smirked and turned her gaze back to Ocellus,
"So anyway, did you get any footage?"

"Oh... Right!" Ocellus looked at her camera and blushed, "Well... I... I think I forgot to turn it on..."

"Hah, too late for now!" Gallus snorted and walked past Ocellus, "Better luck next time, cause I'm already drained!"

"I'm not! I gotta pee too!" Silverstream said and stormed by the same tree Gallus had marked a couple of minutes before, "Oh, I think I'm gonna burst for real!"

And before anycreature could have said anything, Silverstream had lowered her rump to squat on the floor, a flow of bright yellow liquid shooting out of her marehood she was presenting at her friends as if was the most natural thing in the world!

Ocellus's jaw dropped in shock as she looked at her friend. This time however, she made sure to turn on the camera as she pointed it towards the action.

"Woah! Right in front of us!" Sandbar gasped, "Now that's something you don't see every day!"

"That nothing! Yaks pee more than hippogriffs!" Yona said confidentally, "Yaks bigger than hippogriffs anyway!"

Gallus looked at his would-be marefriend with eyes wide as saucers, a blush forming on his cheeks. A drop of pre was gleaming on the tip of his throbbing erection while watching such a bold act in front of him. The mare hippogriff he had a crush on sighed in relieve as the puddle under her grew larger, a loud sound of the liquid splattering against floor filling the room. He had no idea seeing a girl peeing openly would be so hot!

"Damn, girl! You piss like a horse!" Smolder cracked after Silverstream was still going after a whole minute, "Maybe we should call you 'Golden Stream' from now on!"

"Why not! I have a heart of gold anyway!" Silverstream replied as her flow finally came to a stop, the last of her urine dripping out of her wet vulva. She shook her rump for a moment, her clitoris winking a couple of times afterwards.

"That's the stuff!" She sighed happily and turned her head towards her friends. "Well... Like what you see, Gallus?"

Gallus jolted when he heard his name and gulped. He looked at Silverstream's eyes to see her looking at him with a sultry look.

"Y-yeah!" He stammered for a moment, "I-I mean... I wasn't staring-!"

He noticed Silverstream was trailing her foreleg between her thighs, and with a raspy sigh she started rubbing her pussy right before him.

"How about now?" She asked teasingly and winked, making Gallus lose his stature. His wings popped open into a wingboner by the display.

"Totally!" He replied like a zombie, not taking his eyes away from Silverstream's nethers, seeing her rubbing her squishy clit with an index finger as she kept her delicate lips spreat apart, "Now THAT'S a nice view!"

"Uuh... What is happening?" Sandbar asked in confusion, turning towards Smolder, who in turn was grinning like crazy.

"Just watch!" She whispered and turned towards Gallus, "Hey, lover boy! Bet you don't dare to kiss Silverstream!"

"Huh? What?!" Gallus shook off from the trance Silverstream's swaying hips had put him into. "What do you mean I DON'T dare?"

"Then go ahead, Gallus!" Silverstream turned around with a huge glee on her face, "I don't mind!"

"Uh... Is this some kind of joke?" Gallus started becoming angry, "Like you're really trying to ship me with Silverstream just because you think we're a cute- Mmph!!!"

Suddenly Silverstream lunged at Gallus, burying her beak against his as she gave him a long, sloppy kiss. Gallus tried to fight back at first, but he relaxed soon after and closed his eyes, deciding to enjoy the moment as long as it was going to last.

"Aaaawwww!" The rest of the group said in unison, and soon Gallus and Silverstream pulled away from themselves with a string of saliva connecting their beaks.

"Huff, hah... Silver..." Gallus panted, "What was that for?"

"Mmm... Are you in the mood now?" Silverstream purred, wrapping her arms around Gallus.

"T-totally!" Gallus replied in a sudden surge of newfound self-confidence and he returned the kiss to his crush. Soon they both were trading kisses in the open, not caring about any of their friends that were staring at them.

"Gosh, this is so steamy!" Smolder bit her lip as she watched, fanning herself with her claw as a joke.

"Hippogriffs and gryphons weird creatures!" Yona remarked and scratched her head in confusion, "Yona and Sandbar don't kiss openly!"

"Yeah, what a shame!" Smolder chuckled, "You both are a cute couple too. You should invite us to watch you sometimes!"

"Well, I don't think..." Sandbar started, but suddenly they realized something happening in front of them:

While they were kissing, Silverstream had grabbed Gallus's erect member in her hoof, and she was now stroking it as she tried rubbing herself against Gallus's thigh.

"Oh! My! Celestia!" Sandbar blurted in shock and covered both his and Yona's eyes, "This is far beyond steamy!"

"W-wait! Are you really going to-" Ocellus called out, but then she felt Smolder's hand blocking her mouth.

"Let's see where this is going!" Smolder said in excitement, feeling Ocellus mumbling "okay" against her palm.

Gallus then decided to take the control of the situation. He pushed Silverstream on the floor, knowing it was his time to move to the next level!

"Oh my!" Silverstream panted as she looked at Gallus towering above her, feeling his hot, boulbous member throbbing against her perky teats, "You really ARE massive!"

"Why, thanks!" Gallus smirked back at her, "Wanna go further?'

"Y-yes!" Silverstream replied and closed her eyes in anticipation, "Put it in, Gallus! I wanna feel your cock!"

And right after saying that Gallus moved his hips to shove his turgid cock in, making Silverstream gasp.

"Oh, gosh!" She squealed as she felt Gallus's thick phallus spreading her tight marehood apart, "So that's what sex feels like!"

"Oh, man!" Gallus huffed as he felt Silverstream's warm and wet marehood hugging his most valuable asset, "So that's what a pussy feels like!"

Silverstream's feminine organ felt like a warm jelly pulsating around his penis, and before he knew it, Gallus let his senses take over. He started pounding Silverstream's pussy in a steady pace, starting slowly at first before getting faster, and soon they both were dancing a sideways tango on the floor of the castle.

"Fascinating!" Ocellus chirped in excitement and scribbled down some notes, "Hippogriff urination makes gryphons want to mate with the female!"

She then saw movement in the corner of her eye, noticing Smolder masturbating next to her as she bit her lip even harder than before.

"W-what! Not you too, Smolder!" Ocellus gasped in surprise and blushed.

Smolder pulled her fingers out of her snatch, grinning mischievously. "Wanna see a neat trick?"

She then walked closer to the love-making duo, and without warning, she reached out her hands and shoved her wet fingers into both of their buttholes, making them let out a yelp of genuine surprise.

"Guh! What the?" Gallus gawked out as Silverstream moaned shakily at the new sensation. He turned his head towards Smolder in confusion.
"S-Smolder! You're fingering my butt!"

"I know, Captain Obvious!" Smolder smirked, "I'm just adding to your pleasure! Or d'you want me to stop?"

"Ghh, n-no!" Gallus grunted and lowered his head, "Just... B-be gentle!"

"Oh, I will!" Smolder winked and started drilling her friends' rectal cavities. Her finger had already reached Gallus's prostate which she started rubbing to milk the pleasure out of him. It made Gallus gasp and moan even louder, and he started feeling like he was going to burst.

"Ah! Oh! Uh! S-Silver! I'm there..." He blurted out, feeling his cock thickening inside Silverstream's love canal.

"Ah! Ahh! Oh yes! Do it!" Silverstream cried out, feeling like she was in the deepest ecstasy she had ever been in her life, "F-Fill me with your eggs! GIVE 'EM TO ME!!!"

"Hnng! Ghhh! HNNNNGGGGHHHH!!!" Gallus glenched his teeth when he passed the point of no return, and at the last second he managed to pull his cock out of Silverstream, unleashing the torrent of thick, potent and creamy white gryphon seed onto her teats and belly. He let out animalistic grunts as he came, grinding the base of his penis against Silverstream's clit while shooting thick strands of cum all around her pelvic area.

Even though she didn't get the feeling of fullness in her womb she was graving for, her partner's grinding along with the added pressure from Smolder rubbing her anus drove her crazy, and it didn't take long for her to reach her climax as well.

"A-Aaaaaah! Oh yes! Yes!! YE-E-E-E-E-E-E-SSSSSSS!" She let out a shaky scream and pulled Gallus closer, making him collapse onto his own puddle of cum he had created on Silver.

"Yeah baby! Let it all out!" Smolder cheered on as she felt Silverstream's butthole convulsing around her finger. She then pulled her fingers out with a pop, watching as her friend's gaping holes winked towards her direction. She smirked victoriously, knowing she had made a good job. She could only imagine how good it had felt for her friends as they layed there on panting and moaning.

"So! Good! Love!" Ocellus sighed in her own high as she was draining the love radiating around from Gallus and Silverstream, licking her lips at the taste of it.

"Dude, you really took it up your butt!" Sandbar quipped at Gallus while he was trying to catch his breath, "Didn't know you like that stuff!"

"Gallus and Silverstream really good at sex!" Yona said happily, "Yona hope you do it again!"

"I'm totally in for that!" Smolder agreed while wiping her fingers.

Ignoring his other friends, Gallus turned his head towards Ocellus and smirked.
"So, what was that hypothesis of yours?"

"Oh, right!" Ocellus replied and closed her diary with a slam, "So I think-"

"Oh! Hello darlings!" They suddenly heard a familiar voice coming from the doorway. They all turned their heads towards the door, seeing one of their teachers, Rarity, entering the room against all possible odds!
"I wouldn't have ever imagined to find you all in such-"

Rarity's eyes shot open when she saw Gallus and Silverstream lying on the floor, covered with various fluids as they were surrounded by their friends. She somehow got paler than she already was and for a moment she seemed to have difficulty to speak, as if she had forgot all of her vocabulary due to the shock.

"C-compromising positions..." She finally managed to stammer.

The young six looked at each other in embarrassment, not knowing whether to laugh or cry at the situation they were in.

Probably laugh!

"Umm..." Ocellus was first to open her mouth, "Would you believe us, Professor Rarity, if I told you that... This is our newest science project?"

"Yeah!" Gallus chuckled as he rose up off the giggling Silverstream, "It's, like, a VERY scientific one indeed!"

-The End-

Author's Note

I wasn't supposed to make this story that long, but here we are 4000 words later. :pinkiecrazy:

I've always wanted to write something more graphic featuring Gallstream, but just now I came up with a good premise I was interested in. Hope you enjoyed it as well! :pinkiesmile: