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Infiltrating the Infiltrators [Comment-driven story]

by BurgerFanMan
Equestrian agency S.M.I.L.E is running out of turncoat changelings to spy on the Changeling Lands' war machine, but unicorn Agent Cold Strike will do just fine... right?

Comments will be counted at midnight every Wednesday, UTC-0. On hiatus while I work on another project! Thank you for your patience.

This is a comment-driven story! Each chapter features multiple choices at the end that commentators can vote on. The story can also be read like any other fic.

This fic is set in the universe of Equestria At War.

Death, profanity, violence, and sex tags are because I have no idea where this story might end up- they are not the main feature of the fic.


The Great War staggers on, but things are looking up for the United Ponies' Alliance. Vanhoover has just been liberated, Yakyakistan still stands, and Stalliongrad has just joined the fight against Chrysalis and her war clique. Meanwhile, on less violent theaters of the war...

S.M.I.L.E (Special Military Intelligence League of Equestria) has a problem. Specifically, two problems.

  1. Their changeling agent infiltrating the so-called Great Queen's Tower has been discovered and captured.
  2. There are no more available changeling agents to infiltrate the Queen's Tower.

Luckily for them, a new recruit has just finished training- former Vanhoover cop Agent Cold Strike. She's competent, deadly (well, she will be now that she's out of training!), and good at getting dirty work done. Minor issue- she's a unicorn.

It's time to get creative.

Will Agent Cold Strike manage to blend into the experts of blending in? Will she find what she's looking for? What is she looking for? An end to the war? A promotion? LOVE!?!?!!? That's for you to decide!


As you can tell, this one is going to have a goofy, all-around lighthearted tone, but the decisions made by the collective hivemind of the comment section will still have significant effects on the story- a series of misinformed decision could lead to a quick ending! Choose wisely.

The available options will be laid out as a series of multiple choices at the end of the chapter, marked A, B, etc. Vote simply by declaring one of the letters in the comments (along with any other observations you may have). These votes will be tallied at every Tuesday, at 12:00 PM (midnight) at GMT-0/UTC-0. A chapter with no votes will default to A (which will be the most 'reasonable'/safest option by default). Tied options will be chosen by dice roll.

Feel free to leave your thoughts, feedback, and criticisms in the comments.

Teen
On Hiatus
Profanity
Violence
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic
Equestria at War
Alternate Universe
Thriller
Mystery
Comedy
 
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26671 words: Estimated about 2 hours to read

11 Chapters:

  1. Chapter 1: Choices, choices... 2024-06-08 03:40:52 UTC
    1648
  2. Chapter 2: Sleeping in the Lion's Den 2024-06-15 02:01:15 UTC
    3366
  3. Chapter 3: Wheeeeeee Up We Go 2024-06-22 04:48:09 UTC
    2356
  4. Chapter 4: The Liebessammeldienst 2024-06-29 12:11:04 UTC
    2379
  5. Chapter 5: Dinner with a Bug 2024-07-19 13:41:19 UTC
    2747
  6. Chapter 6/Act 1 Finale: So Sets the Stage 2024-08-10 02:01:38 UTC
    2893
  7. Chapter 7: Another Day 2024-08-18 03:34:18 UTC
    2011
  8. Chapter 8: Slow Start 2024-08-25 07:30:59 UTC
    2275
  9. Chapter 9: A Letter and a Phone 2024-09-01 04:11:17 UTC
    2646
  10. Chapter 10: The Good Captain 2024-09-15 05:28:52 UTC
    2171
  11. Chapter 11: The Terms and Conditions 2024-09-22 04:17:53 UTC
    2179