The rainbow factory (alternate route)

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The chains lifted her slightly, bringing her small body eye to eye with a pegasus in front of her. The pony was a deep, blood red, glistening in the artificial light of The Factory. Her mane had small spots of glorious colours of the rainbow, but was mostly the same red colour as her coat of fur. Chunks of skin were missing from small spots, and her hair was ripped in some places, bald patches of skin in others. The only clue Scootaloo had as to who this used to be were the rose iris’ focused on her.

    “Any final words, you miserable worthless whore of a foal?”

    Scootaloo brought her chin high, still demanding even the tiniest fraction of dignity.

    “I love you..... Mom,” she cooed, soft, yet clearly.

Thought she was not Scootaloo's mother she was clearly the most close to her next to a real mother. As Rainbow was looking at her with nothing more than anger and insanity in her mind, she started to remember being with her. "D-Do you remember our first lesson together?" then suddenly like a bolt of electricity Dash's mind flooded with memories of their first flight lesson.

"Alright! lets try this again... Scoots you gotta do it up-down up-down, not up-up-down." Scootaloo tried harder and harder but eventually failed. "Its ok Scoots... You'll get it next time." Rainbow said as she hugged the sad Scootaloo "Thanks for helping dash... As long as your here I'll never stop trying.... thanks... mom" she said in a low but understandable voice. But Dash didn't understand the last word, she said but shrugged and just held Scootaloo tight in her arms (or hooves).

"I remember..." Dash replied. Snapping Scootaloo from her memories back to the present.

"You do?" Scoots asked. "Yeah I really do.... Now I remember that last word you said to me" Dash told Scootaloo intently "I know why you never left my side.... Because you never had a family did you?.. So I was the one closest to being a mother to you... Its ok Scootaloo..."

"I just wanted to say I love you mom er Dash" Scootaloo said to her former Idol and friend. "As a friend and a mom"

"I love you to Scoots..." Dash said in a low voice.

"Thats why I need to get you out of here and have this hell hole destroyed." Dash said to Scootaloo

"Rainbow your back" Scootaloo said, her eyes beginning to to tear up

"Yeah... Now lets get out of here" she said in a timid voice.