The Tale of Angelfire

The Tale of Angelfire vol. II

In the early days of Equestria there was still much to fear. There were the windigos, the wild manticor, hydras, and many more dark creatures. On a small farm in the far reaches of Equestria a unicorn was born to two simple ponies wanting to avoid the drama of a new nation. In the years passed the young filly grew to put the value of friendship and others need above her own desires. It was a simple life, one of hard work, determination, and care. Even for a young filly the pony could help with anything her parents needed. She was happy.

“Angel! Angel where are you?” the question came through the haze of her half-consciousness as Angelfire slowly woke. She came to realize she had fallen asleep under a large tree near the edge of her family’s land. “Angelfire where are you?” her mother called from their small house.

“I’m coming mom!” Angelfire called as she rose from the patch of tall grass in which she lay. She ran back to her mother as they & her father ate a small dinner as the sun was setting. The tranquility of the coming twilight growing & the young unicorn lay down in the single bed of hay with her parents, their bodies creating a penetrating field of comfort & heat for the filly. Angelfire was contempt with her life & couldn’t wish for anything more.

As the morning light filled the small stone home Angelfire woke to find her parents gone off to do their daily chores. She slowly rose & shook the small bits of hay off of her chocolate hair. & then dashed from the house to go & aid her parents. She found her father off in the corn fields ploughing the soil in preparation for the next harvest.

“Do you need any help dad?” she queried,

“Angel! Why yes I do. Would you be so kind as to go get the seeds from the house & plant them sweetie?” her father said with some enthusiasm.

“Okay!” She answered, & she ran for the house & grabbed the small sack of seeds that lay on their table. She then raced back to her father & proceeded to plant them. After she was done she then went to find her mother.

“Good morning Angel, would you like to help me?” her mother asked with a silken voice,

“Of course mom, I always want to help,” Angel replied.

“That you do,” Her mother said, “Now, I need you to go collect some berries for me & I’ll make a nice pie tonight.”

“Yay!” Angelfire squealed as she darted into the near forest. She found her usual batch of berry bushes not three yards from the edge of the forest. She began to pick the sweet berries there when she heard a rustling noise. She looked into the depths of the forest attempting to locate its source when a creature lunged at her.

The carriage lurched as it came to a full stop. “Here we are,” the lead pony, a familiar white Pegasus in royal armor, said, “see you around ‘Paladin’.” there were hints of sarcasm in his tone but she didn’t mind Angelfire thought as she exited the carriage.

“See you around Chuck,” Angelfire said laughingly, she had trained with him & they had been friends for a time, Chuck wasn’t his name but she called him it as a joke. “Maybe one day you’ll be part of my guard,” she said with a chuckle, “Chuck” sighed as he led the others pulling the carriage back to Canterlot. Angelfire looked upon Ponyville while stretching her new “wings”, for upon donning Celestia’s gift she felt a connection with the ancient contraptions within her mind and could now control them as separate limbs, then strode into the town heading for the home of the first person to show compassion to her upon her revival.

“Well I didn’t expect to see you here,” Twilight Sparkle said upon opening her door to find Angelfire there, “What brings you back to Ponyville?” the lavender unicorn asked. Taking in her friends full appearance Twilight noticed a set of wings & hinted at them.

“Oh those,” Angelfire said lightly flapping her “wings”, “I was given them by Celestia to aid me in my task & I came to see my first friend, & to say goodbye.”

“Goodbye? why?” Twilight questioned, “Why can’t you stay?”

“I was given a sacred task by Celestia, to eliminate all evil in Equestria, & to do that I must leave Ponyville.”

“Well we’re all going to miss you here,” Twilight replied with sorrow in her eyes, “If Spike were here he would probably start crying.” Both unicorns giggled at the thought. “Goodbye, I guess, I hope you can come back some day,” Twilight said solemnly.

“As do I,” Replied Angel, “perhaps when my task is completed I can return to live a simple life with all of you ponies,”

“We all would like that,” the purple unicorn relied with hints of hope, & with that the chocolate unicorn left. She then went to the Carousel Boutique and properly thanked Rarity for her aid in her first hours in Ponyville & then departed.

Angelfire limped back to her home with a deep gash in her right hind leg. After reaching the house her parents promptly medicated the wound. “What happened?” her father asked.

“I was picking berries for mom’s pie when a monster attacked me,” the frightened filly answered, “Momma I’m scared.”

“Now now,” her mother cooed, “There are no such things as monsters” & with that the filly slept. Weeks passed & Angelfire was completely healed, she was out picking berries when she smelled a hint of smoke. She went to see where it came from & upon leaving the forest she saw the nearby town in flames. The young unicorn could not believe her eyes & ran back to her home. Once inside her parents gathered her in the corner of the room as the door burst across the room in splinters. In its place were all matters of evil: there were foul daemons, dark unicorns, evil beasts, & hordes of undead. While the filly stared in shock her parents looked on each other with tears in their eyes, they each nodded and used what little magic they had to teleport their only child outside of the house.

Upon rematerialization Angelfire rushed to the window to see what was happening, she would regret it for the rest of her life, her father grabbed the cutting knife & charged the horde. He was struck with an arch of lightning from one of the unicorns and was torn limb from limb by the undead, the cracking & breaking of bones combined with a blood churning scream of pain as well as one of horror from Angelfire’s mother filled the room. the daemons charged but were halted by an unknown earth pony. The leader was a colt with ash grey hair & a pure white mane, his eyes were a soulless white with a snake-like retina, he walked up to Angelfire’s mother & raised a hoof to her face. What next happened will haunt the filly for the rest of her life, an eery green glow came from his raised hoof & her mother writhed in agony then, she fell limp & her entire body exploded upon contact with the ground, her blood showering the invaders & splattering on the young filly’s face through the window. As the blood settled the filly sprinted as far from the building as she could filled with fear & rage, deep within her heart she vowed to kill the pony for what he did & all those who practice evil. Angelfire’s quest for revenge started that day, & would continue for all her life.

Angelfire woke drenched in sweat. Se had decided to setup camp at the edge of the Everfree forest for the night miles from any civilization. She pondered on the idea of how she was to complete her task, she had heard stories while in Ponyville of an old pony who lived in a cabin at the edge of town & wondered if he could give her any council but decided against it for the time being. She decided instead that to find any clue as to the source of evil it would be found at the only place she knew where they had struck, her birth-home...

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Tale of Angelfire vol. II By Quintyn Hollis

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