Chapters Twilight's Discovery:Things Are Changing
Twilight’s Discovery: Things Are Changing
6 months after the Crystal Empire incident.
Spike was following Twilight around the library, checking things off of his checklist that Twilight had made for that morning.
Twilight was almost done with the checklist on what needed to be in her saddle-bags for her adventure.
“Twilight, are you sure you should be going into the Everfree forest?” Spike said to Twilight as he checked another thing off the checklist.
***
Twilight began her trek at 6am that morning, knowing that most monsters were nocturnal, and they would be asleep by then. She had been walking for nearly three hours now without stopping. She knew that she should be getting close after following her previous clues.
These clues was a strange footstep that had dried in some mud. The odd thing about this footstep was that it didn’t seem to match any of the footprints in her Know Your Monsters: A Guide to All Things Monster, she also told her friend Grumpkin about this. He usually knew everything there is to monsters, but he said that he hadn’t seen anything like this before.
As she travel continued through the thick brush of the Everfree, but stopped as she found herself in a clearing. And standing dead center of the clearing was three timberwolves trying to dig at something. She quickly realized her mistake and let out a gasp as she tried to back up. Immediately one of the wolves whipped its head around, alerted from the noise. The wolf quickly barked to alert his packmates. Twilight let out a small gasp as she tried to assess the situation.
The first timberwolf lunged at Twilight with intense speed.
Twilight, on instinct, teleported behind the beast. As she reappeared, she shot a bolt of white hot flames at the wolf. The wolf, still off-balance, tried to stumble away before getting hit with the spell. The once timberwolf was now a pile of ash.
Twilight turned on the other two. They quickly got the hint as they sprinted off into the brush.
‘hmm, i wonder what they were pawing at.’ Twilight thought to herself.
She took a glance at the hole and found a pair of rabbits.
‘Are you serious? I take on a timberwolf for these creatures? Ugh, at least they won’t have those nasty things bothering them for a while.’
Twilight began on her journey again.
***
It was about midafternoon when Twilight decided to take a rest. She sat on the edge of river which she had never seen before. She opened up her saddle-bags and brought out a daisey sandwich. She munched happily on her lunch and sipped on her water. Suddenly, she heard a noise to her left, across the river. She tried to hide behind a fairly large rock as best she could. What she saw before her was the strangest creature she had ever laid eyes on.
It was a primate of some sort. It had no tail which is unusually for such a being. The primate had no hair except for the top of his head, which was blonde and he was rather skinny looking. It wore the strangest assortment of clothes, a pair of jeans, a shirt with blue flannel over it, he looked rather beat up. The creature had knelt down over the river and took a cup full of water with his hands.
“I see you over there.” The thing said after it had taken a drink.
“You know, purple doesn’t blend very well with a grey boulder.”
“What are you?!” she managed to get out with a shaky voice.
“Wait, you can talk?” he asked.
“I asked, ‘What are you?’” she asked, a bit more confidence in her voice as she lowered her horn.
“Um, I am a human, my name is Michael. But shouldn’t I be asking these questions?”He replied.
Twilight pondered what he said so far. After some silence, the boy spoke up again.
“Are you going to kill me? Because that would be a problem.” He spoke.
“Why?” Twilight said cautiously. Knowing full well that she wouldn’t kill him.
“Well, before you decide, I suggest that we run.” he said.
“Why?!”
“There is a bear right behind you.” He yelled as he dove across the small river and push her out of the path of the beast.
Twilight tumbled to safety. She looked up to see Michael and the bear battling it out. She noticed a rather large hunting knife in the hand of the boy. The bear swiped at the boy. Swiftly, Michael rolled to the side. Coming up from his maneuver, he slashed at the bear’s stomach.
“Damn. Run!” Michael yelled.”Follow me!”
They ran through thick forests with a crazed bear behind them. It felt like forever, but they finally stopped in front of a vine. To Twilight it looked like a regular old vine, but Michael grabbed Twilight around the waist and pulled the vine. He rose to the top of the tree where a small wood platform was. He stepped onto it and put Twilight down.
“Shit, now I am going to have to reset this entire pulley system” he said as he looked over the edge of the platform and saw his counter-weight on the ground.
“Well, at least we’re safe now” he stated.
“So, since we are safe now, we have some time to talk.”
“Umm, okay. Let’s talk.”
Twilight's Discovery:Things Are Changing
A New Home and Old Memories
Twilight’s Discovery: Things are Changing
“Okay let’s talk. What are you and how can you speak?” Michael asked.
“Well, all ponies can talk and what about you? What are you?” Twilight asked.”
Twilight was very interested in this creature. She wanted to find out more, like where he came from and how is he so intelligent when he lives in the Everfree Forest.
“So, in this world ponies can talk? Where am I Miss...?” Michael dragged the last word on as to ask her name.
“Twilight, just call me Twilight. And you’re in the Everfree Forest.” She said.
“Where is that? I haven’t heard of it. Maybe you can show me on a globe or Google maps or something.” he said, thoroughly confused.
“Google? What are you talking about?” Twilight asked.
‘Am I even on Earth anymore?’ Michael thought. ‘That is probably what that purple mist was back home’
“Oh! Sorry, I was lost in my thoughts.” he replied
“Oh, what about?”
“Well, I think something brought me here. I think it was an accident that I am here.”
“Well, everything happens for a reason. That’s always what my mentor taught me.” Twilight concluded.
“Yeah, I guess” Michael stated. This made him feel even worse.
‘What is the reason that I need to be here?’ he thought, ‘I could have been home playing football or something’
“Are there more of you?” he asked Twilight.
“Actually ponies populate all of Equestria. It is a wonder that you haven’t met any before.” she answered.
“Trust me, I have met much nastier things while I have been here.” Michael said.
“Yeah, there are a lot of weird thi-Wait what do you mean since you’ve been here?” Twilight asked.
“Well, I haven’t lived here. What kind of person lives in the woods? I have been surviving for a while now and it has been pretty rough.” he said.
This put Twilight off. She didn’t like the idea of Michael living out in the woods by himself. Especially since he had tried to have been surviving. Plus, she had a lot more questions she wanted to ask him.
‘Maybe he can live with me.’ Twilight thought.
‘But what if he is dangerous?’ she argued with herself.
‘Ok, but I can’t just leave him.’ she said.
‘Fine, he will just have to stay in the guest room.’
“Well, you can always stay with me.” Twilight said.
“Ok!’ Michael said a little too quickly. He turned away, not wanting to look into Twilight’s eyes, “I mean, only if its no trouble for you.”
“It’s no problem at all and I can’t just let you stay here anymore. It’s way too dangerous.” she said.
“Um, ok. Lead on Twilight.” he said.
***
When Twilight and Michael finally made it back to Ponyville, they were both exhausted. Running from bears and other monsters took a lot out of them. Twilight opened the door to her library and showed Michael in. He looked around the room, studying the layout.
“I will be right down, I have to put my saddlebags away.” Twilight said as she began to walk up stairs.
“Ok”
It was at that moment that Spike walked in the front door. He had an ice cream cone in his claw and a bag of groceries for dinner.
As soon as he looked up he dropped his ice cream and bags onto the floor. The ice cream hit the floor with a comical ‘splat’. At the same moment he let out a loud scream.
“TWILIGHT!” the tiny dragon yelled.
Michael was just as scared. He jumped away nearly tripping over himself and falling on the floor.
“What is it Spike?!” Twilight yelled as she galloped down the stairs, only to find Spike behind the couch and Michael up against a bookcase. Both had terrified looks in their eyes.
“What is it?” Spike got out in a quivering voice.
“Um, I don’t like being referred to as ‘it’.” Michael said slightly annoyed.
“Sorry Spike, this is Michael. He’s a-uh-you never told me what you were.” Twilight said.
“I’m a human. I came here from my world called Earth.” Michael said, finally accepting that he was no longer on the same planet.
“Oh, uh ok then.” Spike said a little confused now.
“And what are you? Some kind of purple lizard?” Michael asked.
“No! I am a dragon.” Spike said. He blew out a small green flame just to prove his point.
“Ok” Michael said, unamused. Just then his stomach growled. Michael blushed in embarrassment, “Sorry, I haven’t eaten all day. I have had barely enough food to survive.”
“Oh my gosh! I am SO sorry. Here let me make you a sandwich until dinner!” Twilight said.
“Wait you have been surviving? Where exactly?” Spike asked.
“I was sent here some months ago and was forced survive in the Everfree Forest.”
“Are you kidding? You survived that long in the Everfree?!” Spike said, surprised, “How did you make it?”
Michael told Spike that he only had his hunting knife when he was sent here. He told him that he survived the long nights and endless monsters chasing him by hiding in the trees only coming down for water and food. Spike was on the edge of his seat listening to Michael. Twilight overheard some of their conversation almost not believing what he said. It was just too mind boggling for her.
“And then I jumped out of the tree and landed on the beast-” Michael said.
“Here is your sandwich. I hope you like mustard.” Twilight said politely.
“Thank you so much Twilight! If it wasn’t for you then I would still be out in that monster infested forest.” Michael said, almost with watering eyes.
“It really was no trouble. And if it wasn’t for you then I would probably have been lunch for that bear.” Twilight said. She noticed how ragged Michael looked. His clothes were completely torn up. She decided where she was going tomorrow.
“Michael, tomorrow I am bringing you to my friend Rarity. You really do need new clothes and she is the best designer in Ponyville.” Twilight spoke.
“Okay, but is there anywhere that I can take a quick nap before dinner?” he asked.
“Yeah, I will show you your room that you will be staying in while you are here.”
Twilight lead Michael up the stairs and to his new room. It had a nice looking bed and a nightstand with a candle.
“Thank you so much Twilight. I don’t know what I do without you”
Twilight blushed
“It really was no problem. I will come and get you for dinner.”
“Ok, thanks again.” With that Michael shut the door and fell asleep as soon as his head hit the pillow.
***
Michael’s dreams were very strange. He dreamt of his mother back home and his siblings. In his dream Michael watched as his Mom was crying. His brothers, Nick and James, tried to comfort her. All she wanted was to have her son back.
***
“What if he is dangerous Spike?” Twilight asked in a hushed tone.
“I like him, he seems very nice. I don’t think he would hide anything from us.” Spike whispered back.
“Well, okay Spike. I trust your gut.”
“Speaking of gut, what do you want to eat for dinner?” Spike asked.
“How about we go out to eat?” she said.
“Aw yeah, where do you want to go?”
“What about that little restaurant on the corner?” Twilight had found that place by mistake when going to dinner with Rarity. Twilight really enjoyed the food and the owners were very nice to them.
“Okay, that sounds awesome!” Spike said.
“I will go get Michael.”
***
Michael woke up to the sound of hooves knocking on the door and tears in his eyes. He didn’t realize how much he missed his family. He tried to wipe away the tears, but his eyes were still red and bloodshot. Michael opened the door and saw Twilight standing there.
“Oh um, how are you?” she asked.
“I am fine” Michael said, clearly not wanting to talk about it.
“Oh uh ok. I just came to get you for dinner, that is if you want to come.”
“Yeah sure, I’ll come. Where are we going?” he asked.
“Oh just to this little restaurant down the road.”
“Ok, sounds nice.”
Michael followed her down the stairs and out the door, where Spike waited for them. They all started walking towards the restaurant.
“So, how was your nap” Spike asked as if talking to a baby.
“Oh it was fine. It was nice to not hear your voice for an hour.” Michael said smirking.
“Yeah same, my eyes were thanking me when I didn’t have to look at your ugly mug” Spike said grinning.
‘Damn, he got me’ Michael thought, ’I haven’t done this in ages, I lost my touch!’
Michael sat down and looked at the menu. All he saw absolutely no meat on it.
‘Ugh, I forgot! Horses don’t eat meat! Now what am I supposed to eat!’
He looked back down and found the pasta section. He decided to go with the veggie lasagna. Ho loved when his mom made it back home, but she used meat sauce on it instead.
The waiter came and was thoroughly confused when he saw Michael sitting with Twilight. But he steeled his nerves and went to the table.
Twilight, Spike and Michael all ordered. They drank their water while they waited for the food to come. Michael couldn’t bear the silence anymore, so he started the conversation.
“So Twilight, what exactly do you do for a living?” he asked.
“I am Princess Celestia’s personal student.”
“Princess Celestia?” he said confused.
“Oh, she is our ruler. She raises the sun while her sister, Luna, raises the moon.”
‘There is magic, pegasi, and monsters here so Princesses that control astronomical bodies, why not?’
“Oh okay.” he said, not wanting to go into more detail.
***
By the time they finished dinner it was well into the night. The group decided it was time to go home. Michael, who was still really tired, was perfectly fine with going home.
They had finally reached home. They all walked in and Spike took a seat on the couch. Twilight took a seat next to him after she lit a fire. Michael felt the warmth hit him, it only made him all the more tired.
“Goodnight Twilight and Spike. I’d love to stay down here, but I am beat. See you tomorrow.” Michael yawned.
He walked up stairs and put his knife of the counter. He peeked his head outside.
“Um, Twilight you wouldn’t mind if I took a shower, would you?” he asked shiley.
“No, of course not. Make yourself at home.” she said, she levitated a towel to him from the couch.
“Thanks.” Michael said.
The shower felt nice. Michael was able to clean off his cuts and scrub the dirt off his body. While he washed, he thought of all the pain his friends and family were feeling. He often did this while he was in the forest. It wasn’t that he wanted pity or wanted to complain. It was because he wanted to just wish himself there. Though, he knew that would never happen and he knew it. He felt sorry for his family. When he did this in the forest he would just switch to thinking about survival, but now that he was safe he didn’t have anything else to think about. So, he got out of the shower and went to bed. Once again he fell asleep thinking about his family.
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Twilight's Discovery:Things Are Changing
Michael woke up in the guest room of Twilight’s house. He had had dreams of his family again. He had to stop. He needed to focus on right now and what he was going to do. He smelled breakfast being made, it was delicious.He got out of bed and walked downstairs. He saw Spike cooking in the kitchen.
“Mmm, smells good. Whatchya makin’?” Michael said.
“Just some cheese omelettes.” the little dragon replied.
“Sounds good, where’s Twilight?” he asked.
“Probably still asleep. She went to bed late last night. She said she had to write a letter to the princess.” Spike said.
“Oh, ok. So how long ‘till breakfast is ready?”
“It’s finishing up right now” Spike said as he put three omelettes on the plates.
“Alright! Let’s eat!” Michael said.
“Okay, let me get the silverware.”
***
Spike and Michael finished eating and already cleaned their plates as well as the kitchen before Twilight finally come down. The purple mare had massive bed head, which was pretty funny to look at. Spike and Michael had to hold their tongues.
“I feel like death.” Twilight said groggily.
“Yeah um Twilight, you kinda need to brush your hair.” Spike said.
Twilight looked in the mirror and saw tufts of hair sticking out at odd angles.
“Oh god!” She gasped.
With that Spike and Michael both burst out laughing.
“Yeah yeah, whatever you two.” Twilight said, sitting down at the table already heating her meal with a spell.
“Michael, we have to get you to Rarity. I’m usually not bothered by this, but your clothes look like they have been shred to pieces.” Twilight said.
“Oh, I want to come to.” Spike said.
Michael looked down at his clothes embarrassed.
“Fine, lets go.” he said.
***
The trio walked towards Carousel Boutique getting strange looks from passersby. Michael tried not to make eye contact with anypony as he walked.
“Ok, after this we can go get lunch at Sugarcube Corner.” Twilight said already planning her day.
“We just ate, how long is this going to take?” Michael said.
Twilight gave Michael an elevator glance.
“A while” she admitted.
The knocked on the door of the boutique.
“Coming!” Rarity said in a sing-song voice.
The door opened up to reveal a white unicorn with purple mane. She looked up to see Michael and jumped back, almost falling.
“Oh, sorry my dear. I was just startled by.. um..” Rarity said as her sentence trailed off,
“Hello Rarity! This is our new friend Michael.” Twilight said, trying to save the conversation, “As you can see, he really needs some new clothes.”
“Oh why certainly darling. Why don’t you come inside.” she said.
Spike was happy to hear that and ran inside, Twilight and Michael followed.
“So, if you could just stand here” Rarity said gesturing to a stand, “I can take your measurements.”
Rarity levitated the measuring tape over and started writing down his size. Now, Michael wasn’t really a big guy. He was rather thin and lanky. He has just a couple inches from six foot, but had the legs of a sprinter. Michael ran track in high school and was decent compared to the other runners. The thing that made him different was that he was pretty strong even though he didn’t look it. As well as running track, he also sailed. This gave him great core muscles and fairly good upper muscles.
Rarity gave him another once over and got a look in her eyes.
“Idea!”Rarity said.
She levitated some black and white cloth over to them. She took it to her sewing machine and began working.
The trio waited for 2 hours for Rarity to finish. She brought the folded clothes to Michael.
“Here, try this. I think you’ll look quite good in it.”
Michael changed into the new clothes. What he saw in the mirror was amazing. Rarity made some black pants that looked very good next to his boots. He also had a white v-neck shirt that was covered with an unbuttoned black jacket. The jacket had a hood and some white trim. It flowed down into a split tail, sort of like the ones on tuxedos. She even made a sheath for his knife that he put on his belt. Over all, he looked awesome!
“Wow!” Twilight said.
“Right?!” he said jokingly.
“So, do you like it dear?” Rarity asked.
“Rarity, I love it. Thanks so much!” he picked Rarity up and hugged her.
He put her down slightly embarrassed, but he didn’t care. Rarity was awesome.
She cleared her throat, “Yes it is, isn’t it?”
“Well, want to get lunch Rarity?” Twilight asked.
“Oh why darling that sounds wonderful. Where are we going?”
“We are going to Sugarcube Corner and visit Pinkie.” Twilight said.
“Delightful! Let’s get going darling.” Rarity said.
***
The group arrived at Sugarcube corner a little past noon. They were all hungry and ready to eat. Spike opened up the door for them, mostly to impress Rarity.
“Why thank you Spikey-Wikey! Aren’t you just the little gentleman today?” Rarity said.
“Yeah. Thanks, Spikey-Wikey .” Michael said chuckling, earning a . They all walked through the door and Michael smelled the most delicious things.
“I haven’t had sweets in so long!” Michael said, running up to glass display.
“Why is that dear?” Rarity asked.
“Michael has been in the Everfree for a couple months. I found him yesterday by a river in there. I don’t know how he did it, but he wasn’t.” Twilight answered.
“You can’t be serious. There is no way somepony can survive in that terrible place.” Rarity gasped.
“Yeah, thats what I thought. His setup out there was pretty ingenious though. He . I have so much to ask him.” Twilight said, watching Michael look at each pastry individually.
“You know Rarity, I don’t think he is from Equestria. He has hinted that he isn’t from here. And the way he acts is too abnormal for a beast that has grown up in the woods.” Twilight said, half to herself.
“Hmm, yes. I see what you mean darling. He certainly is strange, but nothing like a wild beast.”
With that Twilight walked up to Michael.
“Michael, did you want to get anything?”
“I don’t want to spend all your money Twilight.”
“It’s totally fine. Get whatever you want. They are all delicious.” Twilight said.
“Thank you so much Twilight!” he said.
“It’s really no problem.” Twilight blushed.
Just then the Mr. and Mrs. Cake walked in. The were startled by Michael’s presence, but tried to act as if it were normal.
“Did you figure out what you wanted, honey?” Mrs. Cake asked.
Spike quickly ordered, “I will have one Saphire cupcake.”
The two girls ordered next. Rarity got a cheesecake and Twilight bought a slice of apple pie. The apples were from Applejack’s farm. It finally came down to Michael. He couldn’t figure out what he wanted. He looked around trying to decide which popped out at him the most. He looked up and decided.
“I’ll have the triple chocolate mousse cake.” he said.
Twilight payed and they all sat down at the table. It was at that moment that Pinkie Pie came down stairs with the twins.
“Phew, these kids sure are funny!” she said to the Cakes.
“Pinkie your friends are here, they’re just at that table” Mr. Cake pointed out. Pinkie looked over and saw Twilight waving her over.
“Hey Pinkie, want to hang out with us?” Twilight asked.
“Yeah su-” Pinkie froze looking directly at Michael. Michael sat there nervously. He looked around, trying not to stare back at Pinkie’s unblinking gaze.
“Are you new here?” Pinkie asked very slowly as if she didn’t notice his strange appearance. Michael was shocked at this statement.
“Well, yeah I-” Michael was cut off.
“Oh wow! We have to throw a party! I’ll call it ‘My New Strange Looking Friend Party’! The M.N.S.L.F.P is now under way! Now I just have to send out the invitations!” With that Pinkie ran off.
“So much for my low-profile.” Michael stated flatly.
“Don’t worry, this way we can show everypony that you’re not dangerous.” Twilight said.
“Why yes darling! It’ll be smashing.” Rarity reassured.
The group finished their snacks and started walking out the door. They began down the street towards Twilight’s house.
“So Rarity, do you have any plans for the rest of the day?” Twilight asked.
“Sorry my darling, but yes. I have to finish up an order by tomorrow morning, so i have to depart. We can certainly get together sometime later though. Is that alright?” Rarity said sadly.
“Oh yeah, I don’t want to keep you from your work. See you later!”
“Yeah, bye Rarity” Spike said.
“Okay then, goodbye everyone” Rarity said as she began to trot off towards her house.
“And Michael,” Rarity called over her shoulder, “don’t hesitate to ask if you need more outfits. I do love making your style, it’s a such a challenge for me!”
***
Twilight, Spike and Michael arrived at the library around 4 o’clock. They had a nice day out, but Twilight wanted to figure out more about Michael. His background was very, for lack of a better word, interesting.
Twilight and Michael walked out the door. They turned towards Dash's house and started off.
They walked in silence the rest of the way to Rainbow Dash's house. Michael began to think of his life in Ponyville. He knew he would have to get a job. He couldn't just mooch off Twilight. The arrived at Rainbow's house a couple minutes later.
Rainbow, who was laying on a nearby cloud, woke with a start. She looked over the side of her cloud and saw Twilight and Michael. She floated down on the ground eyeing Michael nervously.
Twilight and Michael
***
Twilight and Michael arrived home around 7 o’clock. Spike was making dinner, it looked like spaghetti with red sauce.
“Mmm, smells good Spike!” Twilight said.
“Thanks Twilight” the dragon smiled.
Dinner was ready in a couple of minutes. They all ate and Spike and Michael went to bed. Twilight was left downstairs next to the fire. She read her favorite book on this fall night. She looked out her window and saw snow start to fall. She smiled and went back to reading her book.
***
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Twilight's Discovery:Things Are Changing
Michael was the first to wake this time. He still felt full from last night. That was the most he’d eaten in months. In fact, that was the first time he had three full meals in a day. He need to get some exercise. He got up and walked into the bathroom. He got ready to go when he realized he only had what Rarity gave him.
“I can’t do anything in this !”he thought.Hmm, maybe if I go to Rarity's she can make me some running shorts.’ he thought.
Michael walked downstairs and saw the snow falling outside.
‘Welp, there goes my plan for running’
He turned and saw Twilight asleep on the couch. Her book had fallen on the ground. He decided that he would just go out for a walk. Michael wrote a tiny note and left it on the counter. He opened the door and walked into the snow. Michael found that his new clothes were very warm when they needed to be.
He continued down the street and noticed all the small shops. Then a pink pony appeared in front of him. He didn’t even see her walk up to him. It was the same one that was at that bakery.
“What’s her name again? Pinkie, that’s it. How’d I forget? It’s the color she is!” he thought.
“Hi, you are invited to a party tonight!” she said with a bubbly voice.
She smiled and hoofed over a small blue envelope.
“Oh, thanks. I will definitely be there.” Michael said, staring at the card.
“Well, I hope. What kind of party would it be if the guest of honor didn’t come?” she giggled.
Michael smiled.
“Okay, see you later! I have to hand out the rest of the invitations.”
Michael continued down the street, noticing how happy everyone was. No matter how much he felt trapped here, it was pretty nice. He noticed a wanted sign on a couple of buildings. One that really stuck out to him was what looked to be a blacksmith/carpenter. Back home, his real home, he helped his dad with a lot of things. He thought that he should definitely pay back Twilight and make some money of his own.
He walked into the shop and saw a brown pony. The pony had a strong build with very sturdy muscles. Michael decided to walk up to him.
“Hi, I saw that you’re looking for work.” Michael said.
The stallion looked up, unfazed by Michael’s appearance.
“What experience do you have with a hammer?” the stallion asked in a gruff voice.
“Well, I have helped fix some of my cars with my dad.” Michael replied.
“Cars?”
“Um, never mind. I’ve had a lot of experience with boat maintenance.” Michael said, remembering all the broken stuff on his boats.
“That’s good enough, welcome aboard kid. Get here by 9am tomorrow. We will discuss your working arrangement.” the stallion said, “And what’s your name by the way?”
“It’s Michael, what about yours?”
“I’m Iron. Iron Sledge.” he said.
“Thanks, Iron.”
Michael felt good about his new job. Now he can stop mooching off Twilight and pay for his own stuff. Michael started walking back to the library.
***
Michael walked into the library and noticed that Twilight had gotten up. He looked around and saw Spike organizing bookshelves.
“What’s up Spike?”
“Nothing much, Twilight went to Applejack’s if you’re wondering. I forgot why though, sorry.”
“Thanks. What are you doing for the rest of the day?” Michael asked.
“Oh nothing much. I wanted to go sledding, but Twilight isn’t back yet and she doesn’t want me to go alone.”
“Sledding? Are there hills around here for that?”
“Oh yeah! My favorite hill is right outside the Everfree forest. That’s part of the reason I can’t go.” Spike complained.
“Well, I can go with you. I love sledding!” Michael said, “Let’s just get the sled and go!”
“Well, I think she would be fine. Let’s just leave a note to make sure she knows.”
“Ok, sweet.” Michael said excitedly, “I haven’t been sledding in so long!”
Michael couldn’t wait to go sledding. Although, the uncertainty of the looming Everfree Forest made him bring his knife. Spike was excited as well. The little dragon ran through the house gathering his gear. A few moments later Spike came down with the sled and a snow jacket.
They walked out the door and Spike led the way to the hill. Michael began to see the hill. It was far enough away so that ponies could play on it, but the forest would always be in there mind. Michael and Spike started up the hill. It was fairly large, so it took a couple of minutes to get to the top.
“You know what would make this a lot cooler?” Michael said with a devilish grin.
“What?”
“We should build a jump at the bottom!” Michael said.
“Okay! Sounds awesome!” Spike said.
The duo slid half-way down the hill and began the job. It took around 15 minutes. They covered a log in snow and made a snow ramp going up it for a smooth curve in the hillside.
“Why don’t you go first, Michael?” Spike said daringly.
“Nah, you can.” he said, staring down the hill.
“What you scared?”
“No! Fine, I’ll go. If it would shut you up.” Michael joked.
Michael sat down on the sled. He gulped.
‘Ok, I can do this. It’s easy.’
Michael pushed off and bolted down the hill. He saw the jump and prepared. He began to feel nervous, but it was too late. The jump was only twenty feet ahead of him. The sled jerked and sent Michael flying. He leaned back, attempting a trick. He was half-way through a backflip when his face hit the snow hard. Luckily for Michael the snow was still fresh and loose. Too bad it didn’t stop it from hurting him. Michael continued to fall down the hill, that is until the tree got in his way.
“Ow...” Michael groaned.
Spike couldn’t help but burst out laughing. The little dragon was having a fit of laughter.
"Yeah, really funny." he said sarcastically.
It was just then that Michael looked up and saw a large wooden object moving towards them. It pounced at Spike.
"Spike! Move!" Michael said.
Michael tackled Spike onto the ground. The thing sailed over their heads. Michael got up and whipped out his knife. He had a chance to get a closer look at it.
"A timberwolf!" Spike cried.
The wolf turned back and looked at Michael. The wolf's menacing gaze brought a chill to his spine. The wolf let out a snarl and pounced again. This time Michael was ready for it. He rolled to the side and stabbed upward into the wolf's chest. He looked over expecting the wolf to be wounded. It just got up and snarled again.
"Run!" Michael yelled to Spike.
They tried to run towards the town, but three more jumped out from behind some bushes. Michael grabbed Spike and ran into the forest.
"We can go to Zecora's!" Spike said between breaths.
"Fine, anywhere!"
Spike led Michael to a small trail. Two more timberwolves jumped out of the bush.
'Why can't I just have a normal day?' Michael thought to himself.
Michael was hit to the ground, a timberwolf on top of him.
Michael screamed.
A bright purple burst hit the timberwolf square in the chest. It flew across the path and hit a tree before dropping to the ground
I looked over and saw Twilight.
"Oh thank God you're here! How’d you know it was me?!"
"I didn’t know it was you. I thought a mare was being attacked. And you are lucky I was at Zecora's getting supplies." she said.
“Yeah very manly.” Spike snickered
Michael sat up covered in bruises and mud.
‘Ugh, that fucking hurt’
“Yeah, can we just go home now?” Michael said with a groan .
“Yeah, I can try and fix you up once we’re there.”
Michael got up and walked towards Twilight, Spike soon followed. They all began walking towards the library.
***
Michael’s POV
We finally made it to the library. I was so tired of this crap. Why does life hate me so much?
“Michael, come let me try to fix you up.” Twilight said.
“No, it’s fine” I said, “You have done so much for me anyways.”
“Michael please just get over here.” She said more insistently.
“Fine.” I complained.
Twilight’s horn began to light up. A magenta aura washed over me. What happened next was extremely painful. I could feel my wounds healing, but it stung. It felt like I had just poured salt on every cut. I clenched my jaw from all of the pain.
The process was finally over. I looked at Twilight who looked drained from using all that magic.
“Thank you Twilight” I said.
“It was no problem. I am just going to take a quick nap before the party.” She said.
“Oh yeah, I forgot about that.” I said, “I am going to get ready a little.”
After about an hour everyone was ready for the party. Twilight led to the party, mostly because I still have no idea where I’m going when I walk around the town.
We walked up to the entrance of the Sugar Cube Corner. The entire place looked like it had been re-done to resemble a dance club. It was dark with flashing lights and music blaring. I walked in and saw the crowd of ponies. Some were dancing while others sat around the food and drinks talking.
“Hiya! Are you ready to partay?!” Pinkie yelled.
“I sure am!” I said with a smile.
I saw a banner that said ‘M.N.S.L.F.P’. Ugh, she really did that. Well, I should just enjoy the food.
I walked up to one of the tables with pastries on it. There was a green unicorn talking to another pony leaning on the table. She looked up at me and almost fell back. She looked at me in surprise then ran off.
“Sorry about my friend” The pony said, “She just got nervous.”
“No problem.”
“I better go make sure she is alright. See you around!” she smiled.
“Okay, see ya!” I said.
Huh, that was weird. Now, which one to pick? How about these ones.
I went to grab one of the pastries when my hand met a cyan hoof.
“Oh, sorry you can take that one.” I said before looking up.
I looked up and saw a Pegasus with a multi-colored mane.
“No, it’s fine. You take it.” she said
“Oh, hey. You’re one of Twilight’s friends. Rainbow Blast, right?” I asked. As soon as I said that I knew I had the name wrong.
“Dash. It’s Rainbow Dash.” she said, clearly annoyed.
“Oh, sorry.” I said.
I looked down, trying not to make eye contact with her.
“Oh, I didn’t mean to be like that.” she exclaimed.
“Oh, it’s fine. I know that you were just correcting me.”
“Okay, well, see you around!”
“Kay, see ya!”
The party continued on even after I left. Twilight, Spike and I all left the party around ten o’clock. We walked home and I passed out almost immediately.
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Author’s Notes: Thank you to my editors Ex-Nihilos and Muffinman1995! I am switching my story over to a first person. Sorry to all of you who like it this way, but I find it easier and better to write in first person! And sorry that I couldn’t get this out faster, I was caught up with school work. I have a couple weeks until winter break and my teachers are slamming me with homework. Muffinman would know. We go to the same school and have Latin together! Fuck that class is hard. (I’m giving Muffinman permission to write more stuff about Latin or respond to this. I think it’d be fun to start doing that with the editors. Just so the audience knows what our conversations are. You guys agree?)
Twilight's Discovery:Things Are Changing
7am the following morning‘Dear Princess Celestia, I have found this strange being in the Everfree Forest. I haven’t seen anything like him before. He says he is called a human. I was wondering what you want me to do. I currently am letting him stay with me in my guest room. I am awaiting your response. Your faithful student, Twilight Sparkle’
“There sent it. Thank you, Spike.” Twilight said.
Within two minutes, Spike belched out a green flame with a letter. Twilight opened it.
‘My dearest student Twilight, Thank you for your letter. I am aware of his species. I would like you to take him to Canterlot and bring him to me as soon as possible. I am waiting for your arrival. Celestia’
“We have to leave for Canterlot today.” Twilight said.
***
I awoke to a hoof knocking on the door. Jumping up I opened it. It was Twilight.
“Sorry, but I need you to come with me to Canterlot.” She said.
“Okay, can I get ready first?”
“Oh, yes. But the train leaves at noon. So, please hurry.”
I got up and walked into the bathroom, took a shower, and brushed my teeth. Why are we even up so damn early?
We walked to the train station and bought two tickets. The train arrived ten minutes later and we got on. I sat across from Twilight and we talked.
“So, where are we going?” I asked
“Just to see the Princess. She asked to see you.”
Oh, great I get to meet the Princess. I probably am in trouble , I thought.
“The same one that moves the sun?” I said nervously.
“Yep, that’s her.” She smiled.
Great, I am so going to die.
The train ride lasted another half-hour before we reached Canterlot. I got off and gazed at the huge palace.
This place is huge! I don’t even know how they did it! The castle had golden roofs and white walls, the It balance on the edge of the mountain, looking as if it was about to fall. I gaped at the castle as we pulled up to the station.
We walked down the street to the castle and up the stairs. The guards stopped us when we got the door.
“We’re here to see the Princess. I’m Twilight Sparkle.” She said.
They let us in and we walked to the throne room.
I saw a bunch of stained glass windows, but that didn’t catch my attention. My gaze fixed on the white pony on the throne. She was pure white and wore gold jewelry. What interested me most was that she had both wings and a horn.
“Welcome Michael.” She said in a smooth voice.
I gulped, “Um, hi.”
She smirked. “I know where you have come from. Sadly, I cannot send you back.”
“You know? But how?”
“I have ways, but what I am focused on is you. How did you get here?”
“I don’t know. I just woke up here one day and had to survive in the wilderness for like three fucking months!” I said.
She had a look of contemplation, “I am sorry that you were taken away.”
“So, you can’t send me back?”
“Unfortunately, no.” She said.
“Fine” I huffed.
“But what I can do is make you fit better in this world.” She said.
“How?”
“I can turn you into a pony, if you’d like.”
I weighed the pros and cons. So, I really can’t make it home. There has to be another way! I can’t stay here for the rest of my life! This decision is really me just accepting being in this world isn’t it? Why does life hate me? I want to go back, but so far it isn’t going to happen. At least this way I fit in better and I don’t get any more scared or hateful stares. I decided to go for it.
“Sure, but can you make me a pegasus?” I asked.
“Yes, I can make you a pegasus.” She chuckled.
Her horn lit up and felt a sensation in my gut. It was slightly warm at first then grew into a fiery burn. I fell to the ground and blacked out.
***
I woke up in a bed with a figure looking over me. As my vision came into focus I saw an alicorn looking down on me. This wasn’t Celestia, this one looked completely different. She had a dark coat with a dark blue mane. The mane had a few white dots in it. It reminded me of the night sky.
“Who art thou?” She asked.
I was taken aback, who still speaks like this? My mind tried to translate the old English into modern times.
“Um, I’m Michael.” I said.
“Art thou alright?” She said.
“Yeah, where am I?” I asked.
“You are in thine bedroom. My sister hath asked me to watch over thee until her student hath returned.”
“You mean Twilight? Where did she go?”
“She has gone to see her parents at my sister’s request.” She said
Ugh, I have a massive headache. I held up my hoof to my head. HOOF?! I looked down I saw I was a pony. It really worked!
“Ahh!” I screamed.
“What is it?” the princess asked.
“Nothing, I just am not used to this body.”
“What do thou mean?” She said curiously.
“Celestia said she would turn me into a pegasus. I never thought it would actually work!” I said.
“Hmm, what were thee before?”
“A human.” I stated.
“Oh, this shall be so much fun.” She said with a devilish grin.
Now, my new body was blue, only slightly darker than Rainbow Dash’s. I had a black spiky mane with a yellow streak going through it. I looked around for my knife, but could not find it anywhere. In fact, I couldn’t find anything that I brought with me. Did they take all of my shit?
“What do you mean?” I asked
“Let’s teach you how to fly.”
***
I found myself at the highest balcony of the castle, staring over the railing and looking at the ground below.
I got up onto the railing, shaking out of fear. Luna smirked at me. Why did she want me to do this? Whatever, I just need to focus.
I was leaning over when I felt a push. I tumbled into open air, I looked back and saw Luna laughing. I grasped for something to hang to.
Meanwhile in Celestia’s Chambers
“AHHH, SHHHHIII-“
“What was that?” Celestia said.
She shrugged it off and went back to her work.
Back to Michael
I felt a magic surround me just before I hit the ground. It released me and I fell the twenty
feet remaining. I landed spread eagle in the middle of a mud puddle.
“Fuck”
Luna stood next to me snickering at my pain.
“Fuck you”
“Sorry, I thought that your instincts would take over, but you clearly have no instincts.” She laughed.
I finally got up, covered in mud. I shook the mud off and covered Luna in it. Mud splattered all over her polished coat.
“Hey! Watch it!” Luna giggled.
“Oh sorry. I think you have a little something right there.” I gestured to her entire body.
She laughed and tackled me into the mud. We rolled around struggling for the upper hand. She overpowered me and slammed my face into the mud. I flipped her and covered the rest of her body in it.
We tired out quickly and just sat in the garden.
“We should get cleaned up” Luna said.
“Yeah, I don’t want this dirt to be stuck in my coat.” I laughed.
We walked inside and up the stairs of the palace. I tried to not leave hoof-prints behind, but it was hard when you’re completely covered in mud.
“Don’t worry about it, the cleaning-ponies will clean it up later.” Luna assured.
We continued down the pristine hallway leaving tracks everywhere. She turned and walked through one of the doors. I followed her in and I kid you not, the bathtub was huge! This thing could fit at least eight ponies with some room to spare.
Luna walked down the steps into the bubbling water. I just sat there with my mouth hanging open and staring at it.
“What? Are you afraid of the water?” Luna teased.
“Afraid? I grew up on the water!” I jumped in, splashing water everywhere.
We sat there with the water jets turned on. I scooted over to one and sighed. The jet really work my muscles. It felt so good to finally have my muscles rubbed out.
Luna looked over at me with curiosity.
“What?” I said to her.
“Well, you just seem so…different.” she said.
“How?”
“Well, you are completely comfortable around the Royal Sisters.”
“I am not trying to offend you, but I find rather annoying to have to be prim and proper all the time. Especially after falling from the tallest balcony.” I said
Luna laughed, “Sorry about that.”
“No, it’s okay. It was pretty fun, up until I hit the ground.”
We sat there awkwardly. Well, this has been an interesting day. Luna’s mane brushed up against my side. My heart skipped a beat, I shivered slightly at the touch.
“Is something wrong?” Luna asked.
“No, I am still getting used to this body.”
We exited the bath, dried off and walked out into the hallway.
“Let’s go check if Twilight is back.” she said.
“Alright” I turned and started walking.
“Um, Mike. Wrong way.” she snickered.
I turned around and followed Luna into the Throne room. We took so many turns that I lost my bearings halfway and stuck close to Luna. She was silent the entire way.
The guards opened to massive doors and Luna walked in. I followed with my head ducked in embarrassment. There was a council or something going on. All of these ponies gave me harsh looks. They looked at me like I just punched their kid or something. What is up with these hateful glares?
Luna walked up to Celestia and whispered something. I stood in front of the stairs to the throne. Celestia mumbled something back and looked at me with a smirk. She turned back to Luna and whispered more to her.
They finished about twenty seconds later. Those seconds felt like a lifetime. I stood in front of a whispering a crowd. Luna walked down and gestured for me to follow her. I was on her heel. She looked back at me and smiled.
We left the throne room and turned to the entrance to the castle. A group of guards surrounded us as we walked down the streets of Canterlot.
We stopped in front of a house that was against one of the side streets. Luna walked up to the door and knocked. A light purple mare opened the door.
“Ah, Mrs. Sparkle! How are you?” Luna said.
The lady stammered and quickly regained herself, “Hello princess. I am fine, but could I ask why are you here?”
Well, we came for Twilight. And you can just call me Luna.” Luna spoke gently.
“Ok, uh Luna. I’ll go get Twilight. She is just resting.” she said before walking off.
Luna turned to me, “That was Twilight’s mother if you haven’t figured that out already. I mean you are quite dense.”
“Hey! I figured it out before you said it!” I said.
Twilight came to the door.
“Hello Luna. Wow, I didn’t even know that this kind of magic existed,Princess Celestia really did change you!”
“Yeah, it’s pretty strange to be like this.”
“Hello Twilight. We, I mean, I would like you to stay one more night just for dinner with my sister and I. It’s the least we could do for having you come here.” Luna interrupted.
“I would love to stay, if that’s okay with you Michael.”
“I’d love to!”
Just then my stomach growled. I realized that I haven’t had anything to eat all day.
***
We all sat down at the table. It wasn’t the big dining hall table, this one was a smaller square table used for everyday meals. Twilight sat across from Celestia while Luna sat across from me. Everything was silent. There was a slightly awkward silence.
The kitchen came out with dinner. They opened the lid and served it. Celestia gave them a thankful nod.
I dug into my food, it was delicious. The girls all sat and politely picked at their food. They shook their heads with a grin as I nearly shoveled food in my mouth.
“So Twilight, how have your studies been?” Celestia asked, chuckling at me.
“Oh, they have been just great. Everything has been interesting since Mike came to Ponyville.” she replied.
“Oh that’s wonderful. You’ve always have lived an interesting life though.” Celestia said.
“Yes I have. You know princesses, Hearth’s Warming Eve is coming up. Do you have any plans? It would be terrific if you can come to Ponyville!” Twilight said cheerfully.
“I have plans in Phillydelphia. Sorry Twilight.”
Luna spoke up next. She stared directly at me when she said, “I would love to go Twilight!”
“Okay, that’s great Luna. Just send me a letter about your arrival and we can go see a play or something. I know Pinkie is throwing a party on Hearth’s Warming’s Eve.” Twilight said with a smile.
“Okay, I shall look at my schedule and make an opening to come.” Luna giggled.
Twilight and the Princesses did a little small talk while eating. I didn’t even try to talk. I was way too busy eating the delicious meal before me.
“Ah man, that was SO good!” I said.
“I’m glad you enjoyed it.” Celestia smirked.
“You know I did Princess.”
We went our separate ways. The princesses turned down the hallway and Twilight led me out of the castle.
“Pretty fun, right?” Twilight said
“Yeah, it was alright.” I said.
It was already 7:30 when Twilight led me to her house. She told me that she wanted to say goodbye to her parents. I was okay with this; I wanted to meet her parents anyways. I don’t know why though. Possibly because I want to know what kind of household she grew up in.
“Hi mom!” Twilight said cheerfully.
“Hi Twiley! And who is this?” Twilight’s mother said nodding at me.
“I’m Michael. Nice to meet you.” I said.
“Come in! Come in!” Twilight’s mother said.
We walked in and sat down in the living room. Twilight’s father sat on a couch reading. Well, I see where she got her fascination with books from. He stood up and gave Twilight a big hug.
“It’s so nice that you’re in Canterlot again!” he said.
“Yeah, I am so glad I got to see you this time! It has been a while.” Twilight replied.
Twilight and her parents talked for a while. I was getting bored, but I didn’t say anything. I tried to stay polite; I mean it was her parents, I can’t be rude. I sat next to Twilight and putting on a fake smile and answering any question that came to me.
It was just then that her dad looked at me.
“Hey Michael. Why don’t we go out for a walk.” He said in his gruff voice.
“Uh, sure. I can go for a walk. It’d be nice to stretch my legs.” I said, uncertainly.
Twilight’s dad showed me out the door. We started walking down the street away from the castle.
“Is anything going on between you and my daughter?” he said.
I almost shit myself. I always hate being questioned on this stuff.
“No, why do you ask?”
“Oh nothing, I just noticed the way she looks at you.”
Does she like me? Why would she? I’m nothing special. Seriously, why would she want to go out with a different species? I looked down. Oh yeah, I’m a pony now.
“Oh.” I said, too stunned to say anything.
“How did you two even meet?”
Damn it, it’s this story again. I feel like I have said this over a dozen times now!
I explained to Mr. Sparkle how Twilight came across me out in the wilderness and let me stay in her house. I told him exactly how it happened, but I only left out one thing. I didn’t tell him about me being human. I don’t know how he would’ve reacted, so I thought this way was better.
***
Back at the house:
“So, how long have you two been dating?” Mrs. Sparkle asked.
“What?! Mom! We are not dating!” Twilight blushed a deep red.
“Hmm, really? It’s just I see the way you look at each other.”
With that Twilight blushed even harder.
“Mom! How cou-!” Twilight was cut off.
“Twilight, dear, I know you. Just tell him or you have to face the chance of losing him.”
“Fine, I will tell him tomorrow, after we have had some rest.” Twilight had concluded.
***
Mike’s POV
I continued to the story all the way up to today, only tweaking it slightly.
“Wow, you live an interesting life, almost as interesting as my daughter’s.” Mr. Sparkle laughed.
“Yeah, it has been an interesting few months.” I said.
“You know what? I like you, you seem trustworthy.”
“Thank you, you’re not so bad yourself.” I joked.
“Why don’t we get some donuts?” he said.
Seriously, no more eating. That meal at the palace was huge! But I can’t just say no, we’re bonding!
“Sure” I said. My stomach is going to hate me.
We went into a donut shop and ordered. I only got one, I don’t even know if I will be able to finish it.
We sat down and ate. We talked and joked around. I knew we only had a little bit of time before we had to get back to the girls. I looked at the clock, it was 8:30.
I heard the door open and a bunch of big guys walked in talking and laughing. They were the Royal Guard, probably just getting off their shift. They still wore their golden armor and had their helmets in their hooves. I saw one that wore a slightly different uniform than the rest.
“Hey yo, Shining what do you want?” one pegasus guard asked.
Twilight’s dad perked up.
“Shining Armor?” Mr. Sparkle said loudly.
“Dad?” He said even before turning his head.
They ran at each other and hugged.
“So, who is this?” Shining asked.
“Oh, I’m Michael. I am friends with your sister.” I said
“You mean Twiley?” he said. Oh sweet another nickname!
“Yeah, I’m living with her right now in Ponyville.” I said.
He turned his head and squinted his eyes a little. Mr. Sparkle said something in his ear. Shining chuckled.
“You take care of her.” He said, in a more serious tone.
“Yeah, she is back at my house right now if you want to see her.” Mr. Sparkle said.
“Sorry dad, I have to get back to work. This is only my break, but tell her I said hi.” Shining said.
“Will do!”
They guards walked out and we started to head back.
Mr. Sparkle walked through the door with me following right behind him.
Mr. Sparkle walked through the door with me following right behind him. Mrs. Sparkle raised an eyebrow at me or her husband. I couldn’t tell which. What I did see was Mr. Sparkle winking at his wife. Twilight looked at me and smiled. She got up and hugged me. I have no idea why though.
“How was your walk boys?” Mrs. Sparkle said.
“It was great.” her husband said, smiling.
“I think it is time that we go. We have to catch the 9:30 train home.” Twilight said.
“Okay honey; don’t forget what I told you!” Twilight’s mother said. Twilight blushed.
“I won’t mom.”
Twilight’s dad patted me on the back as we headed out the door. “Take care of her.” He said low enough so that Twilight didn’t hear. I looked back and nodded. We said our goodbyes and went down to the train station. The train arrived perfectly on time and we got on.
“How was your adventure with Luna?” Twilight asked.
“How did you know?”
“Do you think I can’t see a pony jump off the tallest tower?” she laughed.
“Oh yeah, that little thing was…interesting.” I looked back to my sore back.
I looked into the dark out the train window. I saw a pair of green glowing eyes. I blinked and they were gone. I tried to shrug it off and go back to my thoughts. I dozed off into my dreams.
Ex Nihilos:
When Michael is going to be turned into a pony he decides almost instantly that he's okay with it and wants to do it. What? No conflict? No hope of returning home? What are the pros and cons that go through his head? Come on man, he's deciding to warp his body into something else! This isn't some small decision, what's the final straw that tells him that this is the right decision? More information, more detail, more conflict of the mind!
Personally I never go for the turned into pony option but if that is what Michael wants to do then that's what he does. BUT! You have to make it convincing, this is about as cookie-cutter as you can get for pony fan fiction so you need to make it impressive or suffer the down fall of most writers who stick to the bland.
As you have it now this feels like what I'd call a skeleton draft, a sequence of events without much addition to each. It goes by fast but you could have so much more to each event. Look over your writing. When there's dialogue, where the emotion and expression beyond he said, she said? There's no problem with back and forth (not bothering to stop to say said) but they aren't robots. Someone's gotta show emotion beyond just words.