grim awakening

by Grim Darkshine

Rating: teen
Tags: My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, Dark, Human, Main 6, Original Character, Queen Chrysalis, Adventure
Length: 2444

twilights helping grim darkshine with an important mission... save everyone from crysalis!

grim darkshine is a strong alicorn with lots of power but has to save equestria from crysalis again. with the help of twilight sparkle, who wants to help him because she is nice and wants too help to. can they win?

my first story, please give me feedback and helpful critisism: pls like, fave and follow.

Published 2013-01-19 18:00:01 UTC
Last updated 2013-01-19 18:00:01 UTC

grim beginings

“ow..my head..”
grim darkshine looks around to see he was alone in the everfree forest, compeltely alone in the dark thick barnches. he got up and heard an noise, quickly looking around but, only seeing rustling branches in the sun. he walked up to the branches “where am i?” he didnt have longer to answer before something knocked himto the gruond and knocked him down, knocking the air out of him “ow” he said before passin out
when he woke up again he saw a purple pony looking over him, smiling “hi” she said and blushes and grim qucikly jumped up and blshed as well “hi do you know where i am” he asked. “yeah we’re in the everfree forest. how did you get here?” twilight asked, blushing moe when grim smiled. “oh i don’t know i can’t remember anything. you seem nice can you find me out of here/” “yes” she said and they walked out of the efverfree forest and into ponyille and twilight introduced him tot he rest of ponyville
as they walked in the everfree forest, zecora saw twilight and grim and ran up to them and yelled “look out twilight its the evil one” but twilight ignoed zecoras crazy voodoo language and gazed into grims beautiful eyes and almost fianted five times.
“hi im pinkie pie” pinkie pie said while she bounced around gim darkness “hey you want to be my friend i have a lot of friends but you can be my super best friend!” and then she made a super special parade to grim while he was happy. rarity said he had good clothes and fluttershy said he was nice and rainbow dash said he was 20 percent cooler than celestia. he was happy to be in ponyville with his new girlfiend twilight and all the freinds he mad.
“i love you twilight and we shuld always be tugether” “ok” said twilight in a funny smile which made every pony laugh hard. celestia came and said “i want to talk with grim” in 10 seconds flat like rainbow dash
“okay tell me. can me and twilight be tugether” he questioned and asked.
“the bad queen crysalis is back and you are only pone tuff enough can you beet her and win please”
“ok but i have a secret”
“wat is it young pony” the wise pricess said softly but hardly.
“iregardles of my looks im not relly a pony”
both girls looked relly confuzed. “wat then” “ill tell you later, lets go beet crysalis”
so the ponys all went to the place (cantrlot) to fite the evil crysalis queen. oh no she came to ponyvileoh no she came to ponyvile BUT WHERE

when grim got too ponyvil he said in a loud voice “hey where is everypone” because all the dors were shut and so were hte windows and it was like goast town
“wow” said twilight “its like a ghost town! what happen?”
suddenly a bluepony crawled up the street and had a wizard purple hat on and twilight said “hey i know you you are trixie! why are you back here!” and trixie said “oh twilight please help me im sorry i was mean to you and all yourfriends but plesae can you forgive me now please please pleaes! she begged and twilite said “well what do you think grim” and grim looked at trixies eyes and said in a serious voice “trixie do you promise that you will be nice from now on?”
“yes yes!” trixie said beggingly and grim nodded his head .“okay” he said. “you can come with us.” but then trixie looked at grim weirdly like she was angry at said “oh thank you but your not going anywere.”

There was a gut-wrenching, teeth-grinding pop as Trixie’s body began to ripple and elongate, throwing off shimmering tendrils of verdant fire that whipped back and forth almost hungrily. The fur on her coat turned smooth and black, becoming dotted with gaping holes. Her hat was quickly reduced to ash, the few remaining wisps of purple fabric slowly drifting down in front of her eyes, eyes that were now alight with a sickening green glow. Just as her horn finished growing to its full, twisted length, she looked at the party, bared her fangs, and smiled.

“its me crysalis!
“haha i want to beat you later erlier so now im here with my armie” oh no grim was in trouble he beter defeet her “haha you forget that im powerful””hey girlfreind if i die or you dye or prncess dyes please no that i love you <3”
“dont worrie grim i love and tolereat you so dont worrie if you die ok”
“ok”
“you forget about me fools” the super evil crysalis changlin said in dark eyes and relly holy legs and hoofs
“no you”
grim kiled crysalis with powers he never imajined liek a boss from hes big horn
“my hero grim”

Author's Note

hi pls rate this good i want good revioos

grim darkshine 2: electric darkaloo or: return of the chaneglins part of the grim darkshine chronicles

it wsa a beaitful day in ponyvile. the sun was shining and there wasnt a cloud in the sky execpt for oen that was rite above the twilight sparkls’s libary that was rainbowdash’s cloud that she is sleeping on. but she was grim darkshine’s frind so he let her stay there because he was a nice poney and lovd and toelarted everypony.
“hey rainbowdash” he says as he walked out of the libarary door. “oh hey grim whats up?” the rainbow haired blue pegisus said, she flew down from the her cloud and landad next to grim. she landed fast next to him and made a big puff of dust coem up from the ground and grim said “hey watch where your landing rainbow crash! you can hit someone” and then rainbow crash was sad
“oh im sorry grim,” she says and was blinking really hard a lot. i didnt mean to hurt yuo i wasjust messign around” and a single tear rolld down her cheek, and then Grim felt sad because he had hurt rainbowcrash and he said “its ok rainbow you justneed to be more caerful.” and rainbowdash simled and said “ok i iwll”. And then rainbowdash leans in relly really close and says “hey grim”
“what” grim said. “i kno your in love with twilight but i really like you alot” the peagsus pony said softly and her face was really red like her hair (well part of her hair but you cant hvae someones face turn rainbow because that would be stupid xD)
“you like me alot” asked grim, and he bluhsed to but you can’t tell because his coat is red so it hidit. “yes i love you” said rainbowdash and then she leaned in really closer and she closed her eyes and they kiss. but what about twilight though grim but then SUDDENLY rainbodawsh pushed him away hard and he fell on the ground but he didnt get hurt but he was angry
“what the heck rainbowdash why did you do that” he said angrily and looked up at her irritated.
“because i am not rainbowdash” she said smiling evilly and began to glow with a green lite “i am cryslais queen of the changelings and i have retuerned for my REVENGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!”

Frozen. Grim was frozen. Blood cold in his veins like ice water. Limbs heavy on the ground, limp with shock and terror. Eyes locked on the spindly, glossy form before him, slowly and terribly growing up and up and up, morphing and twisting with a horrible crackling whine as smooth blue pelt gave way to hard black chitin. The rainbow mane was last to go, lengthening and shining with an insectlike iridescence as the last traces of its owner were shed.

crysalsis looked down at grim and she laughed evilly and said “haha grim darkshine you may have beaten me once but now am i strong since your love for rainbowdash and so today you will DIE!!!!”

tobe continue!!!!
DUN DUN DUUUUUN

grim darkness chronicles part 3 the return of grim darkshine or: crysalis strike back (episode 1)

grim darkness chronicles part 3 the return of grim darkshine or: crysalis strike back (episode 1)

“i love you rainbow dash” said grim to rainbow ash, “im so glad your not a changeling” “yeah me too” said raibow dash “hey lets go to sugarcube corner and kiss” he said and blushed since we was new at kissing but he had done some but not a lot so he didnt realy have all that much exporience like that one time in junur high where i
‘hey guys” said twilight when she trotted into sugarcube corner and caught rainbow dash and grim makin out behind the corner “mr and mrs cake do you know WHAT THE F*********** RAINBOW DASH AN GRIM ARE DOING!?!?!?!??!?!?” she yelled at mr and mrs cake, and they turned around and gasped or gapsed at twilight and grim on the flor and got really made
“GET OUT OF MY STORE!!!!!!!!” mr cake yelled and twilight started crying “mr cake we were just kissin” “I DONT CARE YOUVE RUINED MY STORE”
twilight and grim and rainbow dash walked out of sugarcube corner and rainbow dash yelled at them “grim i thought you lved me” “no” grim said “i don’t want to choose between you two you see...” the two ponies leaned in as looked in the wnd and the wind swayed his mane all cool looking “i am part of the prohecy thats why i couldn’t tell you why i was in the everfree forest” he said with tears in his eyes “im sorry but now ive been hiding a horrible secret from yu”
“what is it?” rainbow sparkle asing. “tears welled up in his eyes when he started speakin
“a long time ago i was a...brony” he said, cryin. “thats okay i like bronies!” twilight said but grim interrupted “but i got hit by a bus (chryalis was drivin the bus) and woke up here i have to come here to defeet crhysalis but ill di probaby”. “oh no” ainbow dash said

twist came walkin along “hi guyth” she said wile grim was telling his story “hey twist” grim said wile crying and talkin “how are you?”

“You could thay I’m-a thuper. A THUPER CHANGTHLING!” she roared, and her neck bent at a sickening angle, black bones erupting out of her neck. Her thick glasses cracked and dissolved into her eyes, which had become glowing green orbs of hatred, looking down upon the three ponies with the cruel, calculating glare of the insect queen. A jagged crown erupted out of her head, and the cutie mark that had been two candy canes morphed above her boiling skin; two black crosses replaced them, still candy-striped.

The thing that was not Twist placed her twisted hooves on the ground, and laughed.

“oh no!” the three yelled loudly at twist

to be continued! plz rate and coment!

grim darkness the grim darkness crocodiles part 2 the return of the grim part 2

grim killed chryalis and she started dyin when he hit her wit a supur magickal bolt that he lurned from twilight “take that you queen” he yelled. twilight and rainbow dish jined and helped beat up chrysalis while yellin at her “why didf you take over cheerilee?” they asked whil punching her in the face and cheeks really hard “she was our friend and she loved grim! she was his only love why did you take that away from him!?!?!?!?”
chrysalis died when they kicked her
“its finally over” grim said, “now the prophecy is done”
“what prophecy” rarity asked
“when i was born” grim said “princess cleestia came to earth and said that i would one day save equestria from chryalis but i would have to find true love but there was something she also said” “wha” said rar “she said that I would have to die and that would mean i wouldt be living and i couln’t love ponies”
“but what bout me” asked twilight
“grim blushed “celestia laso said that if i found tru true love id wouldnt have to die”
the alicorn remembered back to that day he was walkin down the street trying to forguet that he got sent to the princapls offic for his pony shirt and thrwew a desk at the teacher and got expelled when he was walkin down the street and didnt know where he was goin
“hey look!” a girl said that he liked and he moved his eyes to see will smith beatboxin about ponies and that made him really excited and his mom got scared because of his bad grades and he moved over to rap with will smith
“hey mr. smith” grim said (grim wuz his real name b4 he was a pony) and will smith similed “hey grim” will smith said and htis made grim real exicted since he knew grim’s name “hey” grim aid “””can i rap with you?”

“Sure you can rap with me, home dog!” Will Smith announced as he took off his blue baseball cap, “IN HELL!

Will Smith’s neat, short-cut hair immediately exploded into a sickening morass of gooey, purple fibers that spread all around his body. It corrupted his skin and degraded his bones. Liquified pieces of skin dripped off his skeleton as he recited the lyrics to Fresh Prince of Bel-Air backwards in a long-forgotten language. His head spun 360 degrees and what used to be his face split in two to reveal a pony-like snout riddled with holes and semi-transparent skin. Two wings erupted from his back, sending what flesh hadn’t yet rotted off in a wide area around him.

Will Smith, now Queen Chrysalis, put the baseball cap back on and folded her front legs before she spoke a single word. “Rare.”

“ahhhhh!” grim shouted and chrysalis got on a bus and ran him over with it

grim felt like he was falling in a tunnel of nothingness (since he was dead) and fell out of a tunnel into a forest where he hit himself on the head and got knocked out. he was out for for a few years before he woke up

“ow...my head”

THE END

ATUHORS NOSE
Capitalism has created the highest standard of living ever known on earth. The evidence is incontrovertible. The contrast between West and East Berlin is the latest demonstration, like a laboratory experiment for all to see. Yet those who are loudest in proclaiming their desire to eliminate poverty are loudest in denouncing capitalism. Man’s well-being is not their goal. - Sonic Sez