the reason i'm posting this is simple. I need help. I admit it okay? (you'll never hear that again so i hope you enjoyed it.) Help with what? well, dont worry a bout that right now. your job is merely to read the sections, tell me what you think, and (if you're interested in helping) drop me an email at "graygriffonknight@gmail.com" i'd like to warn you however, as previously mentioned, this story is currently 30,000 words long, and it's not even close to finished. just so you know what you're getting yourself into.
i will be posting the finished product when i feel it is finished, the reason i've posted this here, is to get a bit of help from proof readers.
FOR THOSE THAT DON'T CARE
There are two sections up to read, the first chapter, and the first action scene. feel free to make suggestions or ask questions.
NOTE: yes, the action scene is one from the story, not just some random clip i wrote.