Chapters Well here is my first chapter, I hope you all like it .Disclaimer: I do not own MLP FIM or its characters. I only own comet rider.
The Return to Darkness
[centerChapter 1
The Return of Discord
It all started as a normal day in Canterlot. The royal guards were patrolling as usual and the Princess of the day, Princess Celestia was sitting on her throne awaiting the next letter from her student Twilight Sparkle.
Celestia's POV
*I had really thought it was a slow day today. I hoped that my student would reply back soon. As I pondered a bit, I looked to see one of my guard approaching*
"Your majesty, I have grave news to report. Very grave indeed"
*Sensing the tone of voice he gave which gave off a bad sense to it, I would look at him and reply* "Yes? What is it? "
*He looked up with me with some fear* "Discord has returned"
*My eyes widened and I stood up quickly before walking towards him* "Send a message to my student and go alert Comet" *He nods then leaves me alone. How much has changed since the time of Nightmare Moon's return. I then thought how my dear nephews and niece came to be*
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No one's POV, 18 years ago
*It was a stormy night that day. The sealing of Nightmare Moon hadn't lasted the full thousand years. She had somehow returned from the moon and had tried wreaking havoc, but due to her early return her power was greatly reduced. She was captured and held in a cell. Six long months passed as many ponies treated her badly. Today would be different*
Unknown POV
*I had been patrolling the cell of nightmare moon. Her usual loudness was quiet today so I decided to pay a visit to her. As I walked inside I noticed she was lying down quite sad and lonely. I then decided to sit in front of her cell and look at her* "You have been very quiet lately Nightmare.*
*She raised her head, her alluring dark blue eyes gazing upon me* "I have nothing to be loud about guard. Why do you approach me?"
*At this I would smile gently and then reply with*I thought that maybe you'd like somepony to talk to. No one deserves to be all alone. Least of all you"
*Her face showed a puzzled expression as she then sat up slightly, tilting her head* "May I ask of your name guard?"
*I would smile gently at her and bow my head in respect* "My name is Spirit riser. And I am the captain of the royal guard"
Author's Note
Well I think that's enough for now. Don't worry those who want to see some clop, my next chapter will involve Spirit and Nightmare making comet and his siblings. It will also finish off this flashback. Till then, *holds out hoof* brohoof
Authors notes: hi again. Um I will try to make this chapter longer that the first chapter but no promises. And I noticed the link I put didn't work. Sorry about that. Clop in this chapter. I will give a warning before it happens though.
Disclaimer: I do not own MLP FIM or any characters here except my two own characters Spirit Riser and Comet
Chapter 2
The Birth of Honour
No Pov
*Two months has passed since Spirit Riser and Nightmare Moon met. Over time they slowly grew closer, Nightmare even asking Spirit to call her Luna. Deep inside Spirit knew he was falling in love with her. Today he would tell her how he feels. Walking to the cell he saw Celestia speaking with Nightmare; Nightmare had a light blush on her cheek as she told her sister something, but stopped talking once she noticed spirit was in the room*
Nightmare Moon's POV
*I would see my dear friend spirit enter the cell. I covered my face with one of my wings to hide the blush on my cheek, waiting for it to die down*
*My dear sister Celestia looked at me with the kind and gentle face she normally made when I was still Princess Luna*"I will leave you both alone dear sister. I hope you will think about what we spoke of" *as I nodded, she then left the room and left me alone with spirit*
"Hello to you again dear friend, how art thou today?" *My heart seemed to race as I saw his beautiful glowing sapphire eyes. How they glistened in the light and shone like the clear blue waters of the lakes of Equestria*
*With a smile he would say* "Well Luna, I have been promoted to the captain of the royal guard and I am making a big decision today*
*My eyes would light up and I smiled gently at him. He had dreamed to become the captain of the royal guard for so long now. And now his dream had come true, soon I blinked a bit and tilted my head* "And what is this big decision then dear friend?"
*He would hesitate before then saying*"I am going to tell the mare I love how I feel about her, and I really hope that she will feel the same as I do"
*I would smile gently at him before saying* "Tell me about this mare that has captured your heart my dear friend, perhaps the princess of the night may assist you"
*He would smile at me and then start describing said mare* "She is a beautiful, sweet, amazing and just….. she's just the most perfect mare around"
*I would giggle a bit at how describing he was at the description he made of the mare that had captured his heart* "Well perhaps you may reveal to me her name spirit"
*he would smile even more and then walk towards me, gently taking my hooves into his, my blush showing and my heart beating faster* "It is you Luna, you are the mare that I love"
*I gasp a bit and look into his eyes, my eyes filling with tears*"O-oh S-spirit…I love you too"
*At that he would press his lips against mine, his lips was soft against my lips, I would slowly return the kiss and wrap my hooves around him*
*Clop Alert*
No-ones POV
*The kiss that spirit gave Luna continued on for a few minutes, her eyes closed as she was kissing back, deepening the kiss. The kiss then developed into a passionate wrestle between tongues, the heat of the moment causing Luna to slowly get wet. She would slowly break the kiss and then say*
"S-spirit, I-I'm in heat…..I need you….please mate with me"
*Hearing the princess say that caused the new captain to blush with a deep crimson colour. Slowly nodding he would start trailing kisses down her neck, the princess shivering with pleasure. Closing her eyes, she would run her hoof down his body, stopping between his legs to stroke his sheath slowly, earning a moan from the captain.*
*The princess would then lie on her back, spreading her back legs to reveal her soaking wet slit. Gulping a bit, Spirit would lean down and take a slow long lick up Luna's pussy lips. Luna moaned out loudly and panted softly, stroking his mane softly* "T-that's it Spirit, treat y-your dear princess right."
*He would smile at her then spread the lips and shoving his tongue into her pussy, swirling it around which in turn causes Luna to arch her back and scream out in pleasure. Licking along her inner walls had guaranteed her to cum hard, her juices spraying on his face*
*He pulled off of her and smiled, licking his lips before laying on her, rubbing the tip of his stallion cock on her royal pussy. She shivered at the feeling of this and looked up at him with wanting eye*"P-please Spirit. Put it in"
*He nods and then starts slipping his cock into her, panting at the feeling of her tight velvety walls on his cock. He kept pushing inside until he stopped at her hymen*
"Are you ready Luna?"
"Y-yes Spirit…. Please take me"
*At that, Spirit would then thrust past her hymen, holding her close when she screams out in pain, some blood trickling down from her pussy. After some time, she would slowly adjust and push against him. Seeing she was ready, he would then start thrusting into her, her eyes closed as she moans softly. She felt unbelievable pleasure from feeling the stallion she loves inside her. For him he could not believe how she felt around his cock.*
*soon she asked for him to go faster which he did, his cock moving in and out of her at a greater pace, some precum already leaking out. He then proceeds to thrust into her deeper, moving further into her depths. The pleasure for both of them was utter bliss.*
*Soon spirit was pounding away at her pussy, her walls tightening on him. She knew she was close and soon told him*
"S-Spirit. I-I'm going to cum!"
"M-me too Luna. Lets cum together"
*Soon the two lovers met their climax, Luna letting her juices spray on his cock while Spirit starts cumming in her. Spraying his hot stallion cum into her pussy and impregnating her*
*End of clop*
*Spirit pants heavily as he laid on top of her, looking into her eyes. Smiling softly he would lick her cheek. Luna returning his smile and the lick*"I love you Spirit Riser"
*He strokes her mane and smiles back at her ever so softly*"And I love you Princess Luna
Present day
Unknown POV
*I sat in my room thinking to myself on how quiet it had been since Nightmare Moon had been defeated. I would then get up and walk to a mirror and looked at the pony that stared back at me. A pony with a coat of charcoal black, a spikey mane and a straight smooth tail with a glow like the sun, eyes of sapphire that shone like a flowing river. Finally a yellow cutie mark on the flank, shaped like the symbol of honour.*
*Soon I hear a knock at the door and walk over to it, opening it and seeing one of the royal guards there*"Yes? How may I help you?"
*The guard quickly bowed to me then spoke*"Prince Comet Rider, your aunt Celestia sends word…Discord the god of disharmony has been freed"
*I would sigh a bit then nod*"tell here that I will be there to see her soon"
*The guard would nod then salute, heading back to his duties as I close the door*
*I would walk over to the balcony of my room and sit out on it. It was guaranteed to be a long day.
Author's Note
(Ok sorry for the late upload but college and laziness weighed me down hehe. I will need to think up what I will do for the third chapter. Till then, peace out everypony.)
Honour is earned, not bought
Authors notes: well I’m back again. There won’t be any clop for a while. I am going to have comet around more often now Disclaimer: I do not own MLP FIM. All characters in this story are all official characters. I only own comet and a few others.
Chapter 3
Honour Is Earned, Not Bought
Comet’s POV
*It was getting dark outside, we would be facing discord tomorrow and I was a little worried. My mother had been easy, but discord is a god. There would soon be a knock at the door and I would tell the others on the outside to come in*
*Walking into the room were my brother and sister Star Shower and Emerald Shine. Star was a black Alicorn that looked a little like me, though she was a female and she had a long green mane with light blue highlights in it. Her eyes had a yellow glow to them and her cutie mark was a book due to her love of reading. Emerald Shine was a male Alicorn with a green coat, blue eyes like mine, a black mane that covered one eye and a cutie mark shaped like a glowing unicorn horn due to his fascination with magic and his skill in it, some called him the genius of the family*
Hey guys, what’s up? *I would smile warmly to them, aside from the mane six, Emerald and Star were the only ones I could trust with my innermost feelings and my thoughts*
*Emerald looked at me with a worried look and would say* Comet, is it true that Discord is back? It isn’t just an old mare’s tale?
*I would sigh and shake my head and would then say* I’m afraid not Em, Discord is really back and I don’t think he wants to chat
*I would chuckle a bit to lighten the mood*
*Star smiled at me gently and would giggle a bit* oh comet, your such a silly filly *even though you arnt a filly
*I would raise an eyebrow to that and shrugs* Well this will be easy I bet, I mean me, Twi and the others have the elements on our side *I would smile and think back to that day where me and Twi first met and how I got my cutie mark*
12 years ago
Young comet’s POV
Everypony, we have a new student here today, he is our princesses’ nephew, please welcome Prince Comet Rider *I would then walk into the room a bit shy, my tail covering my blank flank* um h-hello everypony
*Some of the students would laugh and insult me, calling me a blank flank. One however didn’t insult me, it was a violet unicorn filly with a dark violet mane with pink highlights. Like me she was a blank flank*
*The teacher would look over at her* Twilight Sparkle, would you please look after Comet while he is here? *Twilight would groan a bit and sigh, nodding*
*I would trot over to her and sit by her; she was reading a book on magic and wasn’t paying much attention to anyone in the class* um h-hello, T-twilight is it? *I would rub one of my hooves a bit*
*she would nod, not moving her head up to even look at me as she keeps reading, some of the other foals insulting her, calling her a bookworm. I would look at them and shake my head a bit*
3 Hours Later
Twilight’s POV
*Showing this new kid around sure was a bit boring, I wanted to just go to the library and read my books. As we reached a tree he would sit with me as i took out a book where I received a big surprise, he liked books like I did! Finally somepony that could relate to me in this place.*
What are your faviorite books then Comet? *I would smile a bit as I was starting to like this colt. He would look up at me and then say* Um w-well I love the Daring Do books and I love to read about magic
*I would smile wider, he was like me, we would discuss different types of magic and I was actually having some trouble countering some of the points he made. As we spoke, some bullys came over and stole my book putting it above me* Hey give that back!
*The bullys would laugh then look at Comet* Hey prince, don’t hang out with this loser, hang with us. *I would look down as I felt like I was going to lose the one possible friend I had here*
NO!
*That one simple word caused me to jolt my head up, Comet would stand in front of me and charge a spell up* I will never abandon Twilight, she has been so nice to me and I will never turn back on her. You are bad ponies and you shouldn’t do this to her, think of the honour you will lose if you bully a filly!
*I would tilt my head a bit, it would seem that Comet took honour very seriously as he would then shoot a small shock spell at the bullies when they went to attack him and me, taking the book and handing it to me he would keep shocking them, causing them to run off scared of him*
C-comet…why? *he would look at me, a gentle smile on his face as he replys with* Because your my friend Twilight *I would then gasp as I looked at his flank, there was a sword shaped cutie mark there!* Comet you have your cutie mark!
*He would then look around and see it* Oh sweet Aunt Celestia! Your right Twilight, this is so cool, I finally got my cutie mark! *he would then tackle me to the ground hugging me, giggling I would back*
Thanks for everything Twilight *I would smile at him, deciding to give him the privilege of using my nickname*
Please, just call me Twi
Present day
Comet’s POV
*That day always made me happy, but the time for reminiscing is over, its time to get ready* Emerald, Star go get somewhere safe, it’s time for me to kick some flank!
Author's Note
Ok the element of honour will appear in the next chapter, when I finish it, it will be the first episode of the FIM series seeya all soon
Ok here it is, I hope you all like it Disclaimer: I don’t own MLP FIM or any of its characters save my own made ones
The return to Darkness
Chapter 4
The Element of Honour
Present day
Canterlot
Comet’s POV
It was a terrible day indeed. Knowing I would need the mane six, I would spread my wings and take to the air. Using the speed I had my name sake from, I would fly faster. My speed was so great that I looked like an actual comet when I was flying. I just knew that the best place to start would be my best friend Twilight Sparkle. After some time I would reach the treehouse and knock the door. After a few minutes of waiting, Spike would open the door
Spike: “Oh hey there Comet, have you come to see Twilight?”
“Yes Spike it’s a matter of great importance that I see her and the girls.”
Spike: “Oh ok then”
Spike would go to get Twilight, and I would sit down. Discord presented a very large threat. I mean he was the freaking god of chaos, if that isn’t threatening then what was? I remembered the stories that my aunt told me of Discord when I was growing up. How she and my mother Princess Luna would fight him, using the elements of harmony to seal him in stone. I really hoped that we could stop him. Soon Twilight would then come to the door with Spike and looked at me with a worried expression
Twilight: “Comet? What’s wrong?”
“Twi, its-”
I would be cut off as chocolate rain began to start pouring down from cotton candy clouds. This was clearly Discord’s doing
Twilight would nod and tells Spike to watch the house as she gallops with me to the acres, where Applejack and the girls would be trying to stop them
AJ: “Whoa nelly, what in tarnation is going on here?”
Rainbow Dash: “How the heck should we know?!”
I would see Rainbow and Fluttershy move clouds out of the way, but they would just keep going back to the same position
Rarity: “My word! I am going to get my new dress dirty!”
Fluttershy: “Oh my, I hope the animals are ok”
Pinkie: “Weeeee! Chocolate rain!”
I would facehoof with Twi at Pinkie’s usual hyperness and run over, trying to help
Twilight: “I will use my fail-safe spell, it has to work!”
Twilight would use said spell but unbelievably but kinda obvious to me, it failed.
Twilight: “My failsafe spell….failed?”
“Girls, we need to get to canterlot now! Aunt Celestia will explain everything”
They all nod and walk to me, I would then use an extra powerful teleportation spell to teleport us to Canterlot, stumbling a bit when we arrive due to the strain it put on me.
Twilight: “You ok there Comet?”
She would put a hoof onto my shoulder to see if I was ok and I would give her a smile
“Yeah I’m fine Twi, just a little dizzy. Now let’s go”
Pretty soon we would reach Celestia, she would tell the others about Discord as I look at the stained glass windows while we walked to the elements of harmony’s resting place. The walls pictured various events, including one of the battle between my aunt, mother and the evil King Sombra, who had cursed my mother to become Nightmare Moon. At least that’s what I think could have happened.
Celestia: “The elements have been kept here, since you used them to defeat Nightmare Moon.”
“But Aunt Celestia, how did Discord get free?”
Celestia: “Because the seven elements of harmony were tied to me and Luna when we defeated Discord. The sealing spell held up, but now, that you and the girls have got the elements with you, they are no longer tied to me and your mother.”Friendship Is Magic
4 years ago
Canterlot
Comet’s POV
“I keep telling you Twi, that book will be the death of you”
She would giggle as she said this. I really didn’t understand her sometimes. We had been best friends for so long now. The book was about the story of the elements of harmony and Nightmare Moon who my aunt and father would never talk about. I had always wondered why they never did. Then Twilight and I would remember something. The 1000 year time limit was up….Nightmare Moon comes back tonight!
Me and Twi: “We need to get to the library!”
We would run to the library, rushing past two ponies asking us to go to the party somepony was having. As we got in, Twilight would call for Spike. He would say something about a gift but Twilight would cut him off, Looking at the hourglass I would catch the glimpse of a black alicorn with a long flowing starry mane and glowing blue eyes with slits. She wore dark blue armour on her and a dark blue helmet. As quickly as it appeared, it disappeared, followed by a quick flash of a black alicorn with dark blue armour but a darker yellow mane, darkness flowing around it as it had sharp teeth and glowing red eyes that were slitted. I must have been going crazy. I shook it off and would wait as spike sends a letter to aunt Celestia. Pretty soon we would get a letter back, Aunt Celestia was telling us to go to Ponyville and to make friends.
Twilight: “Well looks like we are heading to the town of Ponyville Comet.”
Twilight would laugh at that as I would head to the chariot awaiting us. As Twilight and Spike got in, the door closed and started taking us to Ponyville. We would soon arrive and was soon approached by a pink pony with big poofy mane and tail. Twilight would start saying hello, but the pony gasped and ran off.
“That was….different”
We would head over to the acres, soon coming across Applejack
Aj: “Well howdy there yall. Ah’m Applejack, what are yer names?”
AJ would then drag us to the barn. After meeting her family and having some food, we were off to find the next pony, one called Rainbow Dash.
“Well looks like they are doing a terrible job”
I would suddenly be crashed into by the blue Pegasus herself, Rainbow Dash. I wound up staring into her eyes, a blush on my face. Those few moments I felt my heart begin to race. What was this pony doing to me? My brain was telling me to kiss her or hug her but I knew better.
Rainbow Dash: “Oops, hehe sorry about that”
She would get off me; a blush developing on her face as well which I had to admit was kinda cute.
Twilight: “Are you rainbow Dash by any chance?”
I feel a blush develop but shake it off
“Um you’re in charge of weather am I right?”
Rainbow would do just that, but in the process, she puffed up Twilight’s mane, causing not only Rainbow to laugh when she landed, but also me and Spike as well.
Twilight: “Alright jokers, let’s go”
She would drag me and Spike away, leaving Rainbow Dash to her laughing fit. The next place we went to was a boutique, to see the pony in charge of decorating, Rarity.
Rarity: “No no no this simply won’t do at all”
She looks over at Twilight in shock, Spike having hearts in his eyes as he saw Rarity.
Twilight: “Um we will just get out of your hair”
After a montage of dresses and hairstyles, Twilight’s hair was back to normal
Rarity: “Now may I ask where you’re from?”
Twilight and I head out of the building with spike, looking for a pony called Fluttershy now. We would then soon come across a yellow Pegasus teaching bird how to sing
“Um hello there miss”
Fluttershy would jump and clench her wings tight before looking at us
“Hello, I’m Prince Comet Rider, whats your name?”
She would murmur something quietly, Twilight giving her name, Fluttershy mumbles again
“A little louder?”
At that, Fluttershy would make a squeaking noise
Spike: “Hey what did I miss?”
Spike: “Oh hey there”
Pretty soon, we reached mine and Twilight’s new house while Fluttershy was talking to Spike. We then hurried inside.
The lights in the house turns on and everypony would shout surprise, causing me and Twilight to jump. Pretty soon we were introduced to the pink pony, Pinkie Pie. She had gasped and ran away before, because she wanted to set up a party. After a mishap with the punch, Twilight and I headed to her room to think
Twilight: “This is bad Comet. We haven’t found any sign of the elements of harmony because those ponies stopped us with this party”
We both look up at the moon nervously, seeing the outline of a mare on it.
2 Hours Later
Ponyville Town Hall
I look around at all the ponies ready to see Princess Celestia. As the mayor prepares to introduce her I look at the moon and see the outline of the pony, disappear!
Mayor: “Now it is my absolute pleasure to introduce. Princess Celestia!”
The curtain opens but my aunt was not there. Soon some evil cackling was heard and up there would appear the very pony herself…
NIGHTMARE MOON!
Nightmare Moon’s POV
Oh indeed it was good to finally be back, after so long I have returned. As I looked through the audience before me, I saw a pony that I recognised all too well….. My dear son ,Prince Comet Rider. I could not see my daughter Star Shower or my other son Emerald Shine anywhere which I was slightly disappointed about, but no matter. Soon I will unleash the eternal night and the seed I planted in Comet.
Comet’s POV
So here she was, Nightmare Moon herself. I had a bad feeling as she addressed everypony, but then she would say something that shocked me.
Nightmare moon; “Now then, where is my dear son, Comet Rider?”
I couldn’t believe it. I was the Son of Nightmare Moon?! But that’s impossible, it just can’t be true!
“You lie! You’re not my mother. My mother is Princess Luna!
Nightmare Moon: “Back away you foals!”
She would disappear into a dark starry mist and fly away. I would then look at Twilight
“Twi we need to find those elements now!”
She would nod and head to the house with me running with her. The other five ponies following us.
2 Hours Later
After finding the book, we would head to the Everfree forest. Overcoming many obstacles, we would arrive at the castle my mother and aunt once inhabited. The seven elements on a statue. As we get them down, the mist returns and steals them, but Twilight and I jump into the mist, winding up in a tower with nightmare moon with the elements around her hooves. I would distract Nightmare moon as Twilight tries to activate the elements, but to no avail. Nightmare smashes them and it would seem there would be no hope….. then Twilight and I hear the others and a twinkle appears in her eye.
Twilight: “This isn’t over, because those weren’t the elements. Because I know for a fact that the elements are right here!”
The other five and I gather by Twilight
Twilight: “Applejack, who’s truthful words saved me from the avalanche represents the element of…Honesty. Fluttershy, who tamed a wild Manticore, using her kindness and her affiliation with animals, represents the element of…Kindness. Rarity, who’s willingness to give up her tail to help a sad sea serpent represents the element of…Generosity. Pinkie Pie, whose fun nature drived away the scary trees represents the element of….Laughter. Rainbow Dash, who’s unending loyalty to her friends represents the element of…Loyalty. Comet Rider, who’s sense of honour helped end the curse of a ghost knight represents the element of…Honour.”
Nightmare Moon: “You only have six elements, the spark didn’t work!”
I would step forward and smirk as I look at her.
“Well mother, Twilight finally gained the spark when she realised how much she really cares for the girls and I. Which Represents the element of….. Magic!”
The elements would all go on us, our necklaces matching our cutie marks. My own crystal was black in colour. We would all float into the air and shoot a rainbow beam at Nightmare Moon. As she screams the rest of us go unconscious. Waking up a little bit later everypony was ok and rarity even got her tail back. Celestia would soon appear and smile at us”
Celestia: “You have done well my little ponies. Equestria is safe and Luna is restored”
I would look at where Nightmare Moon was and sees my mother in a sort of filly form. I would run over and hug her
“Mother! Your back to normal!”
She hugs me back as I would look at the remaining pieces of Nightmare Moon’s armor. I would touch it as Nightmare Moon gives me one last message.
Nightmare Moon: “You may have stopped me my son, but you haven’t changed your fate….ARMAGEDDON WILL RISE!!”
I would shake it off and smile as my aunt and mother reunite, but that message will ring in my head for a while.
Present Day
That day sure did bring back memories that’s for sure. I would watch as my aunt brings out the elements in a box. But when it was opened something was very very wrong….
Author's Note
Well that’s it for the flashback section and this is the longest chapter ive ever written. Rate and review and watch out for Chapter 5, Search for the elements
Author’s notes: None hehe
The Return to Darkness Chapter 6 A Terrible Loss
Canterlot Night Emerald Shine’s POV
As I looked over at Comet, I felt only contempt for him. He had to have all the glory, the honour of being one of the elements of harmony. I trained for years and he gained an element for no reason! Well he really messed up today didn’t he? As I looked around I saw many royal guards along with my cousin Cadance with my Aunt Celestia and my mother Luna. Rain was pouring down from the skies and I would think back to earlier on Comet’s biggest failure. How he failed him and cost Equestria a great pony.
Edge of Ponyville 9 Hours Ago Comet’s POV
I seriously did not know what to do. The girls were corrupted save me and Twi and they were all acting so strange. Rarity was attached to a large rock, calling it a large diamond, Fluttershy was acting really mean to everypony, Applejack seemed to be lying, Pinkie Pie was acting all glum and Rainbow betrayed us. It’s like they have been…discorded or something. We had to find some way of putting them back to normal. Then my mind trailed back to what Discord said earlier before he left.
: Flashback:
Discord was laughing and changing everything. As I looked at him and growled a bit
“Where the hell are the elements?!”
Discord: “Oh poor pathetic ponies, you are so foolish, your elements were already close at hoof, closer than you imagine Twilight Sparkle”
At that he would disappear, leaving us alone with our thoughts
: Flashback Ends:
I would think long and hard, racking my brain for any clue at all that could help us discern what Discord was talking about. Then it hit me, of course! The elements had to be at the golden oaks library, Twilight’s home!
“Twi, we need to get to your house right now!”
Twilight: “Huh? But why Comet?”
‘Let’s just go, trust me!”
At that we would run to the library, followed by the girls, bickering behind us. As we reach the house I would use my restored horn to try and detect the elements, looking at the bookcase I would pull out a book. Opening it the elements were in it. The book was hollowed out to hold the elements.
“I found them! Girls I-”
As I turned around, I would see the girls fighting with each other, their coats getting greyer.
“STOP IT! STOP RIGHT NOW!”
Some of them glared at me but I shake my head as I look at Twi
“Twilight, try using a memory spell to remind them of our friendship”
She would nod and do so, the girls coats getting their colour back with Rarity muttering never speaking of this ever again. It seemed all ok, but Rainbow wasn’t around. Catching her and using the memory spell on her was going to be tough. We would come up with a plan where Fluttershy and I would use a net to catch her since we were the only ones who could fly. Twi and the others would use the balloon to fly up to her and use the spell…..I just hope that we can save Rainbow, over the course of knowing her I had developed a crush on her but I could never tell her. After some searching, we found her on a cloud. Fluttershy and I would sneak up on her, chucking the net over her. Dash would try to fly off but Fluttershy and I managed to pull against her, keeping her in place. Soon Twilight and the others reached us and used the memory spell on Rainbow. We were finally ready to defeat Discord.
Meanwhile Canterlot Spirit Riser’s POV
I have a very bad feeling something is going to happen, while I was laying with Luna in our bed I would sigh a bit, sitting up and stretching. Since Luna came back, she turned me into an alicorn to make our pairing legitimate. Looking at her sleeping form made me smile a little as I would lean down and kiss her head softly stroking her mane. She would stir a bit but remain asleep, smiling a little. I would get up and put on my armour, walking outside to meet with my apprentice Shining Armour. I had planned to make him my successor of being the Captain of the royal guard. He was a little headstrong and a bit of a knucklehead but he had showed many times he is worthy of becoming a captain.
Shining: “Morning Sir, how is Princess Luna?”
“She is well my friend. But now is the time for me to go to Ponyville, I need to see my son Comet Rider.”
Shining would nod and trot off, preparing a chariot. About an hour later I arrived at Ponyville, soon meeting up with Comet and the Mane Six as they called themselves.
Comet: “Huh? What are you doing here dad?”
“I’m here to check on things. You found the elements I see. Well…go save Equestria son”
Comet: “Got it dad!”
“And Comet?”
Comet: “Hmmm? What is it dad?”
“I just want you to know, I am so proud of you. You are a good colt and a hero”
He would smile at me and walk off, leaving me to my thoughts. I’m glad he grew up to be a good Stallion and I couldn’t be any prouder.
Comet’s POV
Alright, it’s finally time. I’ve been looking forward to kicking Discord’s ass. Smiling as I felt the element of honour rattling as I walked, I would look at the smug looking grin of Discord as he looked at us
Discord: “So you found them, big deal. Your bond of friendship is gone you pathetic foals. Try your best shot go ahead”
He would materialise a target on his chest. At that I shoot a black ray out of my element that hits the throne he was sitting on. At that his grin would disappear and he grabs me with his lion paw.
Discord: “You know, I have not ever met anyone I have hated as much as you Rider! I will teach you a lesson!”
He would throw me at a tree and then fire a sort of laser at me. Closing my eyes I heard the laser impact but….it didn’t hit me. Opening my eyes I would gasp as I see my father on the ground, blood pouring from the wound in his chest.
“DAD!!”
I would run to him and kneel by him, shaking my head. I could not let him die, I just couldn’t!
Spirit: “C-comet….i-I’m sorry. I j-just couldn’t let you die.”
Tears poured down my cheeks as he puts his hoof on my shoulder, coughing and breathing weakly.
Spirit: “I-I’m proud of you son, t-take care of your mother and y-your sister a-and brother. Tell t-them that…I l-love you all”
I would nod slowly, tears still coming down from my eyes. He would give me one last smile before the light leaves his eyes, his eyes closing slowly before his arm goes limp. I would shake with anger before looking at Discord
“You monster….i will make you pay….. you, YOU BUCKING BASTARD!!! ….GIRLS NOW!”
We all float up into the air and blast Discord with the rainbow beam, sealing him away in stone. We would land and look around, ponies cheering us but they soon silenced when I walked to my father’s corpse, putting it on my back, heading to Canterlot as it began to rain.
Present time Emerald Shine’s POV
Of course, when Comet arrived with dad’s body we were devastated; mom and Star broke down into tears as Aunt Celestia looked on sadly. Many in Canterlot and Ponyville came to mourn the fallen hero. As I watched, many would say respectable words. But now it’s time….time for my revenge. Its time….for my rise!
The Return to Darkness Chapter 7 Darkscar Rising
Canterlot Royal Gardens 5 Days after the funeral of Spirit Riser Comet’s POV
I was a little worried today, I hadn’t seen Emerald Shine in a while, not since dads death. It hit me pretty hard, I failed to protect him and now he’s dead. As I was walking through the gardens I heard a twig snap and a cloaked pony would attack me. Jumping back I would get on the defense. A while back, Rainbow taught me some Kung Fu in case I ever came into danger. As he tried blasting me with a spell I would dodge and fire at him with a fire spell, watching as he ripped off the hood, revealing Emerald Shine.
“Huh? What the hell? Why are you attacking me Emerald?”
Emerald: “Always you, it has always been you Comet. Becoming the element of honour, being dads favourite. I am sick of it!”
I would growl a bit, he had clearly gone insane. This isn’t the caring brother I remember.
“Why are you attacking me? I thought you wouldn’t hurt your siblings.”
Emerald: “Shut up, just shut up!”
He would charge up a lightning spell, intent on killing me. I would shoot back with a lighting spell, our spells clashing, making it into a struggle. As I gained the upper hoof, he gets blasted back. I would watch as he starts shaking
Emerald: “No more…..NO MORE BEING SECOND BEST, I WILL SLAUGHTER YOU!”
I gasped as I saw him changing, his hatred was changing him. His eyes changing from the ocean blue I knew into a fiery red, eyes turning slitted. His feathery wings turned into grotesque bat wings and his mane turning into a brush like mane.
“Oh my….Emerald, what has happened to you?”
Emerald: “I don’t wish to be called Emerald Shine any longer. Now….. I am Darkscar!”
I would get ready to fight again but gasps as he would gallop at unnatural speeds. I couldn’t keep up with his movements as he then attacked me, employing hit and run tactics. Every hit felt like a mountain hitting me. Every time I tried to attack he would merely zoom around and hit me. He would then knock me into a tree, the impact breaking my wings.
Darkscar: “Any last words before I destroy you Comet?”
“Why…why did you do this brother?”
He would laugh and press a hoof on me forcing me down, his eyes glowing with his hatred
Darkscar: “Why? Well I will tell you. All my life I have wanted to be one of the elements of harmony. I trained extensively and hard to achieve that wish. You stole that from me when you became the element of honour. Since that day I have hated every ounce of your being till I just wanted you to suffer and die. You are a failure Comet, for if it wasn’t for you, father would still be alive. It is your fault that he is dead”
“N-no, it’s not my fault”
He would laugh a sort of insane laugh and grin at me, his teeth shimmering before he presses me harder into the ground
Darkscar: “You should have defended yourself, father saw you couldn’t escape in time and foolishly sacrificed himself.
You are a fool Comet; you should never have been born!”
I would close my eyes and sigh as I look up at him
“Then why don’t you kill me…..I’ve lost you and I’ve lost dad…..but at least mom, Aunt Celestia and Star will be safe”
Darkscar: “Oh no dear comet…. They are next! They too had never acknowledged me. After I kill you, I will kill them and any who cross in my path. I will be the king of Equestria!”
So much had happened…my father, murdered by Discord, my own brother trying to kill me and turning into Darkscar . And now he wanted to kill everypony. Even Rainbow….. At that moment I finally realised something. Despite the bond I have with everypony else, Rainbow had always tried to be nice to me. I knew right then and there. I am in love with Rainbow Dash.
Darkscar: “And maybe I will make that pathetic mare rainbow dash my own personal slave, my pathetic little slut to do with as I please!”
I would gasp and look at him with pure hate in my eyes.
“Don’t you dare touch Rainbow you bastard!”
He would merely laugh and smash me through a tree, throwing then catching me and throwing me to the balcony outside of the castle. He would walk toward me and press his hoof against my neck, his horn glowing with a lightning spell
Darkscar: “You cannot do anything you pathetic little fool Comet. You will die here by my hoof. So now….it’s time to end this little game Prince Comet Rider. It’s your fall AND MY RISE!”
There was no use, try as I might I could not escape from his grip. It appears this is it, the end of the road. I only wish I could have told Rainbow how I really feel about her. I would wait for Darkscar to kill me, but suddenly something awakened inside me. I would close my eyes and start shaking; I felt my heart race and my vision fading. A voice inside me would laugh darkly and I would feel a searing pain. I finally discerned the meaning of Nightmare Moon’s last message.
: Flashback:
Nightmare Moon’s image flashed into my mind after I touched the armour, looking at me with pure hate.
Nightmare Moon: “You may have stopped me my son, but you haven’t changed your fate….ARMAGEDDON WILL RISE!!”
:Flashback ends:
Then it was really happening, Armageddon was rising no…..I am Armageddon. Darkscar would let me go and look at me with shock. Looking at my hoof I saw darkness rising from it. It seems I really am the son of Nightmare Moon. Mom, Star, Twi……and Rainbow. I’m sorry. And then……everything went black.
Armageddon, the Spirit of Darkness
The Return to Darkness
Chapter 8
Armageddon, the Spirit of Darkness
Canterlot
Darkscar’s POV
I could not believe what I was seeing, the pathetic fool comet was changing, I would see as he grew larger. His normal sapphire eyes would fade to black before turning a crimson colour with the pupils turning slitted. He would scream out, the scream turning into a roar as his teeth turned jagged and sharp. His golden mane and tail seemed to darken and then dark blue armour appeared on him. As he pants, I see darkness emanating from him before looks at me with a look of pure hate and fury.
“C-Comet? What the hell happened to you?”
He would scoff and smirk as he stands up properly
???: “Oh Comet? Well he isn’t here…not anymore. I am not Comet”
I would gulp and look at him; I was actually scared by this point.
“Then who the hell are you?”
Armageddon would then fly into the air with his powerful wings, starting to charge up a spell. His power was immense! I had to get out of here!
Armageddon’s POV
Just as I was about to destroy this pathetic pony, he would teleport away in a green flash. I would roll my eyes before setting my sites on Ponyville first. I would start flying there at top speed. They would be the first to feel my wrath. At last I was finally free!
Rainbow Dash’s POV
It would be raining that day; something had upset the clouds, something bad. So help me if Derpy had messed up those clouds again I would show no mercy. I was left thinking about Comet, and how much he really meant to me. Over the two years we knew each other we grew closer, heck I would even think of him as a brother. But my mind cast back to the day we first met, those sapphire eyes of his were so beautiful and the way he blushed was cute too. I would then think back to the night of the gala, I was feeling sad because I didn’t get to talk to the Wonderbolts, Comet found me outside, moping and he talked with me. He would hug me, the hug wasn’t like one of friends, and it was gentle and comforting. It was then that I finally realised something….
I was falling in love with him.
Being near him the following days was making me act like Fluttershy, I was so shy when I tried talking to him. I finally put it together and I made a vow that I would tell him one day how I feel. I would sigh as I remembered the loss of his father, no matter what I will stay with him. I would suddenly be thrusted out of my memories when I heard an explosion followed by screaming. Looking down from the cloud I was laying on, I gasped as I saw Ponyville was in flames. I would dive from the cloud and zoom down to the town to see what was going on. What I saw would haunt me for many years; ponies were all on the floor, dead. Those poor families, I would look away and hear some sniffling. Looking around I would see Scootaloo and run over, she was cuddling with Applebloom and Sweetie Belle.
“Girls, what happened here?”
The look they had on their faces was pure terror. They would suddenly cling to me, crying into my coat
Scootaloo: “ I-it was C-Comet….. H-he turned into a monster”
I couldn’t believe what I was hearing. Comet did this? This couldn’t have been done willingly; Comet loves his friends and wouldn’t hurt innocent ponies. Yet…..I had to go see this for myself. Dropping the girls off at the acres I would go to find the girls. I would find them alright; I was walking in an alley when I saw Twilight thrown across the street. Running to her I would check up on her before looking over at where she had been thrown from. And there I saw it. It was Comet, but yet he wasn’t Comet. Fluttershy was cowering nearby as AJ and Rarity were shooting rays from their elements at him but to no avail, he would dodge them and turn into a black mist with those red eyes in them. Twilight would hand me my element as she gets back up, firing her element ray at Comet. I would then follow suit, firing my own element ray at him. As the fires burned in Ponyville I would hope to Celestia that Twilight would come up with a plan.
Twilight: “Girls! We have only one chance at this. The seventh element won’t work without Comet. The Rainbow beam may work, but…..it may not heal Comet fully like it did Princess Luna. The darkness will remain in him”
I would close my eyes and sigh. It hurt me to see Comet like this, we just had to save him and save the rest of Ponyville, no matter the cost.
Armageddon: “You pathetic foals! I am eternal! You shall never defeat me! You will never see your precious Comet Rider ever again!”
Twilight: “We don’t think so Armageddon. We are getting our friend back! Girls now!”
We would all float into the air the elements glowing brightly as the rainbow beam comes out, zooming around and hitting Armageddon. He would roar out in pain and glow with a bright light. As we land, the light fades and an unconscious Comet would be laying there with bruises on his body. I would call for a doctor, but the ponies that would gather would just stand there, looking upon Comet with disgust. The girls and I would pick him up and head to the hospital to wait for a carriage to take us to Canterlot so that he could be treated there.
Canterlot Royal Hospital
2 Hours Later
Comet’s POV
I would wake up with a start, gasping for air. I actually saw it, I actually saw Armageddon use my body to kill all of those ponies. Putting my head in my hooves I would start sobbing, the emotion that filled me was overwhelming. My father was dead, my brother disappeared and now I would be treated as a bigger monster than even Nightmare Moon and Discord were. I was such a fool, I should have controlled my emotions and now that I didn’t, I caused all those deaths…..for the first time in many a year……I felt so alone, the voice of Armageddon in my head, laughing evilly, proving he was still there, taunting me.
Author's Note
And that was the end of the discord arc. I will do a flash forward next chapter to start the arc which will soon lead to the romance and Alicorn Twilight.
Author’s notes: As you’ve seen everypony, I’ve changed from using the stars to using italics for actions and names. So anyway, back to the story.
The Return to Darkness Chapter 5 Search for the Elements
Comet’s POV Canterlot
What the hell happened to the elements? Only aunt Celestia can access this vault as she was saying so right now. I mean Discord couldn’t have gotten in, it’s just impossible. At that I would hear the sound of laughter, it was rather evil and I don’t mean that really cliché one you always hear. Looking up at the mural of discord in the stain glass windows, I would gasp as I saw it. It was moving!
Discord: “Now I wonder where those darn elements have gone? They just love disappearing don’t they?”
I would growl a bit under my breath. So this was Discord? I certainly didn’t think much of him.
“Where the hell did you put the elements monster?”
Discord: “Oh dear prince please, you wound me. Go to the edge of Ponyville and search there, I will meet you all there soon enough”
And with that he was gone; Celestia would approach the rest of us, looking at us with a grim look.
Celestia: “Dearest nephew and dear ponies, you must find the elements if we are to have any chance of defeating Discord”
“And just when i was looking forward to it being a quiet day, oh well we will just have to suck it up and get it over with girls.
The others would all cheer as we run off, heading into a chariot to fly to our destination.
Edge of Ponyville 2 Hours Later
It sure took a while getting here, as we looked around, we would see that Discord would have changed lots of areas by now. Looking up at the sky I saw storm clouds and a flash of lighting finally revealed Discord to us.
“Wow and I thought Blueblood looked dumb, this guy takes the cake!”
The girls would laugh at this while Discord glares at me.
Discord: “I propose a game; you will have to find the elements. If you do, you can use them on me and put me into stone.
But if you fail or break any of the rules I will set, then i will continue doing what I am doing and create more splendid chaos”
“Let me guess, we play hopscotch”
The girls laugh at this and discord growls a bit in anger
Discord: “You must head to the center of the maze, there you will find the elements”
Rainbow: “Easy, I’ll just fly over the hedges to the center”
As Rainbow tries to fly over, Discord would take away her wings. I would quickly catch her on my back
“Hmm simple enough”
Discord: “If any of you break these rules, I win”
“Whatever Dissy, let’s go girls”
They nod and follow me; I would chuckle as I heard Discord saying something about hating me. But as we walk inside, we
get separated by the hedge walls, Discord laughing.
I would sigh a bit and start walking ahead, hoping that the girls would be ok.
Meanwhile Applejack’s POV
Now ah know that ah have been in stranger situations than this but ah have to say that this is really weird. Ah would find myself near a lake with apple trees nearby, reminding me that the acres were at risk. Then something strange happened, the apples would come alive and circle around with Discord’s face on them.
Discord: “Well hello Applejack, do you want to see the future? All you have to do is look into the lake.”
Ah would do just that, looking it there ah would gasp as what ah saw was terrible. The seven of us splitting up, no longer being friends anymore. Ah couldn’t take it, it just can’t be true, it just can’t!
Meanwhile Pinkie’s POV
Weee this is going to be so much fun! I would bounce along until I found a clearing, with a party! Woohoo I can’t belive it. I would giggle as I look around, some ballons floating around with Discord’s face on them.
Discord: “Are you having fun Pinkie Pie? This party is all for you”
“Aww thanks I love it”
Discord: “You mean like how your friends don’t love you? Like how they laugh at you?”
“Huh? They don’t laugh at me silly”
Discord: “Oh yes they do, they hate you and laugh at you because of your childish ways”
At that I would see balloons with all my friends faces on them, all laughing at me, I can’t stand this, I just can’t please stop laughing at me!
Meanwhile Rainbow’s POV
Ok time to get down to business. I don’t need to use my wings to get around, good ol fashioned marepower will handle this! I would soon reach a clearing with Discord lying on a hammock made of clouds.
Discord: “Oh here is the wingless chicken now. You know without those wings, you can’t impress them right?”
“Impress who? There isn’t anypony to impress right now”
Discord: “Why the wonderbolts of course, as well as that certain stallion that you have a crush on”
At that I would blush and glare at him
“I-I don’t know what you’re on about Discord.”
Discord: “I know you want your wings again rainbow, so just take them”
At that he would open up a box, revealing my wings. They were right there just waiting for me to take them. Should I or shouldn’t I take them?
Meanwhile Fluttershy’s POV
I really hope that the girls and Comet are ok. Soon I reach a clearing with lots of trees in it, butterflies flying around with Discord’s face on them
Discord: “Hello Fluttershy, why are you bothering to help your friends. They laugh at you and call you clumsy”
“Oh I know I am clumsy and I don’t mind that they laugh at me”
Discord: “Um well they think that you are a real pushover”
“Well I am a pushover, so that’s ok”
Discord: “Well…um….. ah screw this”
He would put his paw on my head and do something to me
Meanwhile Rarity’s POV
My word, this place could use some decorating indeed. Its absolutely filthy! As I walked through the maze, I would suddenly smack into a rock with three diamonds in it. Discord would appear and laugh a bit
Discord: “Nice work, you found the most beautiful gem in all of equestrian. Do you love it?”
I would gasp and drool a bit, it was absolutely beautiful
“I love it!”
Meanwhile Comet’s POV
Pretty soon I had reached the centre and my mom was there with her back to me
Luna: “You have failed us Comet, Discord took over while you were here”
“N-no, it can’t be, it just can’t”
Luna: “You have failed me Comet”
I would seem to lower my head, sounding like I was sobbing
Luna: “Crying won’t change anything”
I would then lift up my head, laughing uncontrollably, falling onto the ground
Luna: “What? Why are you laughing!?”
“Hoo boy, do you really think that will work on me Discord?
Luna would growl and turn to me, being my mom but with Discord’s face
“Holy! You look terrible, I never thought you’d sink so low to impersonate my mom bwahahahaha!”
Discord: “Curse you Rider! But you’re too late”
Twi: “Comet!”
Twilight would appear with the others, but they all looked paler. But Rainbow wasn’t with them, I hope she’s ok. As we looked at Discord I would glare at him
“Ok we got here, now where are the elements!?”
Discord: “Oh I’m afraid you won’t get them. You have lost”
He would point to the sky, Rainbow was flying!
Discord: “And now I shall bring eternal chaos to this land!”
He would start laughing and break the maze apart, the land around us changing to a chaotic version of itself. This was bad, the girls were corrupted, leaving me and Twi the only ones that were uncorrupted. Could this be the end?
Author's Note
Ok that’s it for now, I have finished chapter 8 but I wont post that till I finish the next two. Till then, peace out.
