I'm gonna rewrite the First chapter. Not cause Cloudy didn't do a good job when he wrote, It's just easier for me.
"Aw man....Where am I?" Said this mysterious pony. He was a Dark Red(think Big Mac) Pony with a metal front right leg and a metal back left leg with this for a cutie mark.
He was also a red jacket with his cutie mark on the back.
"It worked...I think. But still what happened?" He remembered drawing the transmutation circle after the Fight with Father. He remembered talking to the Truth. He also remembered offering his Alchemy Wall(don't remember what it's called). He wanted to try out his alchemy but figured it would be better to figure out where he was.
"I feel different...Don't quite know how...but I feel different." He said looking around. He noticed that trees were taller than before and the ground was closer than before. Also He noticed he was on all fours.
"Ok what kind of sick joke is this? Am I a horse? This can't be happening." Ed said slowly freaking out.
Meanwhile in Canterlot...
"Uh...Sis did you feel that?" Luna Asked after feeling a power surge..."I felt a disturbance over by PonyVille."
"I felt it too Lulu...But the source feels like Twilight's Except her's is still at the library. This power doesn't feel bad." Said Celestia.
"Well...I guess this can be handled later then....Sorry for waking you up Tia." Luna said apologetically.
Celestia yawned back."Don't Lulu we'll check on it when we're both well rested. Until then you can handle your nightly affairs and I'll explore your realm of control."
"Ok Sis. Night Tia."
One sister fell asleep while the other left to handle nightly affairs. Like checking that disturbance. She didn't say Luna couldn't go check it herself.
Back by ponyville....
Ed was freaking out...well he was.
Right now he had successfully gotten his horn stuck in a tree.
"GRRRRR....EUUGGH.....GRRRAAAWWW COME ON!" Ed wasn't happy that an appendage he didn't even know he had was stuck in a tree.
Ed struggled for about five more minutes until he took a break and relaxed. It was then his horn came out.
"That figures..." Ed grumbled under his breath. This is when he checked himself out. Even his auto mail was changed. It had to because he knew the hand and foot weren't hooves Before he left. He finally checked his surroundings notice he was in a forest, by a spring with some trees perfect for making an shelter.
"Let's see if I still got it!" Ed asked as he stood on his hind hooves. He clapped his front hooves together and then fell down back to all fours toward a couple of trees close together. The blue flash from his hooves sparked the ground as it traveled towards the trees turning itself into a decent tent.
"Not what I wanted but It'll do until morning." He said happily.
He trotted happily towards the tent elated at keeping his Alchemy when he saw a blue pony flying towards him.
"Great..a welcoming party. I guess it's better to figure out how to fight lke this now then later." Ed said getting into a somewhat awkward fighting stance.
"Relax. I'm not here to hurt you." The Blue pony said. Ed noticed she also had a horn like him. and she was definately taller than him.
"Then what are you here to do?" Ed asked relaxing somewhat.
"I'm here to ask you to come with me to the castle. You don't seem to come from here and I'd like to ask you some questions along with my sister."Explained Luna.
Ed shrugged."Sure. I'll go...But I'm watching you...."
A barely visible blue appeared after Luna(you all know it's Luna) walked over to Ed and they teleported.
A couple minutes later, Luna and Ed were in a random room in the Castle.
"You may rest here until the morning. I'll tell Tia about you and we'll what happens there. Good night..uh..."
"Ed. Edward Elric."
"Ah. Good night Edward Elric."
"Good night, Queen of the Moon."
"What?" This Confused Luna as she'd never been called that before.
"I figured if you live in a castle, then you must be royalty. You're wearing a crown, so you're either a princess or a queen. Also you're blue and on your...uh..flank is a picture of the moon."
"Good deduction skills, you were close. I'm the Princess of the Moon. I rule Equestria along with my sister."
"Aaah."
"Well it looks like you need your rest So I'll leave now."
"Ok. Good night Princess..."
"Luna."
"Goog Night, Princess Luna." Ed said this with a bow.
They parted ways with Ed exploring the room he was in. It was confortable It had a decent sized wnidow and a nice looking bed right near the window. There was also a bookcase on the other side of the room. There was a circular rug in the middle of the floor and the room had a bathroom. The colors all looked generic though.
"Nice room, I guess nothing less would be in a castle for royalty"
"I wonder what the story behind that strange unicorn is." Luna said as she layed in bed. She had finally finished all of her nightly duties and felt tired. She always analyzed the things taking place in the kingdom before she slept or napped.Then She'd advise Tia on what to do. It's how she helped Tia since Tia had more influence over the civilians.
"I guess I can Study his past from his dreams." Luna Said before finally falling asleep.
In the realm of Dreams.....
"Hey...I'm in my old body! Great...but where am I now?" Ed asked looking at him new surroundings...He remembered falling asleep then waking up in an odd building. The walls were marked with alchemy like markings. The colors greatly contrasted as the walls were black but the markings were light blue.
"This is wierd.."Ed said while using his alchemy to summon a spear.
"Why does all the weird stuff happen to me?" Ed complained as he walked around trying to figure this place out. Then he noticed his spear was different. It looked the walls basically. This caught Ed off guard even though he knew the Law of Equivalent exchange only had one loophole; well two considering what he found.
He started back walking around until he met with some one who looked like..."Al...."
What do you think Guys(and Girls)? Good Job or let someone else take over....
