A True "Rarity"

Ok, before I get any further in this story I would like to say thank you for reading. Not trying to seem like an obnoxious blogger just saying thank you for taking your time. It's a long story. I do wish more people could at least see it and give it a chance but meh, can't force them. Therefore, I appreciate your conscious decision to skim through this roughly 100 page "novel" and offer something in return. During the time it took me to create the story I had no idea whatsoever of how to develop characters from the MLP universe. That is why I decided to alter the personalities of our lovely mane six as well as the other ponies, alicorns, and dragon. (I tried my best to make a realistic Discord.) Now that said, I still couldn't write anything through the perspective of those altered pony personalities. I applaud all the writers on here, who capture the essence of each MLP character with stunning precision. That is why I decided to make this an OC story. I needed someone who I could mold to suit my needs for storytelling, and still have a "realistic" persona. That is how Heatstroke was created. Originally I was planning on making him some sort of hero in sense that he helped ponies with problems. Like when he was imagining Spike's death because he wanted to the right thing. He did start out with a major personal reason for coming into Ponyville which was to find Rarity. Nothing much besides that one dimensional goal. Later on, I started to toy around with the whole subconscious and mental narration (from Heatstroke) aspect of the story, and started to change his sole purpose. This turned him into a dynamic character with the ability to change, versus the "programmed" goal he had before. As I started to progress with the story I realized it would have a bit more length then I originally thought, and the new dynamic version was adapted. (Originally the story would have ended with his killing of Rarity, Spike, and a suicide. But with a dynamic character it was easier to let the story flow.) While this has been one of my best decisions in writing this story, it has given me some problems. I want Heatstroke to be a mortal character but he has become invincible in a sense. Back when I had the idea for this story I was particularly interested in the theme of justice in a story. (I had read some O.Henry stories.) I wanted Heatstroke to suffer for what he did, but so far I have let him get away with an awful lot. I started to go for a darker style of storytelling and letting Heatstroke continue with his crimes was an excellent way to go about doing so. However, I am still partial to the idea of justice being done, and I have given Heatstroke (in my opinion) more then enough flaws, and situations where he has experienced pain or emotional stress. His encounter with Pinkie Pie being one of them. I think that I have started to see him as not just a dynamic character, but as a living thing (more or less). Through this evolution of what I think of the character, I think it has gotten harder to write sensible pieces of literature. This should be a good thing, as every good author I can think of, wants the reader to believe the character is a living, breathing thing. Now I'm not writing this note to say I'm a good author. Good authors have their work read and revised by plenty of peers before publishing a story, and have peers contribute to what they write, as well as their story ideas. I don't do any of these things. I don't write down good ideas, plan out my story, have people read my work and give suggestions before revealing it to the public. I may seem very pompous by saying this but I'm trying to be down to earth. All I do is write on a little cell phone in the wee hours of the morning, and then retype my work on my computer and make changes to my writing. The point that I hope get across in this note is that I understand not every person will read this. I would like more reads but I'm happy with passing 800. I also hope that you the reader, will be happy with the decisions I have made with my story; and through this author's note, will be able to make some sense of how I write, and have a deeper understanding of the story. Enjoy.