Chapter 1: The New Pony in Town
The New Pony In Town
This is going to be a third person story.
Walking into Ponyville, he only had one thing on his mind: food, he hadn't eaten in days, and needed a good meal after walking around for so long, seeing a sign saying: Sugar Cube Corner, he was attracted by the word 'Sugar', when he got there, he saw a few ponies and colts staring at him, probably wondering who he was, he was new in town after all, when a single orange pony caught his eye, a pony, with yellow hair, and a southern hat, she was around 5 other ponies, they were, purple, white, yellow, cyan, and pink, they were talking, and he didn't want to interrupt them, so he ordered a cupcake, and a soda, Coke-Cola of course, when he finished, he saw the ponies from earlier leaving, and followed them, after they all split up,he followed the orange one, bu he didn't want to stalk her, so he walked up and tried to start a conversation...
"Hi! I'm Zane" he said, trying to make a good impression.
"Howdy Zane!" she said back.
"She was a southerner" he thought he always loved southern accents
"I'm new around here, so i don't know anyone, you are?" he said, asking for a name.
"Ah'm Applejack, oh, you said you're new, do you have a place to stay?" she asked.
"No, I don't." he said, wondering where she was going with it.
"Well, you can stay with me then!" she replies, happily.
"Yes!!!" was his only thought.
Ast hey reached her apple tree forest, night was approaching, and he saw her house, next to a big barn, as they approached, Applejack pulled a apple off a tree, and handed it to Zane.
"Here, you look hungry." she said.
"Uhh, Okay" he said, not about to turn down an apple.
When they approached the house, They found an older pony, green, with grey hair.
"Howdy Granny Smith!" Applejack said.
"Howdy-doo, who's your friend?" Granny Smith asked
"This is Zane, Zane, this is Granny Smith."
"Hi Granny Smith." Zane said, not wanting to be rude.
"He just moved inta town, and he doesn't have a place ta stay, can he stay here?" she asked her Granny.
"He can stay here, but we don't have any rooms." she replied.
Applejack thought for a minute, then said, "He can sleep in mah room!"
"Yes!!!" he thought again.
He went into he house, then, going into a big room with: a chair, a couch, a T.V., and a staircase, he saw two other ponies, no, one filly, and a colt, the colt, was red, with orange hair, the filly, yellow, with red hair.
"Howdy Applejack." they both said in unison.
"Howdy Bid Mac, Howdy Apple Bloom!" Applejack said back.
"Hi everypony." Zane said.
The big red one walked up to him.
"Howdy." said Big Mac.
"And ah'm Apple Bloom!" the filly cut in.
"Hey." Zane replied.
Applejack grabbed Zane's hoof, and pulled him upstairs, when they got their, he saw the room: tan walls, light blue floor, lavender bed, some lamps on nightstands, a small T.V., and a single window, overlooking the apple farm. Applejack laid down on the bed.
"Come on, get some sleep!" she told him.
"Alright." was all he could say, he wa too tired.
As he laid down on the right side, Applejack on the other, she started scooting over to him, after getting close enough, she laid her head on his chest, he felt her warm body on him, and that made him drowsy, he had almost fallen asleep until he felt a hoof touch his leg, sending a shiver down his spine, he looked at her, and noticed she had been cuddling with him, he then hugged her, and then realized she was asleep.
She has the sexiest face in the world when shes asleep. Zane thought
After a while, Zane fell asleep.
Zane dreamed about Applejack they were in a lit room, a white box room just them, Applejack walked up and kissed him on the lips, her tongue invading his mouth, when she did, he did as well, making her moan, he then felt himself growing an erection, Applejack knocked him over with a nudge, and got on top of him, Zane then broke the kiss, and flipped over, so that he was on top of her, he then kissed her lips, then kissed multiple times, moving lower each time, until he was kissing right above her pussy, he then stopped, breathed, and started eating her out, she moaned, loudly, turning him on more, he then stopped, after her pussy started leaking, he could see her clitoris coming out, so he set her on he, and rubbed it with his hoof, she started moaning, louder by the second, until she was screaming.
"Ahh!!! Zane, that feels so!!!!!"
She couldn't even finish before she screamed and her juices covered his hoof, she was shaking from he undulating pleasure she had received, Zane then got on top of her, and started french kissing her, moaning in his mouth, Applejack was dripping, Zane noticed this moved his erection up, and entered her slowly, ripping her hymen, then, noticing trickles of blood coming out of her, kissed her again to soothe the pain, she moaned in his mouth, as he started fucking her slowly, then, feeling a growing lust, he sped up, until she was full of him, when he felt her womb, he knew he should speed up more, then, plowing into her, he felt an awkward feeling in his cock, he knew what that meant.
"Applejack, I'm gonna come." he said.
"Do it then, big boy." she replied.
With that said, he thought it was the sexiest thing she could've said, as he pushed into her again, he spilled his first load of liquid fire into her, then, she almost screamed with the pleasure of the warmth of his cum, as he kept going, he spilled a few more bursts and, when he was completely out, he just laid there, Applejack on top of him, semen drying on his cock...
Then he woke up.
So, what'd you think, longer and better than my last one, and it's just a start, I'm not gonna be done anytime soon, you can count on that!!!
Chapter 1 - The New Pony In Town (Remake)
This a remake.
Begin!!!
I use a souhern accent for the apple family, so ah -is- I, ta -is- to etc.
A new stallion walked into Ponyvillle, his name: Zane, he was leaving his home in Skyville (cheesey name i know) because well, he got sick of being around only pegasi, he wanted more variety, so he took some belongings, put them in his saddlebag, and left for someplace else, he wandered into Ponyville after a few days, and, sick of eating bread, he wanted to go to some restaurant for food.
He saw a place with a sign saying "Sugar Cube Corner" so he went in, imagining a restaurant, he saw a bunch of ponies eating... cupcakes, he walked up to a counter, with a yellow earth pony, with three cakes as a cutie mark, he ordered a cupcake, and some tea, (what, guys like tea too) when it arrived at his table, he ate his cupcake, and drank his tea, when he noticed a few ponies at another table, and one caught his eye: Orange, with yellow hair, a southern hat, and three apples for a cutie mark, when he finished, he walked up to the group of ponies, her pink friend gasped a " :O " type gasp and ran off, while her purple friend asked...
"Are you new in town?"
"Yeah, i'm new." he replied.
"Well, that's why, she sets up parties for new ponies, and stallions, I'm Twilight sparkle, These are..." she pointed to her friends: "Applejack "Howdy!", Rarity "Hello" , Rainbow Dash "Hi" , Fluttershy "uhh, hi" and Pinkie just ran off so uhh... who are you? she ended with a smile.
"I'm Zane." he said, smiling and pointing to himself with one hoof.
Applejack immiediately cut in "Howdy there Zane." with a slightly seductive voice.
"Uhh hi!" he said back, not really thinking clearly, seduced.
At about that time, everyone was finishing their cupcakes, and they drank their tea.
"So..." Applejack asked "you have a place to stay?"
By now, Zane has clearly noticed she's coming onto him "Step one... check!" he thought as he replied.
With a: "Nope." wondering what she would say next.
"Well," she said putting some thought into it, then continuing on with, "i guess you can stay at mah place."
"Thanks, i guess I will, until I get a house." was Zane's only reply.
"Well, we'd better get going, I wanna introduce you ta mah family!" she said, sounding upbeat.
"OK,let's go!"
On their way to the house, Zane talks to Applejack.
"So, where do you live?" Zane asked.
"Oh, ah live over there." she pointed to a farm, with a nice house.
"Oh, so, how many spare rooms do you have?" Zane asked, curious.
"Well, ah hadn't thought about that, we don't have any. she replied, panicked.
"It's alright." Zane said, in an attempt to calm her.
"Well, ah suppose ya could sleep in mah room..." she said, again slightly seductively.
"Step two... check!" he thought.
"Well, we're almost there."
"So, you work on a farm?" he asked, again, curious.
"Yup, ah sure do!" she replied.
"Cool!" he said, looking at her with a seduced face.
"Uhh, what're yah doin'? she aid, looking at him with one eyebrow up.
Snapped back into reality, he said "Uhh, oh, sorry, i left home a while back, and well, i find myself staring at random stuff as I think about it." he lied.
"Oh, OK, ah'm sorry." she said, thinking she'd hurt him.
"No no, it's alright." he said.
"Okay, if you say so, ah'll try mah best ta make you feel at home here, okay?"
"Thanks!" he said.
By now, they were walking into the house, Zane saw a green pony, with white hair, and an apple pie cutie mark, Applejack waked up to her and said, "Howdy, Granny!"
"Howdy doo!" she replied.
"Uhh, Zane, this is Granny Smith." she told him.
"Hi, Granny Smith." he said.
"Applejack, who's this?" she questioned.
"This is Zane, he moved inta town, and well, he doesn't have a place ta stay." she replied.
"Okay, well, have fun with your friend." she said.
Zane knew she didn't mean it like this, but that gave Zane some perverted thoughts, he thought he felt a nosebleed about to happen.
"Well, let's go inside!" Applejack said, pushing Zane along.
They went into a big room, a living room, with a kitchen, and a few doors, he guessed they were storage, and a bathroom, he then saw a stallion, and a filly, the stallion: red, with yellowish orange hair, and a big green apple cutie mark, the filly: yellow, with red hair, and no cutie mark.
"Howdy Big Mac, howdy Apple Bloom" Applejack said.
"Howdy." was the reply from both of them, but the stallion, Zane guessed was Big Mac said it more calmly.
"Who's your friend, ah haven't seen him before?" the filly Apple Bloom asked.
"This is Zane, he's new in town, Big Mac, what time is it?"
Big Mac looked at the clock, and said to her "It's 8:47, you otta get some sleep, you gotta buck tomorrah.
As they walked up the stairs, Big Mac stopped Zane, and whispered to him "Don't do nuthin ta get on mah bad side, son..."
Zane nodded, and continued walking, he got up and Applejack opened her room door, her room was nice, a single row of apples for a wallpaper, a window, two pillows, an apple covered blanket, a lamp on each side of the bed, on a nightstand, and the design on the lampshade, shined little dark apples all over the room.
"Nice room you've got here." he said, impressed.
"Thanks, and now it's your room too!" she replied.
"Oh, yeah, Big Mac said we should get some sleep.
They walked over to the bad, and as Applejack climbed into the right side, Zane climbed into the left.
As he laid there, he looked a her, she looked back at Zane, she had the sexiest face ever.
About 3 hours later, Zane, still wide awake, looked at Applejack again, she was awake too, she looked back at him.
"Hey." Zane managed to get out.
"Howdy, why're you still up?" she asked.
"I can't sleep." he replied.
"Oh, neither can ah." she said.
She started scooting along the bed, until she was resting her head on him, and Zane felt an explosion of pleasure from her warmth, he felt an erection growing, and tried to push those thoughts out of his mind, it didn't work, so he stopped trying, she must've noticed his discomfort, and she asked what was wrong, he replied with a quick "Nothing!"
She was not stupid, and that kind of quick response and alarmed voice, meant he must've been embarrassed, she took a moment to think, then realized what he was talking about.
"Uhh, Zane, ever since ah met ya, i've had some, feelins' for ya, you know?" she told him.
"So, so did I." Zane confessed.
Zane then rolled over on top of her, with then both still under the blanket, he moved down to her pussy, and started to eat her out softly, then after a while, he started bringing his tongue in and out of her, she moaned softly, and made the sexiest face ever.
He then brought a hoof up and tweaked her nipple, then brought his head of of her dripping lips, and bit her nipple hard, she gasped, he then kissed her on the lips, as her tongue slithered its way into his mouth, he then brought his tongue into her mouth, their tongues danced as Zane moved his cock up, and brought it into her, she whinnied in pain, as he pushed through her hymen, sending trickles of blood out of her, he tweaked her nipple again, to ease the pain.
Zane then stared thrusting in and out of her, she moaned in a really sexy seducing tone, then Zane felt a weird feeling build up in his cock...
"Applejack, i'm gonna, i'm gonna!" was all he could get out before he spilled a load of liquid fire into her, she moaned extremely loud, doubling the sexiness, making him speed up, he fired a few more times into her, before slumping down on top of her, and rolling her on top of him, as he hugged her, they both fell into sleep until the next morning...
Well, i fixed the whole "no stops", made it even longer, fixed errors, made it not a fail, what else could you ask for?