The Baker (redone)

On a beautiful, sunny day, the birds were chirping, ponies were laughing, talking, and having a good time, and Twilight and her friend, Applejack, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, & Rarity, were going to visit Pinkie Pie at her bakery. They walked into the bakery, the inside smelled like freshly baked bread. Pinkie was no where in sight, instead a different pony was running the bakery. The pony wore a dark grey cloak, that almost covered his entire body, the skin that was visible, was dark blue.
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They walked up to the pony, Twilight said, “Hi do you know where Pinkie is?”

The pony said, in a dark & ominous, “Pinkie Pie has left on vacation. I tell her you stopped by. Where are my manners, my name Mr. Cloud.”

Twilight smiled & said, “Pleasure to meet you. I’m Twilight Sparkle, this is Applejack, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, & Rarity.”

Mr. Cloud said, “The pleasure is all mine, it’s nice to finally meet the rest of the element bearers.”

Twilight said, as they were about to leave, “Well, It was nice meeting you, but we must head off.”

As Twilight & her friends began to leave, they heard the door squeak open behind them,& Mr. Cloud say, “Oh Applejack & Fluttershy, could you help me with some stuff. I just need you to help me getting stuff out of my warehouse, & taste some apple desserts.

Applejack & Fluttershy said, “Okay.” Then turned to their friends, & Applejack said, “You guy go on ahead we meet up with you later.”

Mr. Cloud said, “Great, Thanks, for your help. Thanks for your help.” Then he led them into the bakery.

5 hours later, Twilight went to Sweet Apple Acre, she could see the apple trees a mile away. When she got there, she saw Applebloom. She walked up to Applebloom & said, “Hey Applebloom, is AJ here?”

Applebloom shook her head, & said, “I haven’t seen her. Hey Big Mac, have you seen Applejack?”

He poke his head out of the barn, said, “nope” then went back in.

Applebloom turned back to Twilight, then said, “Sorry Twilight, it seem Applejack isn’t here. Maybe check in later.”

Twilight said, just before leaving, “Okay, well, thanks for your time. Bye”

Applebloom said, “Bye.”

Twilight went to Fluttershy’s house. Once she got there, she knocked on the door, no came to the door. After a few minutes of waiting, she said, to herself, “Odd, Fluttershy should have opened the door by now. I guess she isn’t home. I’ll check later.”

This went on for a few days, the whole town knew something was wrong, ponies began disappearing all over. Twilight had a feeling that this was just the beginning.