On Earth, a boy sets out to write a story after being encouraged to do so after making his first attempt mere days earlier.

This. Is that story.

Sort of an improvised story about a young Earth male being thrust into Equestria after a night out drinking possibly.
Merely a start to test whether or not people like it.

No idea how proper writers write, but I'm sort of making this up as I go along. And trying to tone down on my apparently "vague", "Tim O'Brien" style writing.

EDIT: So as I apparentley don't understand how to add a password to view this story, and can't get proper "pre-readers", I guess I will leave that up to you. If you see any spelling errors, or have any ideas; go hard, tell me my mistakes.
As for your ideas, I can't promise anything. I will write for myself, and if people like it, great, if not, I don't care. I'm not here to please everyone I possibly can.

ANOTHER EDIT:

So according to my reviews; I suck. That, doesn't bother me. What does, is not knowing why.
So tell me,

What is it that makes this story so bad?