My Little Pony: Raze Redemption
Episode 1: The Art of Apology Part 1
Load Full StoryNext ChapterIn the magical land of Equestria, there live two sisters, The Sun and The Moon. But now, there are four more princesses, the Princess of Friendship and Princess of Love. Four of these rulers play a big role to Equestria future. No matter how huge and small the deed is, they play a big role and hold the huge role of Equestria. The four Princesses were Celestia, Luna, Cadance and Twilight. Each of them represents their own ability, Celestia with the ability to control the sun, Luna with the ability to control the moon, Cadance with the ability to understand and detect love and Twilight with the ability to share the magic of Friendship. However, three of them were defeated by one male alicorn that filled with hatred and darkness. Fortunately, with the help of Princess of Friendship, they manage to reform him. And now, Twilight and her friends, the harnesser of six other elements, will try their best to teach him the magic of Friendship…
“Anyway, buckle your seatbelt, this is gonna be a bumpy ride.” A voice of Raze came out nowhere.
Another morning in PonyVille, the birds are singing, the flowers are blooming and the ponies are minding their own businesses. In the Castle of Friendship, one male alicorn was sleeping peacefully. Suddenly, he wakes up with full energy and determination.
“GOODDDDDDDDD MORNING, PONYVILLE! IT’S TIME FOR THE BIGGEST CHANGE OF MY LIFE!” Raze shout in excitement. He gets off his bed and start stretching. He walks out as Starlight goes out.
“Good morning, Starlight!” He said before starts running towards the showers.
“Good morning, Raze!” Starlight shouted back as Raze was far away.
In the showers, he hums a song
Another new day~
Another new day~
It’s time to see what I can do today~
Another new day~
Another new day~
It’s easy to say, but it’s hard to play
He finished showering, goes back to his room. He pick up his favorite cloak and goes to the kitchen in excitement. In there, he met Twilight and Spike who happen to sit on their chair.
“Oh, hi, Raze! Looking excited today, don’t you?” Twilight greeted Raze.
“Of course, Twilight! Hi Spike, nice to see you again!” said Raze greet the little dragon.
“Yeah, whatever.” Spike reply in a cold tone.
That makes Raze motivation goes a bit lower. But it didn’t destroy his determination.
“Welp, I’ll go outside and see what I can help with the others!” Raze said.
“Alright, see you later!” Twilight replied.
“Bye!” Raze walk away as he teleported a toast and bit the corner of the bread. As he left, Twilight looked at Spike in anger, “Spike, what was that all about?!”
“What? He hurt Cadance? Do you think I will forgive that easily?” Spike replied.
“Ugh…” Twilight muttered.
Raze was walking around the town, he look around for anyone that needed his help. He walks on the park and saw an earth filly has her kite stuck in the tree. Raze came close, grabbed the kite with his magic and passed it to the filly. It makes the filly excited.
“Thank you, mister!” She said in excitement.
“No problem! Have fun and watch out!” Raze walked away. He looked around again in hope there’s another pony that needed his help. Suddenly, he saw three mares are arguing.
“No, this one is great if displayed here!” said a mare named Lily.
“No, if we display this here it will attract more customers!” said a mare named Daisy in anger.
“No, we should put this! This will look more elegant for the shop!” said the mare named Rose. They kept arguing.
Raze step into the argument and mixed the flower into a bouquets and displayed it outside.
“How about you mix it all together? It will look better!” Raze suggested.
The mares looked at the bouquet and smiled. Daisy replied, “Hey, that’s not a bad idea!”
“Yeah, thanks for the-” they paused when the mares looked at Raze. They immediately froze.
Three of them immediately run inside the shop, avoiding Raze. Raze looked at them with confusion but he decided to ignore it and walk away. The three mares who watches from the inside sighed in relieve. Raze kept walking in happiness. Suddenly, he slowly realize, when he looked around, all the ponies are avoiding him even it meant to jump in the river. He looked around in confusion. Finally, he saw Lyra and BonBon walking into his direction. He immediately ran towards them.
“Hi, Lyra! Hi, BonBon! Can I ask you a…question?” Raze asks them.
“Oh hi, Raze! Sure what is it?” Lyra replied.
“Well, I don’t know if you girls notice but…why everyone is avoiding me?” Raze asks.
“Oh…about that…” Lyra looked towards BonBon in hope she would able to answer.
BonBon looked towards Raze in serious mood, “*sigh* I don’t want to make you mad or sad but…the other are still afraid of you.”
“Pardon, did you say they afraid of me?” Raze asks, trying to confirm.
Both mares nodded in synchronized. Raze looked towards the floor, “B-but why?” he said in a sad tone.
“Well, everyone knows that you hurt the princesses. It seems it’s just us who sees the light on you, I guess.” BonBon replied.
“Y-You guess?” Raze replied. BonBon just shrugged.
“What I have to do then? Make it up with the princesses?” Raze asked.
“Well, maybe if you do…they will forgive you!” Lyra replied happily.
“Meh, it’s not a pretty bad suggestion.” BonBon added.
“How I’m supposed to do that? I can’t even enter Canterlot like this!” Raze replied.
“Hey, don’t you think you have some close friend that could bring you in?” BonBon raised her left eyebrow. Raze slowly trying to connect his brain cells. Finally, he understood what she said, “You’re right! Thanks BonBon!” He ran back towards the castle in excitement, ignoring everypony that instantly ran away as soon as he gets close.
Lyra said towards BonBon, “Do you think Princess Celestia would forgive him?”
“What do you expecting? The worst she can do is saying no right?” BonBon replied.
“Are you serious? Are you trying to kill yourself?” Twilight look at Raze while reading a book in the castle library.
“How come I can die after asking for forgiveness?” Raze looked at her in confusion.
“Hey, you hurt the princess. Of course she hates you.” Spike interrupted while cleaning the library.
“SPIKE!” Twilight shouted in anger.
“Hey, h-he’s not wrong.” Raze trying to defend Spike.
“See? I told’ cha.” Spike added more.
“SPIKE!” Twilight shouted again. She looks towards Raze, “Come on Raze don’t be upset. We can try other way to talk with Celestia!”
“Welp, I hope so.” Raze walked away, going into his room.
Twilight look towards Spike, “Spike, can you at least treat him well?! I know you are mad at him but at least watch your word!”
“Hey, Raze hurt Cadance! How can I forgive him if he hurt our sister-in-law?!” Spike replied in anger.
Twilight froze. What Spike says was right. Raze indeed hurt Cadance. Even Cadance is still mad at Raze. He might say the truth, but Raze try to make it all up.
“*sigh* maybe you’re right. But Raze is trying to make this up, he want to be a changed colt, Spike.” Twilight replied.
“Whatever.” Spike replied whilst cleaning the shelf from dust. Twilight just grunted. She continued, “Listen, I want you to write a letter to Princess Celestia.”
“Ugh, alright…” Spike stops cleaning and pulled out a scroll and a feather for writing magically from his back.
“Alright, write this.” Twilight added. She cleared her throat,
Dear Princess Celestia,
I want to talk with you. This is about Raze. If you can, can you bring Princess Luna? He wants to talk with both of you.
Your student,
Twilight Sparkle
Spike rolled the scroll and sends it through his fire magic. After a few seconds, another reply immediately came from Celestia. Spike opened the scroll and passed it to Twilight.
She read it,
Dear Twilight Sparkle,
I’m afraid I had to decline the request as the pony you mentioned was in the Canterlot Blacklist. I’m sorry once again; we’re not going to talk with him.
Your mentor,
Princess Celestia
Twilight eyes were widened. This is than she expected. She didn’t even believe that Raze was in a blacklist in Canterlot.
“What I’m going to do?” Twilight looked in worries.
In Raze’s room, he tries to create a plan how to make up with Celestia and Luna.
“How do I make this up? The damage I’ve done is beyond what I could think. The apologize I made must be beyond the comprehensible.” He thinks out loud. Any ideas that come will eventually rejected by himself as it will result in ‘not good enough’ or ‘too much’. He leaning back to his chair, “What should I give them?” he said.
Suddenly, a spectacular idea came to his mind, “That’s it! I bet they will love this!” Raze speak in excitement. He goes out of his room when Twilight was about to talk with him.
“Raze, where you are going?!” Twilight shouts in confusion.
“I have to meet with the best party and baker in Equestria!” Raze shouted back.
Twilight just stands there. Froze and unable to react to that sudden leave.
“You want me to bake a strawberry cake that taste so good that it make the princess apologies you?” Pinkie asks in confusion.
“Yes, I need to do it now!” Raze replied.
“Sure, come on let’s get to the SugarCube Corner!” Pinkie replied.
“Yes!” Raze mutter happily. He follows Pinkie in excitement.
“Before we can create it, we must gather the best of the best ingredients in the Equestria!” Pinkie talked.
“Where should I go to get these?” Raze asked.
Pinkie turned around and looked towards Raze in serious face, “You must find the best honey that came from the zaps bees,”
Slowly, its shows Raze that fighting against the zaps bees in the Hayseed Swamp.
“You must debate with the Strawberry Fanatic not near from here,”
Raze now are debating with a strawberry fanatic at her door house.
“You have to find the best icing in the Griffonstone,”
Raze are fighting against multiple theft to go meet with the griffons.
“And finally, you have to find the best flour that only available in the store once a month,”
Raze are fighting with the customers for a flour with a brand called ‘Wheatney Flour’.
“After you gather all of this ingredients, we are able to make the super duper tasty delicious Strawberry Cake!” Pinkie replied; she now standing on the counter while Raze was leaning back against the counter.
“So…*pants*…can...*pants*…we…*pants*…do…*pants*…it…*pants*…now?” Raze asks in exhaustion.
“Come on, what are we waiting for?” Pinkie called Raze that still leaning in exhaustion with a few bruises.
“Hold on, I’m recovering.” Raze pulls out a sugar sack and chugged it down. He stands up immediately, “Alright, come on!”
Both mare and colt immediately does their part in baking the cake. Pinkie also teaches Raze a little bit about baking a cake. They shared a laughs together. After the cake was cooked into the oven, Raze look towards Pinkie with a grateful face and speaks, “Thanks for helping me. You’re such a good friend!”
“Oh, that’s nothing. I always like to lend a hand whenever you need it!” Pinkie replied.
Raze looked outside, “Hey, anyone that have someone like you would be lucky.”
Pinkie tilted her head in confusion, “Why did you say that?”
“Well, you’re easy going, funny, sweet, pretty and kind! You always be the one that would make anyone laughs! That what’s make you special.” Raze replied. That statement leave Pinkie’s eyes widened and had her face flustered. She never received such compliments from a colt. When Raze turned his head around, their eyes were meets each other. It was a long stare between them with Raze giving her a warm smile. Her cheeks become redder and her heartbeat getting faster. Suddenly, the sound of the oven interrupted. Raze grinned, “It was done!” he walked towards the oven, opened and pulls out a spectacular and tasty looking cake. He put it on the counter and speaks, “Well, ain’t that looking tasty?”
Pinkie, however, she still looked at Raze with her cheeks that still blushing. Raze looked towards her, “Urm, Pink? Why do your face red? Are you sick?”
Pinkie snapped back to reality and replied, “Oh no, no, no! It’s nothing! It’s just…uhh…it’s hot in here you know?! The oven turned up the heat! *nervous chuckles*”
“Oh, alright, Pinkie. Anyway, thank you for helping me. Now I have to deliver this!” Raze lifted the cake with his magic and putted it a wagon outside while being looked by Pinkie through the window. He carefully put the cake and shouted, “Bye, see you later!” Raze said and waved before leaving the shop. Pinkie just watched as Raze slowly disappears from her sight. Pinkie gave out a thought, “No wonder Twilight liked him. He’s really the one who would confess. He didn’t even hesitate to compliment.” She stared through the street that filled with ponies walking around. From far away, a lavender alicorn is spying Pinkie, “What did he says to Pinkie?” Twilight said in her thought. She suddenly widened her eyes, “Why I’m thinking about that?! My goal is to follow Raze to see what he was trying to do!” Twilight immediately flies away, trying to catch up with Raze that had left her far away. From the shop, Pinkie can see a silhouette of an alicorn flying.
“Is that Twilight?” Pinkie said in shock.
Raze were sitting in special part of train where they put any cargo that a little bit bigger, he sit with his cake next to him. He stared outside. He’s the only one in there as he is the only one that carrying a big cargo.
‘What they’re going to think about this cake?’ Raze said in thought. He sighed. Suddenly, the door to the cargo opened, revealing one pearl mare with a purple mane that pulling a stroll with hanging dresses.
“Rarity? What are you doing here?” Raze look her to his confusion.
“Raze? I want to ask that too!” Rarity replied.
“Well who should answer first?” Raze asks. Both of them were in silence. Rarity stood while staring Raze.
Rarity sits the opposite of Raze and looked outside just like Raze and replied, “Well, I had a boutique in Canterlot that I want to visits. I also bring some of my latest creation for display honestly.”
“Oh, well I’m going there to meet with Princess Celestia and Princess Luna to make up the entire thing I’ve done.” Raze replied.
Rarity looked Raze immediately, “Are you being serious?”
Raze looked at Rarity in confusion, “Yeah, what’s wrong?”
“I guess you haven’t heard about it, aren’t you?” Rarity touched her chin.
“Heard what?” Raze asked.
“Well…if you don’t know yet…Princess Celestia has put you name into one of the Canterlot blacklist. To be honest, you might be the first pony that actually makes her so mad that she became merciless.” Rarity replied.
Raze looked in disbelief, “You’ve got to be kidding me.”
“Sorry darling, I usually not a very good liar, but when it comes to gossips I might be the first one to hear it.” Rarity replied. Raze looked outside and sighed.
“Raze, darling, you can find another way to apologize! Maybe you can send them a gift from PonyVille…I heard that Hearth’s Warming Eve will arrive sooner.” Rarity replied.
“I need to apologize immediately. I can’t bear to have the princesses that have a revenge on me! I just want to have a good new life! I can’t waste this chance. If that means I have to fight the guards.” Raze replied. That makes Rarity amazed by Raze determination to apologize.
“Well, I’m impressed by you determination, Raze. I hope your apology was accepted by the royalty.” Rarity replied.
“Yeah, thanks. Anyway can I see your dress?” Raze looked towards Rarity in excitement.
“Oh of course you can!” she passed one of the dresses to Raze for him to inspect. Raze rotate the dress over and over again.
“So, what do you think? Is it a divine dress?” Rarity asks.
“Wow, this dress is really good…no wonder it’s good. Just look who tailored the dress.” Raze says.
“Oh darling, it’s just a simple dress. You don’t have to be so excited.” Rarity replied.
“What? No, Rarity! This dress is simply fabulous! The sewing work, the design…it’s all fit! I bet if you wear this you’ll look even better!” Raze replied with no hesitant.
‘I bet if you wear this you’ll look even better!’ the words echoes in Rarity’s mind. She flustered and replied, “*chuckles* Oh Raze, you such a flatterer. You don’t have to be that funny you know?”
“*giggled* I’m not flattering, silly. This design and colour suits you, Rarity. If you did notice, the dark blue color really suits you. You are an elegant and generous mare. Of course this fitted for you!” Raze didn’t look towards Rarity while talking. He still examines the design the dress. Rarity in the other hands, she starts to fluster.
‘Is that an attempt to be romantic? What is that all about?’ said Rarity’s thought. Suddenly, she remembered what Applejack says,
“This is one of the dumbest colt ah’ have ever met. He doesn’t even understand the word coltfriend!”
Rarity thinking out loud, “Oh Rarity, of course he acts like that! *laughs*”
“Urm, why are you laughing?” Raze asked.
“Oh, it was nothing darling, some funny memory that I had with Sassy Saddles before.” Rarity lied.
Screeek! That’s sound of the train stopping at the Canterlot station.
“Welp, we arrived, Here Rarity, have this dress. Thanks for letting me to see the dress.” Raze talked to Rarity. “Your generosity suits your appearance Rarity, anyone that had you should be lucky.” Raze said before leaving the train. That last word really makes Rarity fluster.
“Anyone…that had me is lucky?” Rarity muttered while had her face blushed.
Raze is walking through Canterlot, he realize that everyone around him is looking at him with fear and disgust but he just ignored it. After a few long walk, Raze finally reached the castle. When he’s about to enter the yard, a voice of mare shouted, “Hey, what are you doing here?!”
Raze turned around to see a female guards accompanied by two other guards.
“I’m here to deliver this cake to Princess Celestia.” Raze replied calmly.
“Sorry, any of the blacklists is restricted from entering the castle.” She replied.
“Can you at least let me once?” Raze pleaded.
“No, in fact, you will be sent back to the place where you came from. Don’t you read the blacklist notice? You’re also restricted from entering Canterlot.” She stands on guard, making the other two guards to stand on guard too.
“What if I’m insisted to send this cake to Celestia? What you’re going to do?” Raze replied, start to go into fighting stance.
“Then…we will have to do it the hard way.” She replied.
“Go ahead; I wanna to see you try.” He replied.
She whistled. Suddenly, a few more guards appear. Pegasus, unicorns and the earth pony came around and surrounds Raze and his cake.
Raze look towards his cake, “Buckle your seatbelt. This is gonna be a bumpy ride.” He looked towards the female guard, “If you’re a captain, go ahead and give them orders. I’m ready.”
The female royal guard shouted, “Earth ponies, charge! Pegasus, bring out the gust of wind and unicorns, follow my leads!”
Each of them do their own parts, it’s now a bunch of royal guards against a One Colt Army (and his cake.)
Rarity had arrived to her boutique. As she entered the boutique, she was surprised when Twilight was waiting in there with Sassy Saddles next to her.
“Twilight? What a surprise to see you here!” Rarity said.
“Hi, Rarity, I want to ask, have you seen Raze?” Twilight ask to her worries.
“We met at the train station, earlier but now, he’s already heading towards the castle. Is there anything wrong, darling?” Rarity asks.
“I want to meet him. I have something important to tell him.” Twilight replied.
Rarity smiled mischievously, “Oh, sure darling, I know you really wanna talk with him, don’t you?”
“Rarity, this is not funny! This is serious!” Twilight replied.
Rarity chuckled, “Of course darling, you and Raze will-”
“RARITY, IF WE DON’T FIND RAZE, HE MIGHT BE BANISHED TO THE MOON BY PRINCESS CELESTIA!” Twilight replied.
Rarity’s eyes widened, “WHAT?!”
Earlier after Twilight received the first scroll, a second scroll came in.
“What now?” Spike passed the second scroll.
Twilight opened the scroll and read it, her eyes widened. She immediately ran to chase Raze. Spike look at her stepsister in confusion. He picked up the paper,
Dear Twilight Sparkle,
I also forgot to mention, if Raze hurt one of the guards of the Canterlot, I will not hesitate to banish the alicorn to the moon. Both I and my sister had talked about it and both of us had agreed about it.
Your mentor,
Princess Celestia
“Sweet Luna, I know the princess hate him but I don’t know they hate him like this!” Spike said.
“That’s what it says!” Twilight explained.
“If it says so…we have to find him!” Rarity shouted.
Suddenly, they heard a few sounds of magic blast and metal clanks. Rarity and Twilight look into each other in worries.
The female guard stands in disbelief; she looked around, all of the line she has already gone. All of them dropped sleep. She didn’t believe what just happened. In just a minutes, the alicorn was able to cast a sleeping spell towards multiple ponies either they’re Pegasus, unicorn and earth pony. What more impressive, everytime he taken a hit, he didn’t hit them back, instead, he casted a sleeping spell on them. What making it even more impressive, he was able to cast magic without exhausted. Raze was tired but still standing while trembling, gasping for air.
“How you still able to stand with that amount of magic that you release?” she asks in amazement.
“Endurance, my friends. I got enough training and ability to withstand amount of magic that I release.” Raze replied. But still, he had released more than what he can withstand.
“Endurance? How come endurance was an element of magic control?” She asks in confusion. She continued, “Whatever, I will not stop trying to send you back where you came from.”
Compared to the female guards, Raze was badly injured but still standing. The guard asks a last question, “Why did you hit them back?”
Raze asked again, “What?”
“Why don’t return the attack?” she asks again.
“Oh, I’m a changed colt. I would never hurt the guards.” Raze replied.
“But they attacked you.” She replied.
“They attacked me because I’m the blacklist. They’re just doing their job. Now enough, go ahead, do your worst.” Raze said. She didn’t took anymore time, she immediately charged her horn and starts running towards him. Raze closed his eyes, accepting his fate. Twilight and Rarity arrived in time.
“RAZE!!!!!!!!!!!!”
Suddenly a strong beam came out from the sky, making the guards to stop attacking.
“Enough!” A Canterlot voice echoes.
They all look to the skies, Celestia was descending. She landed and look towards the guard.
“Enough. Your works stops here, Spear.” Celestia ordered. She stopped and gave Celestia a bow. Celestia turned around to see Raze that heavily damaged. She stared him coldly. Twilight immediately try to gets closer.
“Twilight, stand there, wherever you are. Don’t interrupt my talk with him.” Celestia ordered. Twilight immediately stops. Celestia continued, “This is just going to be a private conversation…between both of us.” Celestia said before teleported Raze and herself somewhere else.
Twilight finally formed a horror face as the thing that she afraid of will be happening.
Author's Note
OHHHHHHHHH BOYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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