My first fic so criticism is very much welcome.

A long time ago there was a nice Colt with the Name sour Viez. He had a wonderful Job as Royal Guard (and in a position where he can see the most beautiful ponykind, and relatively new Ruler of Equestria Princess Celestia every day), he two great friends and a loving Family (even through twin-sister Sweet Viez can be very annoying at times).
In short he has a very good live, and it reaches its climax on the day Celestia asks him out for a date. But like everypony knows, when your on Top the only way is down.