This is my first attempt at writing anything longer then 5 paragraphs. I'd appreciate it if you could point out any problems I made in writing it or any ideas for the story. Please, don't be rude about it and say that it is terrible, just say what I need to fix, thanks. Thanks to Time Centurion for helping me out with the corrections and stuffs. Check out some of his stories :D http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Time+Centurion

This is about a pony, nicknamed teal, who comes to Ponyville a few months after his nineteenth birthday, hoping to make some new friends and explore the new town. I'm pretty much making the story up as I go, if people actually enjoy the story I'll plan a bit more. By making it up as I go, I just mean I don't have a rough draft, I write it and fix the errors as I go. Planning would just make it a bit longer. I will now think through most of where the chapters will go. Not going to think out every word, nor will I stay with what I said. I'll still be making it up as go for some of it, 'cause I write best like that, but I will think about what its going to end at. I'll also try to write the chapters with 1,000 words +, but that might take a bit longer :3, But I got all the time I need. I hope you will enjoy and I may change the title and/or chapter titles. No cover art as of yet. Pm me if you find something good :D

One last thing, right now it is rated teen because it will a little bit more dark in the future chapters, may even turn mature. Just some gore The ponies are human with the wings and horns and still all in Ponyville, just the appearance has changed. Also cutie marks are noticeable, either on pants or some other piece of clothing, and everyone knows what it is. Tags will change later on, when I get the darker chapters it will be added in the tags. :3

I'm currently working on a better story, as a collab with Time Centurion. I'll finish the dark part two tomorrow, and I won't be able to write a good ending. Its boring anyways. Use the elements to go inside his head and get rid of his madness. Wouldn't be two parts. If the 4 people reading this story actually want me to write it, comment it and I will. If not, I'll finish the dark and that'll be the only ending. That's the real ending regardless though.